I like the idea of magic verses magic. Maybe one day in the future it just might come to this. An arena where magicians fight to the death. Wild. I've read where robots fight in areans, but not people with magic. Wonderful story. Will read the rest when I come back from work.
This was just a sad but wonderful story. He was the only one who knew he would take any pain his little girl was feeling, which to me was great. What parent wouldn't sacrifice their life for their child? I was glad Julie made it out ok, but sad the father had to pass away.
So sad, and yet so powerful. I love Norse mythology, and had never read any kind of story on Ragnarok other than knowing, like above, Thor was killed by the Midgard Serpent. Never knew how Odin died; now I know. Would have like to have known what Thor wanted to convey to his father, but then, that was between them.
This is so cool! A muse looking for work. That overimaginative muse, who wants to make a total wreck out of someone all for someone to be the master of words. It doesn't say, but (I believe) is implied that once that someone becomes what he wants to be, he and the muse would have fused together. Splendid writing. There are times I think my muse has escaped--if it's anything like this fellow, good-bye!
There were several errors I saw in reading your short story:
1) "were people cared less for oone another" --should be "where people..."
2)"murmureus sounds of leafs in the trees"--plural of leaf is leaves
3)"There where people dancing"--There were people dancing
4)"each in turn the dancing couples and children"--it makes more sense to write 'each in turn, the couples who were dancing and the children"
Interesting story. I'm wondering if Rachel kept a diary, and if so would she write about her frightening night. More so, would she ever take this short cut again?
Chayla
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