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Rated: 18+ · Message Forum · LGBTQ+ · #2075661
For authors who have survived abuse, trauma, or disaster and you wish to write about it
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Mar 10, 2016 at 12:49am
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Re: OT a short novel about struggle with mental illness
I love the way you began this. It was almost poetry.

However, there were many grammatical errors. Also, your story got bogged down with unnecessary facts. It would be improved if you trim the story down to only what is important to you. If I could rate it, I'd give it a 4.
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OT a short novel about struggle with mental illness · 03-09-16 8:35pm
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