SHI BLOGS TOO

An Example

Here is an example of the comments I receive on The Legend Of The Phantom Of The Hallows (of course I won't say who it was from) ~




You have just received the following private comment/review about
Item #1483417 entitled: "The Legend Of The Phantom Of The Hallows"

I enjoyed this piece. It is short, concise and tells the story in an interesting manner.

The descriptions are great. Good word pictures, I was able to see everything in my mind.

Stories with a curse in them can be fascinating and scary at the same time. This story worked for me.

Dialogue was excellent, as was the plot, setting, and characterization.

I do think that you can make this good story even better. It does not really need any changes, but I feel that your writing is good enough that you would be successful if you tried different ways to approach the story. For example, it could start with a small group of people gathered together for a story. Then the narrator begins the story.

Or

A first person narrative.

These are only two. There are endless styles.

I don't mean this as a criticism, as I think your story is great. I just wish I was more able to experiment, I tend to stick with one style, but I like to encourage others to experiment when I read a good piece of writing.

Liked the story, well done.

Character Count: 1,064
Rating included: 4.0 stars out of 5.0 stars. (Note: A 3.0 is Average.)


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That's pretty much what everyone says "Great Story" and then I'm lucky if I get 4 stars out of them!

See what I mean about them wanting to be a part of the story? Is'n't that what this person is implying here??? Or am I wrong in interpreting it that way? .

Come on help me out here.