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Pee please [259] R1,2

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Journalistic Intentions  (18+) This is for the journal keeping types that come to PLAY! New round starts July 1! #2213121 by Turkey DrumStik

Pee please

Golden State Urology
100 South Kitchen-Dick Road East
Helena, Montana 59626

So you're from California I see.

Yep. Moved to Montucky twenty years ago.

And you didn't leave yet?

Nope. All the rich folk moved to Kalispell and Bozeman. I got stuck here in Hell.

Seen any gold?

Only pee. "We will booze" seems to be the state motto. It comes out all colors.

So what can you tell me about my pee?

Drink less beer and coffee and more water.

Don't you tell that to everyone?

Yep. And I'm right most of the time.

How did a nice gal like you ever end up in a place like this?

I like shoving tubes up men's dicks.

Umm...

It's a job. Pays well and as much as some men are dicks they're pussies when they walk in that door. Amazing how pain can change a man's attitude.

So... how about me.

Drink more water. You were only dehydrated. No problems. But if you have any pain contact us immediately. Any bladder, kidney, urinary track infection can be both painful and serious. You're fortunate. Today that is.

You free Friday night?

I only date men who piss out a rainbow, honey.

Like...

Like otherwise my wife get's jealous.

© Kåre Enga [177.259] (20.oktober.2020)


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Space Blog  (ASR) Cruising WDC cyberspace and raiding ports for blog prompts! #2223838 by Sharmelle'sThankfulExpressions

Cruising through WDC today we found a new star less than three months old.

"A lesson for life"  by Vertika Saxena

The writer's bio-block states: "Always curious to learn something new.....deep reader.....observer...a great designer (second place of interest), first is of course writing!!...a dedicated traveler..." I'd love to see some travel writing or comments.

As a writer (I read the other posted items) I would suggest the new free verse forum by ~Brian K Compton~ as the poetry fits best into that 'form'. Editing this work with free verse in mind would help. That said, this poem suffers from a very common malady here on WDC. IMHO, the words 'the' and 'is' should be banned. It truly weakens poetry.

It starts out good:

Let me just shut my view
and locate my stars,
to find out if I am honest enough
with my love and past.

but needs tightening up (in other words a good edit). Regardless, it shows promise. I'd give it a 3.5 at this stage.

Space Blog Prompt: What experiences have you gained from life?

Well... 3,000 blog entries so... have a good time reading them! The question is far too broad to answer.

For: "Welcome To My Reality Forum" 

1. Your Thoughts, Feelings, Emotions:

I recently stopped writing in my journal after 15+ years and 50k+ pages. I kept track of all types of assorted minutiae. Staying at home for 8 months, barely going outside, there's little to write about. Maybe if I were to sit in the window I could sketch what I see with words but I have little interaction with people.

2. What makes you feel at peace?

I'm not sure what that feels like. Certainly the opposite of stressed or overwhelmed. Calm, tranquil? The political upheaval isn't peaceful. I know deep within that this too shall pass as war and genocide always subside. But peace is not merely the end of war ... the unresolved injustices will recycle the human condition until humanity decides that unity is a far better way forward. For me focusing out (like noticing nature) helps stabilize myself as belonging here, a small entity in a big universe.

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