Good day Joy Random review took me back to 2004, before my time.
Some super duper imagery, if I so do say, I thought of a house burned, the beams blackened, soot filling my lungs, then thought of the heat of anger burning me from the inside out. This is very creative, and holds some well expressed imagery, of a lot. I enjoyed and can't suggest a change. Thanks!
I wish you luck in Cramp. MY MY!! this is very good, the great thing about this form is the freedom truly and it shows on this, I could imagine the pencil, seeing the ending image of the face, hear the sounds it might make, dreams of a dull pencil angry. That's me.
Mystic tones, really very well done!
The ocean mysterious, misunderstood, moody, and always changing. Enjoyable , not overly fancy with prose and imagery, just some expression of if ocean was female and this is what she is. Well edited, no suggestions for change. Thank you, and Enjoy your day.
Good Day, Random Review link brought me and I'm delighted to be here. What a simply heart felt poem. Hope, it kindles the soul. I like the repeating, and the ending truly sums the feelings described tightly. No fancy words, almost what a parent would want for a child. Perhaps, centering and presentation might be present. Thank you for the fuzzes, and enjoy your day wherever you are.
Good Afternoon, spidey Random review link brought me back again.
I'm not great at forms, in writing or understanding, but got the gist of this quite good, rain, a summer storm, the sudden of it, the quietness afterwards. This is a neat, not oversaturated form, some imagery with not a lot of words. I have no suggestions to change or improve on it, but I kind of wish perhaps a little more in depth and some feelings but that is not this form. Well Done!
Good Morning, Random Review Link brought me, Jatog the Green
Writer's Cramp is fantastic and always has the neatest prompts, and this poem fits that quality. To see a lot of dialogue, and long story-like, makes me think prose, or flash fiction. I read this twice, and enjoyed if I truly didn't understand or get the feelings that were intended. Well edited, no errors that I see, Thank you and enjoy your day.
Simple yet touching, as we all have had the mystic love at one time or another. Physical attraction, filled to the top, overflowing. You need to capitalize the beginnings of each line, or omit punctuation all together. Half and half does brutal it. Well thought out, honestly, I understood and had some personal imagery of what it would be like, the feelings. There're a song a know that's very similar in subject.
How sad. I don't think that was your intent, but to miss someone this much, is painful to read. To second guess you own will to live to join that one that brings such pain is so sad. I could see the tiny boat, imagine the feelings as they are very close to my own. Thanks for sharing, and no suggestions beyond presentation and that's preference.
Simple but darling poem. I can't say this often but such a negligent time. I have a lot of different feelings with this, and actually felt for the mouse. I had a mouse here once (that I knew of) and he came in, hid then scratched at the door to get out so I let him. There're smart creatures, rats more so. I can't see any errors and enjoyed the feelings this gives. Thanks!
Well written, something to take slow reading and relate to be what is being expressed, a tide, neither part or not part on anything but wanting that. I hope this is imagery cause its kind of sad to think people feel this way yet I know we do. No suggestions, just a slow burn. Thanks! Have a good day.
love is terrifying, unpredictable, and heartbreakingly real My! My! nothing more true could be said. To be so happy, so loved, so content with all experiences, and drunk with memories, and have it all sobered up one morning is truly sad, and scary. Not everyone gets this, and those who don't are both blessed and damned in the same breathe. Well done, I bow.
Morning, Prem Junior Random Review link brought me.
This is read as a statement more than a poem I find, the repeat of Well seems to be unconcerned, lack of self love. Sad feelings that someone would feel this way, and grief can do things that no one can understand unless they experience death too, and that doesn't make their ability to live with that the same as someone else. I hope this helped unburden a little and I'm sure it will smack some others too. Almost makes me tear up, such a brittle statement. No suggestions beyond presentation.
Hermit, a story in a prose. Well done, I read it twice and the indecision, the self satisfaction, of knowing the right choice is being made and its rewarding to be a hermit. Quite a different subject matter for me, but well written, not too long, or overcompensated with big unique words. Thanks! No suggestions, praise.
So true why ask. I can relate, and think many do. Some very unique words, I had to look one up. I wonder sometimes what is expressed in this prose. My only suggestion is presentation. Thank you for sharing what many are thinking when asked : how are you.
Well written, simple yet expressive without a lot of imagery. Understood, the happy, the passing of time, get a good feel despite the lack of feelings unburden. I was have someone, and yeah now no, but I credit some of best qualities to him and the eighteen years we spend together so I get it, that despite what went downhill, warmth remains.
Foot prints in the sand, washed by the indecision of the ocean, always swaying my memories, I got this kind of vibe from your very well written poem. So easy to read and to relate to, to get inspired with. I don't see any errors, worth suggesting an edit, and really enjoyable even if a little downer.
Thanks staiNed
I enjoyed this, it is super creative, and honestly. Love in a wonderful way that it brings pain.I suggest though I'm sure it your intent, enlarging the poem, it's very hard to see, and there is a few spelling errors. I think I see cupid with his arrow in a new light.
Kindly, Thanks!
Very well made, and edited, I Can't say I totally I understood, but don't see any errors. Kind of sad read, forgetting, scared, a memory, a drive, old and alone. Like going a drive but remembering it. Again, Thanks!
A memory from the age of three, that is amazing I think, I can only back to around eight years old. It was so different back then, I don't see any errors and it's been well edited. Thank you for sharing, and enjoy your day.
Good Morning, Amethyst Angel 💐 Random Review link brought me, and I find a children's poem, not something I usually read but enjoyed the gentle subject momma frog, the ease of her life, the feelings of being a happy mom. Thank you no suggestion, great some young folk.
Limericks, all with the familiar rhyme, and historical themes. Somewhat funny, yet serious but creating a smile. I have never tried this form, it seems to light humored for me. I seem no errors, and enjoyed both. Thank you.
A dark poem shining bright in my dark places, lures me out, and this is moody in its intent, and gives imagery of them being caged, freed, misunderstood, but to be feared all the same. The added clarification on some word choices was a nice added touch too.
What a creative way you see your creative muse as dark entities, smothering and loving in the ideas they give, well edited, I have no suggestions to change it, and honestly I enjoyed. Thank you.
A fun read and well done with the word restrictions in place, there a lot of feeling in this, and almost a glimpse of anger. No suggestions to change this, the stanzas are short and intense. Thanks for sharing.
Not overdone is imagery, and spot on with how one would feel freshy wounded, kind of reminds me of a song I enjoy. It's hard to be broken, and every day you learn to live cracked and loosely glued together. Thank you for sharing.
Politics. eek, Temper inflaming subject, almost taboo to bring it up. Well written, and the point is passed on indeed. I have my thoughts as everyone does, It is over and over, nothing truly changes, might this time though since angry rules now. Thanks!
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My! My! nothing more true could be said. To be so happy, so loved, so content with all experiences, and drunk with memories, and have it all sobered up one morning is truly sad, and scary. Not everyone gets this, and those who don't are both blessed and damned in the same breathe. Well done, I bow.
