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#4801501

Review of Spring Word Search

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE WORD SEARCH

This word search has a spring theme, which is perfect for the upcoming season!

WHAT I LIKED

What a good time to put yourself in the mood for spring. Since it's winter, this word search gives me something to look forward to.

ENGAGING

The word search offers a lot of choices. If anything, I might suggest fluffing up the introduction with a graphic, giphy to establish the tone/mood of the word search.

VARIETY

There were a lot of spring items to search for. The puzzle was easy to moderate and a lot of fun.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Just in time for spring which is right around the corner. This is a puzzle worth your time!

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#4801288

Review of Autumn Quiz

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE QUIZ

This is a quiz about Autumn.

WHAT I LIKED

I like taking quizzes so I thought I'd check it out. The questions were easy and I liked that the multiple answers that were offered, between 3 and 4 were perfect!

ENGAGING

The quiz had ten questions. The questions stimulated the brain matter and I thought they were appropriate to the topic and theme of the quiz.

VARIETY

There were a lot of selections for answers.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic, a Robert Frost poem, or a giphy or even a YouTube video in the introduction to set the tone for the quiz, if doable. I thought the quiz was a lot of fun. I highly encourage to stop on by and try it out!

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#4801059

Review of Oh My, Helene

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE POEM

A poem about the havoc that Helene would wreck in your life.

WHAT I LIKED

The poet seems as if they are a bystander, so maybe one of their friends was wrecked by Helene. Then again, she just might be a hurricane. I love how there's a double meaning here.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Here deluge of actions pours down around you, flooding your senses and drowning your emotions," I love the 'complicated' descriptions used in this poem! These descriptions can take you on a journey. Hurricane Helene wrecked the southeastern part of the USA last fall, but there are some girls that cause an equal amount damage should you choose to let them into your life. The descriptions are succinct and paint vivid pictures in the reader's mind.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening grabs the reader, plunks them down in the middle of chaos and expects them to walk out. The title fits the poem well. Excellent expression.

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#4800893

Review of Life Giving Rains

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE POEM

A poem dedicated nature, it's ebbs, it's flows, and the essence of life.

WHAT I LIKED

I could easily see the scene in front of me, the rain, and the Earth enjoying a delicious drink of water.

STRUCTURE

This is Japanese style of poetry called "Naga Uta." A description of the style of poetry is in a dropnote at the bottom.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Life giving rain falls on the thirsty ground below." I can see the action playing out, the rain storm, the ground soaking up the water. The description is vivid, but it also hints at emotion. That the Earth is being sated with the water and finding happiness from a cool drink, much like we do on a hot summer day. Nice depth with this description.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Vivid expression.

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#4800634

Review of Escape

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

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THE POEM

An introspective poem about the dark places of our minds.

WHAT I LIKED

A good succinct word choice leads to a strong voice throughout the poem.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I touch my cold fingertips, to the back of my sweaty neck."
This is a vivid description that one reading the poem can easily imagine, but it also draws well on emotions. How do you feel with cold fingertips and a sweaty neck? Uncomfortable? Uneasy? Well done.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening paints a vivid picture which engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. The ending is different for all of us. Very expressive.

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#4800369

Review of A Stiff Drink

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

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THE POEM

A poem that expresses regrets using a stiff drink metaphor.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the last 2 lines. They really summed the theme and message of the poem.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. While there is a rythme, there is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The "Dear Jane" letter fills an empty glass," This is like a stab in the heart that I think goes a long way. The poem stirs up those nasty little hang over emotions that one has when something good goes bad and the above phrase really sums it. No one likes a Dear Jane/John letter. No likes an empty glass, yet we have these moments in our lives, hopefully to learn, grow, and mature as humans.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening pulls the reader right in, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Excellent expression. The poem finds balance well between regret and moving on.

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#4800265

Review of Atop The Falls

Review by StephBee

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem that tells of the story of two star crossed lovers that takes place in December.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the story developed over the course of the ballad/poem. Also, the ending was very rewarding after all that investment.

STRUCTURE

This is in the form of a Ballad with a ABCB rythme scheme and with a "walking hand-in-hand" refrain.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the poem easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "They found shredded bits of clothes, from both of the desperate lovers." This phrase allows the readers to let their imagination take them into the moment. Not only that it evokes emotion well and the reader can't help but wonder if our lovers truly had a tragic end or if they faked it so they could be together.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in, and keeps them reading. The title is subtle and fits the poem well. Nice storytelling.

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#4800261

Review of Wrapped In Your Arms

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 18+

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THE POEM

This is poem was inspired by the Bruno Mars & Lady Gaga song "Die with a Smile."

WHAT I LIKED

The prompt was to listen to the song and write something that the song inspired. The author did a great job capturing the smoldering sensuality of the song.

