I'm not going to do a long review on this story. I love the scenes you have created. I have not read the full story, but I do get a sense of hopelessness in the characters.
As normal, I found no punctuation or grammatical errors. Thank you for posting. You covered all the bases, a beginning, a middle, and an end for the short story.
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