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Jul 19, 2024 at 7:24pm
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Re: Show Action without describing to the reader...
For a short story, you can easily leave out the word "while" and just use the verb.

Running, Joey yelled, "Hey, I'll help you with that."

or leave out the speech tag entirely and only use his words and his actions.

"Hey, I'll help you with that." Joey burst into a sprint.

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