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Rated: E · Message Forum · Opinion · #1108422
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Oct 25, 2006 at 8:02am
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Re: Review appreciated, Thanks!
Sorry for the delay in reviewing this - I have had a number of outside pressures lately - I do apologise..

I really enjoyed this piece..it works well both on the page and outloud. The dynamics and the metaphores work well, but the use of the word "Kaleidoscope" could also have been carried to great effect into the last stanza.

I didn't have problems engaging with any backstory - but I don't that necessarily is a destraction to the reader - the piece works well in its own right without the need for scaffolding.

Best wishes

Shani Phethean-Hubble

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