After looking things over, I decided I preferred the bigger revision that Masktrix proposed. The light edit, similar to what rugal suggested, would work okay, but the bigger revision, which is now posted, fits a little better with the continuity established elsewhere. It also justifies more choices—five of them now!—at the end of the revised chapter.
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