Good Sunny Day, Mursal Random Review link found you.
A love poem, full of opposite imagery, designs to show the torment and highs and lows of caring and perhaps it not being returned. Almost has a feel of a stalker.
I don't see any punctuation errors and there is some rhyme. Simple, well done. Thank you for sharing and enjoy your day.
I'm not fiamilar with many poetry forms and struggle with almost any form, that said this is so sad and magical, to still love when you forgotten that love is crazy. Thanks for the authors note to clarify the poem. I could see her in her T shirts and honestly sad.
Good afternoon, Beholden Random Review Link favors you.
Pandora. So much legend and myths about that box. This is a great poem, prose is spot on, and there's deep mysterious imagery, a gift no something not wanted but not being aware. Thanks for sharing and being involved in contests. No suggestion to edit.
Enjoyable somewhat dark, very easy to understand poem about the ending of Halloween, all the preparation, the rituals, the vulture's wing, the lasting effect done. The sense of accomplishment. No deep imagery, quaint and well done.
Good Day, Sum1's Home! Random Review Link brought me.
How simple and romantic at the same time. I don't know of this form, but seems to be a good one for feelings. It can yet another year or we can make it a wonderful next day and year, No suggestions, I just enjoyed the easy to understand poem.
Thanks!
Creative, a great mystic poem asking some serious questions, those questions we all have asked at one time or another. There a touch of creepy, and love expressed in a way new for me, I read it twice, no suggestions to improve it, though that said, I do wonder the last three stanzas why? But It is good, and I did enjoy it.
Thanks kindly for sharing.
Editor, dark, creepy and carrying a scythe, well done. A glimpse of darkness, of what's below. Slash and Burn indeed. This is almost like a 80s slasher horror movie, No suggestions, entertaining, abode Dante. Thanks!
Fatigue and Exhaustion mentally and physically, can be different for everyone, though myself can say I have not felt exhaustion since my youth. This is quite creative, the struggle of being torn by so much in your mind and it showing physically. Kind of dark and somewhat sad. Depression? I hope it helped in some way sharing. I don't see any errors, but suggest a font change perhaps.
Thank you, and enjoy your day. StaiNed
Congrats on your win, and thanks for the explanation on the form used. Always helpful. Thunderstorms are common in the summer here, and I surmise that such imagery described does happen. Clear, not overdone in imagery. I enjoyed it, and see no errors to change it. Thanks!!
Favorite:
Storm’s coming we surmise
As strong winds toss about debris
So many questions. So much wondering, and very creative expression. Easy to understand to follow. A lot can relate to this, a kind of day dream state that we often find ourselves in. No suggestions and I enjoyed. Thanks!
Good day, Fyn - 20 WDC years old! Very sad and so needs to be remembered and thought about for sure, I know of things myself that are similar and so very sad.It breaks our hearts to know that such hateful happened and still happen today, there is no need for it. No suggestions and thanks for the font choice, I imagine it was hard to write but something that was needed, and if worth doing it often isn't easy.
Great ending and I enjoyed this mostly for it have a darker side of what we experience as people. Easy to understand, simple but thoughtful in your imagery, No suggestions, again enjoyed. Thanks!
Too Funny! We get one shot and we don't worry about that shot till we dying, I have a lot of books on death, immortality, and blah blah, mostly from when my son died, grief and depression. This is good, almost has an exasperated feel to it.
We're fickle and we don't understand ourselves, well edited and I did think about it once in a blue, Thanks! and there's a spelling error in the description.
Well written sweet natured poem set in decisions, portrays as crossroads. Easy to understand, edited, and honestly kinda sad. Thank you. I have no suggestions and see no errors.
I enjoyed this, Thanks!
Caring for flora, caring for a place so it may be remembered and cherished. A simple act, clearly told but heartwarming for anyone who can reflect their own feelings, and those who might know of this in their area.
Well written, not overemphasized, caring and simple, flash fiction.
Thank you for sharing.
A great well written and well edited poem about a classic vampire and an unkindly love that in not often imagined. Full of shadows cast by the love the two shared, really entertaining despite its sad environment. Almost reminds me of Dracula lore.I see no errors and have no suggestions for change. Thanks and enjoy your day.
A very cute poem about fast food, with some well thought out prose and imagery. We are what we eat indeed, almost squeamish feelings. We all have our favorites, and sometimes regret also. This is well edited, clear to understand and a subject many people can relate to. Thanks! kindly.
Spiritual imagery told and expressed very well. Like telling a powerful story of the past and why it matters today. I can't say I totally understand it but its well edited and I see no errors, and there's some great imagery. Thanks for sharing and enjoy your day.
This is a well written poem, I had flash images of sending each of my kids to school, and remembered stories from my grandmother when she went. Clear, easy to understand, full of lots of imagery and pros. The ending was neat too, not what I was expecting and no leading at all.
No suggestions I enjoyed this.
Thanks!
Enjoy your day. StaiNed
Fantastic W.D.Wilcox
The house had more depth and personally than Sally, but I felt her fear. Such a fast paced, entertaining, cat and mouse flash fiction, you have a talent for this, I have not enjoyed myself so much in a long time reading flash.
Thanks no suggestions it's just too good! StaiNed
Gosh! How creative, a fly, a captive, the mystery of being caught but perhaps enjoying it, the illusions. There a lot in this small poem and me and my darkness enjoyed it and found it a little creepy. Again very creative.
Favorite:
the venom shone green on my hair
my mood was dark—too many cares
What an opening I was hooked.
Thanks!! very much even though a few years ago. My only suggestion is capitalization, or centering it.
Have a good day. StaiNed
Random Review Time, Good day, Sum1's Home! Kudos!
Aging is scary and you nailed that fear very well in this poem. To think our minds carry conservationists, trick our hearts, and shudder out our soul. Any illness with age is changing and this tells of such a change. I have no suggestions and enjoyed.
Somewhat of a sad feel to this.
Thanks!
Write on, and enjoy your day. StaiNed
Quite suggestive in one has that mind set, almost a little dark and despair but not quite, a good poem full of a lot of different feelings, love, desire, regret, divine, a some darkness.
Oh LA LA!
No handkerchiefs will wave us goodbye
Thanks for sharing like I said some quite different imagery and the feelings that creates. I see no errors, just me I kind of wanted some more depth. Thanks for the share and enjoy your day.
Lucky Penny, how creative! I enjoyed this a lot. I mean you had me believing the penny was bad and it really was, but perhaps it flipped when it struck the pretty lady, perception is what this about how we look at things changes everything. Entertaining, fast paced, painful and bright. Note a big story but wow so much is happening. Thank you so much!
It always nice to come a poem that isn't expected. This is a neat subject, and holds a little mystery, a little mood, and some lighting. I enjoyed this, and wonder what Sam's secret are? Coffee and thinking. A great combo. I don't see any errors, no suggestions for change. Thank you kindly for sharing.
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