STRUCTURE

This is an Acrostic poem using "Die with A Smile."

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the poem easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "A shiver runs through me only you can give." It's a simple sentence, but it really communicates a lot. It could be a look, a simple gesture, holding hands, or even the wisp of perfume. There's a lot of subtly here that makes the read slow and think what it would mean to their lives.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in well and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. The introduction does a great job setting the mood/tone of the content and explaining the entry for the prompt. The Title fits the poem well. Nice, simmering expression.

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#4800259

Review of Siblings

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem dedicated to siblings who do things you love and things you don't.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the character voice, sincerity, and honesty that came across.

STRUCTURE

This is free form "list" poem. There are some rythmes, but no there's no structured rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the poem easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I guess I can forgive them for some of their not so nice actions." This is a very simple statement, but I think it sums up the complicated feelings we all have toward our siblings.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. The Title fits the poem well. Nice child-like expression.

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#4799975

Review of Only With You, Lord/ A Psalm

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A psalm dedicated to the love of the Lord.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the reverence of the psalm and how emotionally moving the Lord's love when it touched the poet's life.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. While there are rythmes, there is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I see you in the colors of dawn, Feel you even in the slightest breeze." It's a vivid description using a good economy of words that tug on emotional chords. I can see the dawn, rich oranges and red, and feel the slightest wind gently wisp on by. These descriptions of nature helps to give the poem emotional depth.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Well done.

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#4799798

Review of Give A Gift

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE FORUM

This forum hosts "Give a Gift." There are plenty of Merit Badges and Awardicons that you can gift to others or yourself.

WHAT I LIKED

Sometimes someone has an item in their port that is worthy of reward, but doesn't get it because community members might now know what to do to get or gift one. 👼intuey

's forum makes it easy.

THE RULES

The rules to gift an awardicon or merit badge are easy, clearly listed, and easy to understand.

Prizes are clearly listed. If anything, I might suggest creating a separate BITEM where previous items are awarded. Share the praise.

ENGAGING

I thought the forum was had a lot to offer. I'd like to see it a bit more active.

VARIETY

There is a nice varity of merit badges at a reasonable cost. I highly recommend checking them out.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to spice up the introduction.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I think it's a great forum and I would encourage the author to post more about it on the newsfeed and I'll link it on the Bee Hive. Give it a plug from time to time. You're more than welcome to plug it on the Bee Hive Forum and I'll give it a plug from time to time on my Newsfeed! This a great opportunity to engage with the community!

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#4799627

Review of Tattered Soul

Review by StephBee

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

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THE POEM

A poem dedicated to life and the hardships we face.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending stanza - it gives the reader a minute to contemplate our lives, the people we are, the people we think we are, and the people we want to be.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. While there are rythmes, there is no set rythming pattern.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font size to make it easier to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The grime of life clings to us in thick layers," It dares the reader to give a good long, hard at themselves, to evaluate our grime and examine just how thick it is. It gives the poem depth.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is intense and wrangles the reader right in, putting them in the moment, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Nice expression.

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#4799467

Review of Walmart Return

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda.

WHAT I LIKED

Talk about an order gone wrong. I liked the reason for the return. It was something different and fit the prompt well.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is engaging and drives the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph drew my curiosity and I wanted to find out why the narrator was returning the bear.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was a bit disappointed with his panda, since it wasn't quite what he wanted.

FLOW & PACING

The story has a sold beginning, middle and end. The story didn't feel rushed.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. Good use of WDC ML to make the font bigger and easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Solid character voice. The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4799465

Review of How To Get Rid of A Present

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the ending. It was something a little different and it left me with a chuckle.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is engaging and drives the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph piqued my curiosity and I wanted to find out why the narrator was returning the bear.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was a bit disappointed with his return but found a great alternative.

FLOW & PACING

The story didn't feel rushed.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. The author did a good capturing every character's unique voice. The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4799464

Review of The Refund

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

The clerk had a larger than life personality that really came through in the story.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person from the clerk's perspective. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph starts off with 2 clerks gossiping and then introduces the panda return after a bit.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was returning the panda after he broke up with his girlfriend. His motivation was totally understandable.

FLOW & PACING

The pacing was good, but the flow was a bit choppy with the two clerks talking, and there were times I was a bit confused as to what was going on.

MECHANICS

I did not notice any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. Good use of WDC ML to change the font and make it easy to read. The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4799452

Review of Chin Li Comes Home

Review by StephBee

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the ending. Chin Li's been on quite the adventure. Good character voice captures the frustration of the narrator well without being too over the top.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph does a good job painting a picture of the narrator carrying something oversized.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was a bit frustrated with his panda, but it's never easy getting rid of a 8 foot panda.

