Good to see you jumped right in and posted a chapter and Bio.
I took a quick read of your first chapter and found the story intriguing. It's sure to draw readers for the whole novel. It does seem a bit long, but it keeps attention and moves the reader along. I'm sure you'll get reviews with details, although making it shorter as a couple chapters or so (there's some obvious places to do this without losing anything or anyone) is worth considering.
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