Poems, prose, sketches written in the year 166. (March 20th, 2009-2010) Sketches will be entered and put on *private* until ready for public viewing (if ever ). Feel free to comment. If you think a poem is strong enough to make it its own item please tell me.
"The Race"
April 25th, 2009 in Missoula, Montana. The Higgins Street bridge over the Clark Fork River with Mt. Jumbo in the background.
In Book:
166.1-42 Montana
166.43-49 Kansas, South Dakota
166.50-71
In Book "Minnesota Blue"
166.72-75 Minnesota, Iowa
166.76-107 Montana
166.138-179 Montana
In Book "Yellow Waterproof"
166.108-137 Costa Rica
In Book "Minnesota Orange"
166.180-
Bereft and yearning. The "O" is a clever inclusion. There's almost a double conotation with still.to be patient and still and to still persevere. I don't know whether or not that was intentional, but it caught my attention.
Alfred: I'll have to think about this. It was the least favorite Thursday. Could be divided into separate parts and/or linked. The style is somewhat rambling though... It's closer to "slow poetry".
Ken: Typos are a bane of a writer's existence. Thanks.
This is a bit long... and the least favorite of the four read Thursday night. It could probably be pruned or divided into three separate or linked prose poems. We'll see.
I liked this. I'm not sure I agree with Le Troubadour about the rambling of the beginning. It is what it is.
"... and welcomed its imminent arrival." Sorry: I rarely leave its/it's errors unflagged, as they drive me to distraction. I know, I know... don't sweat the small stuff...
Excellent imagery and a compelling moment captured! Yes, the turn of phrase is inspirational, perhaps you could turn it into a challenge for us lesser scribes.
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