Yes, the scene works. It was actually a nice continuation to your original short.
I really liked the tension between the Lady and Tamsin, and Tamsin's own inner conflict. And Ripper is a typical cat. Don't tell me otherwise. And you really have a knack for painting vivid settings ā I felt like I was the fly on the wall watching the ceremony and the women's battle of the wits.
You didn't review "Christmas Lights " , but I'm humbled it stirred you up a bit. It was my first try at erotica.
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And you really have a knack for painting vivid settings ā I felt like I was the fly on the wall watching the ceremony and the women's battle of the wits.
, but I'm humbled it stirred you up a bit.
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