Thank you for that, Kiya - it's not many brave the wilds of my portfolio to discover my little 8-line poems, so it's wonderful to have some feedback on them. Much appreciated!
Wonderful poem that links footprints to bits and pieces of our memories over the years.
As we get older, we do leave a mark behind - footprints if you will - and even as they fade away, they'll always linger and be a reminder of what we once were.
Thanks for sharing this poignant piece with us, and keep on writing!
Eight syllables per line is all
lines one and two require of us
but seven becomes the goal
the next two to be just so.
And then to six we fall
enough to make us cuss
five should fill this whole
format MozeyMo.
Oh no, I’ve missed my bus!
Line count: 9
MozeyMo format
For Express It In Eight, 08.31.24
Prompt: MozeyMo format:
• 9 lines: 2 quatrains + 1 line
• syllables per line: 8 8 7 7 / 6 6 5 5 / 6
• rhyme scheme: A B C D / A B C D / B
Note: This was painful to write since the gradually descending syllable count prevents any success in creating metre. Syllable counting does not necessarily create metre but varied counts destroy it. And I’m all about metre. This is not a complaint but merely a groan of pain.
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