I believe a good solve for this is to limit David to not being able to split at all. He is definitely overpowered by his ability to form a small army. I would be interested in an arc where he doesn’t discover he can split himself, and he focuses fully on discovering what happened.
Stages of the story would be:
1. Beginning: he is transformed into goo.
2. The shock of change/ He discovers he can move.
3. He discovers he can take someone over
4. He adjusts to learning his power (maybe jumps between two people on accident)
5. Focuses on his journey to figure out what happened/ how he can go back to normal.
6. Infiltrates the base.
7. Discovers what happened.
8. Figures out a resolution.
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