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Sep 30, 2011 at 4:35pm
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My review of Those Eyes
by A Non-Existent User
Very touching piece of poetry.

THOSE EYES, lovely title to evoke emotion even before you began the read a definite plus to this piece and support for the entire poem.

YOU BEGAN, "I was only five when my first love came." and proceeded very easily into well executed ryhme, it was not awkward in anyway that would slow the read, but a steady smooth cadence throughout, very important for me when reading poetry, the rhythm that carries you through to the end.

TRANSITION, was excellent and understandable letting the reader know that it is your beloved puppy that was your first love.

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR is where I fail when reviewing and tend to lack focus and long as the poem holds my attention, but there are no misspellings I see and only the comma in the first stanza last line I see( I think) would be after darling in front of Tim but that is it.

IN ALL, wonderful read, wonderful poem,very touching, thanks for sharing
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My review of Those Eyes · 09-30-11 4:35pm
by A Non-Existent User

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