FLOW & PACING

The story didn't feel rushed.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and enhance the presentation of the story.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good comedic beats. Very entertaining for a 5 year delay. The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4799122

Review of A Sweet and Spicy Season

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This word search captures the warm and spicy of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

This was a lot of fun! Good job with the theme.

ENGAGING

The word search was the perfect size. I didn't feel intimated by it. Good amount of words to look for.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices that captured the magic of Christmas in the kitchen.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

If anything I might decorate the introduction a little more. Use a graphic or a giphy and make the puzzler cozy up with a cup of hot chocolate. Ah, I can smell the spices... Good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest!

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#4799115

Review of Take It Back, Please!

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the clerk made lemonade out of lemons. The ending left me smiling, which was what I was looking for with this prompt.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is witty and engaging.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph piqued my curiosity. I loved the bit about being on Tik Tok.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was a bit disappointed with his panda, but it was the clerks who stole the show at the end.

FLOW & PACING

The story didn't feel rushed and put me in the moment.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. Very entertaining! The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4798755

Review of Mystery TV Word Search

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

A word search with TV detectives

WHAT I LIKED

I had no idea how many TV detectives there was!

ENGAGING

The word search was a good size. It was a tad intimidating and I couldn't find Monk. Grr.. Good amount of words to look for.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices of TV detectives and shows.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction did a nice job setting the table of the word search. If anything I might represent a giphy or a graphic to set a visual tone/mood. I thought the activity was a lot of fun. Good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest!

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#4798752

Review of Horror Weapon Word Search

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

A word search with Halloween horror weapons.

WHAT I LIKED

Despite the bit morbid topic, this was a lot of fun. Who knew there were so many gory weapons.

ENGAGING

The word search was the perfect size. I didn't feel intimated by it. Good amount of words to look for.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices between weapons.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction did a nice job setting the theme of the word search. I thought the activity was a lot of fun. Good luck in the Best of the Rest Contest!

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#4798616

Review of We Don't Panda-r to the Customers Here

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the premise of a receiving the panda as a secret santa gift. It was the first one I saw in the contest and it I thought it fit the story well.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is a tad confusing for me, because I think there's 3 people talking - the customer, the panda and the return sales clerk so I was confused on who was speaking at times, so if anything, I might suggest using you a dialogue from time to time to distinguish the speakers.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening piqued my curiosity and I wanted to find out more.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was full of witty of pun-isms which made me smile.

FLOW & PACING

The story didn't feel rushed.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. The puns provide nice, light-hearted comedic beats. The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4798615

Review of Panda Pandemonium

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A man tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

When I read this I just thought: "This is a panda in a China shop!"

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is does a good job telling the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening put the reader right into the story. I thought I was a bystander in the checkout line watching the scene play out.

CHARACTERS

The narrator is a very honest one in that regard. He's returning the panda his ex gave him because he didn't buy her a ring so maybe he deserved it?

FLOW & PACING

The story didn't feel rushed. Nice side conversations put the reader in the moment.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Physical action of twisting and turning the giant panda leads to the comedic beats. Entertaining! The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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Review of Do You Hear What I Hear

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE WORD SEARCH

A warmhearted word search with words inspired by the Christmas song, "Do You Hear What I Hear."

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the theme of the word search.

ENGAGING

The word search kept me hunting for the words. The smaller words where a bit challenging but a diligent hunt will expose them.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices of words which fit the theme well.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or a gify or even a youtube video in the introduction to set the mood for the word search, if doable. A very entertaining puzzle.

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#4798154

Review of A Black and White Situation

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A customer tries to return a giant panda he received as a gift.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the Panda's initiative wrist bracelet. It added a nice layer of comedy to the story and made me laugh.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is snappy and engaging.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph piqued my curiosity and I wanted to find out why the narrator was returning the bear.

CHARACTERS

The narrator was a bit disappointed with his panda, but it was the panda who stole the show with his music.

FLOW & PACING

The story has a sold beginning, middle and end. The story didn't feel rushed.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. Very entertaining! The Word Count was listed in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest. Good luck in the Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4797530

Review of Dear Me

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE ESSAY

This is a motivational essay that sets the tone for author's writing goals in 2020.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the honest, introspective look by the author. Sometimes, it's hard to be honest with ourselves, especially if we've let ourselves done, but I like the hopeful tone set in the author's reflections.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is written in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

GOAL SETTING

There's an assessment of 2019 writing goals and goals listed for the upcoming year.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest increasing the font so as to make it easier on the eyes here on WDC.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader using a conversational voice. While an older "Dear Me" essay it hits all the 'high' notes with a motivational tone of voice and realistic goals that could be applied even now.

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