This is such a touching poem, I enjoyed a lot, and am kind of moved but the many feelings that are expressed in each stanza of such a poetic piece. My oldest is PDDNOS and he so brilliant, so smart but labeled, he smiles like no else. Hardships strengthen us, and makes us softer to give way and absorb the next tumble.
Well written and such a strange topic, I couldn't imagine such a fetish, if that's what it could be called, but can relate as I when really out of sorts and denying that will pick my own skin. Impactful and really spot on in mood, and setting, I could see those tweezers, and the garbage can, the unsettled feelings, the inability to stop. I hope it helped sharing, take care.
Very well said, without saying too much. Names might fade, stones worn to time and weather, but I agree we never forget. Thanks! I enjoyed and see no errors. Creative and quite sad.
I always enjoy a flash fiction story, and respect those who are able to write them as I am not. This is enjoyable, I couldn't imagine the shock of it not being real and a flag shooting out. Thanks! staiNed
Wonderfully told story in poem form. Quite old too, but I appreciate random review finding this dark evil tale. Rhymes, very easy to understand but not overall spooky. I enjoyed a lot, and was quite wrapped up in the old London imagery, Thanks!! No suggestions its just great.
Well written and quite sad. To know what would of been, to want those things, to rethink them over and over and over is hard. I can relate as I have someone I crave more time with but its not to be, so I hang on to memories. Well edited, and honestly sad. Thanks!
Mirthday how cute, so special to be born on mother's day, I agree and to have three of your own to spoil you double times is fantastic indeed. Well written, kind hearted and made me smile. I enjoy the rhyme, the feelings put into this. Thanks for sharing, no suggestions to improve this.
Small not overly descriptive, yet interesting in wondering were I was going, at first I thought earthquake, than out of body experience, but didn't see it as a dream. Well Done. No fancy words, easy to understand. The unsettled atmosphere is spot on.
Enjoyed. Such a impactful statement. To be understood and oved right down to our toes, all the faults, our positivity traits and those in the darkest place that even ourselves can't see. Well expressed, simple yet thought provoking. Thanks!
First, Second, Third chance, indeed each one may enact a change for the better in some way, but my experiences no nothing changes, one just get some tangled and dragged under by all those chances. Simple, not very descriptive, or overly fantasise with crazy prose. I enjoy the ease of reading this, and could see that perhaps another chance will go far.
Morning, Polaran
A love that was never named, your note, How creative. Very subjective prose, it's almost mystical in the feeling it shares. Somewhat sad, to care and be in that moment of realization, but never go past that first ripple of interest, makes it a little sad.
No suggestion, great editing, although with the author's note, this could vague. Thanks! and enjoy your day.
I enjoyed this a lot, read like a small story. The surprise if the wheelchair, the feeling that she was having, it all was written well and I was aboard for the ride. No suggestions just a great time, Thanks!
I'm not fiamler with the form, but seemed to me like a old style that would read different. Easy to understand and not full of fluffy emotions. A old future place, a river, flying machines and the people of this place. Not something I'd usually read and very enjoyable. Thanks!
Writing with a prompt provided can be fun, and this is well written and easy to understand. Kind of thought of Harry Potter and his wand. That said I don't have a lot under my belt with fantasy.
Not overdone in imagery, simple, and edited. Thanks!
Shakespeare, bring me back memories of high-school. Defiantly has a fantasy feel to it, and its a nice touch for each stanza to express a different moment, the anger, confusion, regret, love, indecision and closes fine, no questions. Edited well. Thank you for sharing.
I'm back again. Pinning for someone is always romantic, Amine does it wonderfully, as this also does, I enjoyed, and like the lack of mushy feelings, and blown up affections. Simple, edited great, I see no easy errors. Got aboard, Thanks!
Well done, good description. Giving words to the heart and making it a person is a nice touch for this somewhat angry, mournful, misguided prose. It is hard to stop when something ends that we enjoy passionately.
Thank you for sharing, and enjoy your day. No suggestions to change, and no spelling errors.staiNed
Thank you for sharing it isn't easy to write about someone you miss, and want to see and hear everyday. I too have lost ones and I can relate with the struggle every day to remember them and not be sad they're gone, to go back farther and reminisces those treasured memories. Well written, honest without a lot of imagery just feelings. No suggestions. Take care it doesn't get easier,you will get stronger to carry love's weight.
A well written poem with the castrates of prompt can sometimes be hard but it seems success as I had no problems with this poem. Perhaps the cave is curiosity. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed reading it.
What a delightful read on my part, I thought is very well rhymed and quite creative. Not something I would normally read so it was a nice treat. I could picture Malcolm, and feel the child vibe, though could be any age that enjoy this. Thanks!
Robin Williams was a great funny actor, I agree, some of my favorite comedy was him. Short, well said. I like this, simplistic, the rhyme, and the added thought that we are all have the same fate. In all honestly I had to goggle how he dies, but it is sad to lose anyone especially those who gave us laughter in our lives.
Well done, and quite a musical feel to it. Faced paced, with some fancy prose.Great use of writing Ml. I enjoyed, out of my comfort zone so thank you for sharing.
Morning, Random Review link brought me, and interesting. Not really a lot to it, but the suggestive imagery can't lead the reader along, prompt provided and used well. No editing suggestions and see no spelling errors. Well done.
Gosh this is very honest, and I think many people feel the same in one way or another. The battle we do with of minds is always a win tag lose in the same breathe. I hope it helped sharing, no suggestions on errors, only that perhaps stanzas of three or four lines to group it up.
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