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Thank you for all the feedback about this. I appreciate it. Context? Well, part of the reason I used "man" and "woman" was because the entire book I particularly is set entirely from Damon POV. All the main characters are Damons. However, Damons do have a superiority complex. Elves are seen but in the Damon capital the only elves you see are there as servants working for Damon nobility. I don't actually give a single elf a distinct personality or name. Humans appear in the book, but only a handful have names and those are only used in passing - actually, I can think of only two humans named in book I. Because it all revolves around Damons, I didn't want to make it feel confusing or unnatural by always using terms that would separate the reader from the main characters.

In book II, there are a handful of other characters who are either full human or full elf, but still a large section are returning Damons from book I.

I can see Damons as rather insistent that they are not human since a lot of Damons pretty much don't even acknowledge humans as a civilized race. They see them as half animal.

No, I have not read the books mentioned, but I have read Jordan's Wheel of Time which has a glossary in the back. I have thought about that, however, I'm not sure if that would ensure it reading smoothly ... On the other hand, some of my early drafts left it open enough that people didn't seem to catch on that Damon wasn't just a country affiliation, but actually a different race. So they would ask what Sagon is or even assume that he is human or elven. I THINK I have that clarified, but ...

I've tried hard to clarify it all in Chapter one of Book I: "Invalid Item"  Passkey: 2045 but anyone willing to look over chapter one and give advice or feedback on your impressions, I'm eager to have this questioned settled.

Thanks again,
-Renegade