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Writing/ Editing like Making Pie Crust and True Horror

I wrote a piece for The Writer's Cramp contest that is getting me some feedback.

The Conversation  (18+) overheard conversation about ending someone's life #1457021 by Lani

The Conversation is story of what a comatose person overhears. I wrote it fast and the idea was good. The characters are good and the start is stong, The ending is ok but the middle is weak. I knew this but posted it anyway. I figured I would expand later. And that was the feedback from someone from the contest (I assume since they mentioned the prompt). However in the expansion now I feel I have lost the "feel' of the piece. It's starting to ramble in my head. I wish I had saved the original post and created a new one.


It's like making pie crust too much working of the dough makes it tough.


It funny the feedback have used words like chilling and horror but I never saw it that way. Creepy maybe. Horror is for Poe and Lovecraft.


I suppose though this is my one true fear: To be helpless in a bed and be aware. Maybe it is true horror.