L'aura del Campo

Doublets [179.70]

LET'S TALK PROCESS!

As my writer-friends know I'm scatter-brained and easily distracted... much like a cat. So, it's normal for me to channel my inner Feline and vomit all over the page. Then... someone (usually me) has to clean up the mess. Sometimes there're diamonds hidden among the hairballs.

For "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week!"  Bianca, bless her pea-pickin' heart, wants us to write ONE doublet by noon tomorrow. Well, never one to follow directions, I gagged up a bunch of... seven of them. I've cleaned them up some but left the originals as popnotes to amuse the curious (or bored).

Ah... since dialects divide us (they needn't, but...), some observations: choc'late is two syllables [a] choc-o-late like e-ve-ry would be three; 'all y'all' and 'ya' are American, mostly Southern, slang [b]; Goddess/God? a matter of linguistics and/or belief [b]; two-fer-one poems [b,c] twinsies, brothers from another mother; 'delicious' [d] is a double entendre as Delicious is a well-known apple where I grew up; 'gimme' [e] is slang for 'give me'; [f] is admittedly an aliterative hisssss and 'last night' can mean yesterday or 'YOUR last night' as sometimes I like the humor of ambiguity; 'vittles' = chow, grub, food, y'know? [g].

So these are the 7. If you have time, please quickly read and tell me which you liked the most (or disliked the least):

No calories, they said

At lunch, salted chocolate cookies beckon.
At home, "I reckon I could lose some weight."

original notes for 70a

chocolate salted cookies beckon 8
I reckon I could lose some weight 8

[70a]

Goddess visits Texas

I created all y'all out of love — Zap!
Unfortunately, ya didn't listen.

[70b]

Zapped

Our Lord created us-all lovingly;
unfortunately, we can't get along.

[70c]

original notes 70b&c

the goddess created us all lovingly.11
unfortunately we can't get along. 10

Apple of my eye

Were you always delicious? Me the worm
that dearly wanted to make you my home?

[70d]

original notes for 70d

were you always so beautiful? 8
Or was I merely the worm that wanted to make you my home? 15

San Diego would be hell

Just gimme the smell of lightning, the clap
of thunder, rain washing away ennui.

[70e]

original notes for 70e

I love the smell of lightning, the clap of thunder 12
rain washing away the ennui. 9

Last Night

Slithering past the sentry at sunset,
Sally seeks the heat of your warm embrace.

[70f]

original notes for 70f

slithering past the guards at sunset 8/9
Sally seeks the heat of your warm embrace. 10

Priorities

On the run to fetch some bread-n-vittles,
slow down to pet the whining puppy's head.

[70g]

original notes for 70g

along the way to fetch some vittles 9
slow down to pet the doggy's head 8

Bianca's note and example ▼

Related to the epigram, the Doublet has twenty syllables, divided over two lines. The title of the poem is integral.

My try: (written after a news fact of the past week)

Anne Frank's Tree

She looked up towards me; I guarded her
years later, people tried to tear me down.

(poem: ' Bianca 2007)

WHICH ONE(S) DO YOU LIKE THE BEST?
What is your process?