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Airycat, actually the premise of the poem is wonderful, and I can relate to it, because the city I grew up in looks like a different place also.
What I am feeling is, you want to emphasize the grayness of the city, in color and in meaning. I suggest, instead of repeating the word gray, find several different "gray" words or concepts.
For example:
"St. Mary's looming grayly"
-St. Mary's, a looming giant slate,- etc.

It is actually a good poem, I think. Once you finish it, it will be a gem.






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