I assume your first question is unrelated to the second...
The sentence is too long, simply stated. It's always best to convey things as briefly as possible, and one can still communicate the essential elements of the sentence if it went like this:
The knee-high grass, though browned by the summer's drought, still swayed like ocean waves in the moody Chinook winds.
That way, no one gets confused. For a moment I wasn't sure if you were talking about a field of grass or the seashore I'm sorry, I wasn't laughing at you. I have the opposite tendency myself - I try to write as quickly as possible and end up under describing sometimes.
As to your second question, I have no idea about sports teams. I suppose one could write a fictional account of something, especially if it's simple and for kids. Others have answered that better.
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