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Brief description:
Did someone designate today National Accost Geneva day? Geneva Emory sorely suspected they had. Attacked and manhandled. Nearly drown and kidnapped by eight gorgeous muscle-bound men who all claim to be vampyre royalty. Hunted relentlessly by hundreds of unbonded male vamps and Lucifer's demon minion army, all wanting to capture her and harness her extraordinary power. Only one of her kidnappers calls himself her protector, Tyson De Marco, but he's the one who can hurt her the most. What's a warm-blooded Necromancer to do? Go into hiding with the help of the exclusive VPP---Vampyre Protection Program, of course.