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Review of Before the Rain Stop

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Rated: 18+

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THE POEM

A poem about enjoying passion as it rains.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the dichotomy of the stormy rain storm playing out against the backdrop of heated lovers' passion.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem with a ABCC DDEE FGHH rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a visual quality to it when read out loud.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Let’s splash in puddles pooling at our feet, forget our worries and act indiscreet." This is a very carefree verse to me, one that speaks to enjoying moment, whatever that moment is.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening line draws the reader in with an invitation to dance in the rain. It's a bit suggestive, makes one raise an eyebrow, yet the cadence is irresistible. The title fits the poem well. The poem evokes emotion well.

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Review of My Favorite People in WdC

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Rated: E

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THE WORD SEARCH

"My Favorite People at WDC" are a list of WDC Community members that the creator considers their "favorites."

WHAT I LIKED

I liked that that the word search was of WDC community members. I knew a some of them, but there were more for me to meet.

ENGAGING

The word search was fun to do. I would say it was a medium difficulty. I liked learning the names of other community members.

VARIETY

There were a lot of names in the word search.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the word search, if doable. I enjoyed the creativity of the word search and appreciated the inspiration to find these members out and check out their ports.

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Review of Cool Dark Night

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Rated: 13+

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THE POEM

The poem spoke to a night in a lover's bed.

WHAT I LIKED

I like the concept of the heat of passionate that a cool dark night could evoke.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem. There is no set rythme scheme, though there are rythmes.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to change font and make easier to read on the website.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Sweet yet wild, a flying dove, taste of love, oh so real." This description implies a lot - a sweet love, that soars to new heights, tangible and real.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is a interesting choice for the poem and it conflicts with the heated tone the contents set. Nice juxtaposition.

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Review of What is a good review to YOU?

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Rated: E

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THE POLL

"What is a good review for YOU," seeks to find what type of review you prefer to receive.

WHAT I LIKED

This is a poll that encourages the writer to really think about what type of review they are the most receptive to.

VARIETY

The poll offers a lot of choices, from just ratings, detailed reviews, and honest critiques.

ENGAGING

The poll had a lot of responses and the top choice had 61 selections.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Good use of WDC ML in the introduction. The introduction set the tone and expectations for the poll. I thought the poll provided a question that offered good reflection on the topic. Well done.

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Review of A Graveside Visit

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Rated: 13+

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THE STORY

A man visits Edgar Allen Poe's grave with a bottle of cognac and 3 black roses. What could possibly go wrong?

WHAT I LIKED

Nice incorporation of the prompt.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: In the dark, I looked around to barely make out alabaster statues adorning the myriad graves. Some were angels, some were crosses, and some were other things." Nice, vivid descriptions. I was creeped out walking through the graveyard.

SETTING

TIME: 1850
PLACE: Poe's grave

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Unnamed narrator

The narrator speaks with Poe's ghost only to find out death might be closer than he thought.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and puts them in the moment. The story followed the prompt well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. an eerie tale that leaves goosebumps on the arms. Good luck in the contest.

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Review of Red Frog Man

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Rated: 13+

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THE STORY

A man goes on a haunting journey with the ghost of Edgar Allen Poe.

WHAT I LIKED

Very spooky indeed! Very good incorporation of the prompt.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: The road trailed off into puddles of frozen mud, slivers of cracked ice thrusting through my pants as I sank down, drawing closer to the wrought-iron graveyard gates with each treacherous step." What an incredible, vivid description using a good economy of words. It really put me in the moment.

SETTING

TIME: 1850
PLACE: Poe's grave

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Unnamed narrator

The narrator wants to speak with Poe's ghost, but gets more than bargained for.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make the story easy to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. The story followed the prompt well. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. A spooky story that leaves goosebumps on the arms. Good luck in the contest.

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Review of Fundraisers

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Rated: E

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THE FOLDER

This folder helps to organize Lilli's fundraiser and raffles.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the organization of the folder. All the items fit well.

ENGAGING

The folder holds a lot of different raffles. Most are closed right now, but could easily be opened when the time comes making this folder a very convenient place to hold these items.

VARIETY

There were a lot of differently themed raffles for different occasions.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

What an amazing library of raffles and fundraiser and I couldn't think of a better place to house them.

You've done a great job with the organization of this folder.

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Review of Shakespeare --How Well Do You Remember?

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Rated: E

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THE QUIZ

This is a quiz about Shakespeare's plays.

WHAT I LIKED

I think if you like Shakespeare and you've read his plays, you'll really enjoy taking this quiz.

ENGAGING

The quiz offers 5 questions. Each question is unique and challenging.

VARIETY

The variety stayed focused on Shakespeare's writing, so know your stuff!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Good use of a graphic in the title to set the tone/mood of the quiz. This is something can be expanded on and is never out of date.

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Review of Do You Know Dogs?

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Rated: E

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THE QUIZ

This is a really interesting quiz about Dog breeds.

WHAT I LIKED

I think if you know a little about dogs, this quiz is challenging and still fun. I learned a little something about dog breeds taking this quiz. The creator did a great job making the questions not too hard so you didn't get frustrated.

ENGAGING

The quiz offers 10 questions. Each question is unique and challenging.

VARIETY

There were a lot of good questions that stayed focused on the topic.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The graphic in the title helps to set a mood/tone for the quiz. If anything, I might suggest jazzing up the introduction a little bit more so as to get the quiz taker psyched. Maybe throwing up a graphic or gify of two of some the breeds mentioned in the quiz. The quiz was a good challenge and I enjoyed taking it.

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Review of Casting A Spell

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Rated: E

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THE WORD SEARCH

A word search about containing ingredients you'd put in a halloween caldron if you were casting a spell.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the creativity and imagination of the word search. It was fun to find the words.

ENGAGING

The word search offers a lot of unique choices. It wasn't something that you see everyday. I wanted to find all the words and I didn't find the puzzle tedious or boring. It was fun and entertaining.

VARIETY

There were a lot of ingredients!!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic in the introduction to set the tone for the word search, if doable. Gussy the introduction up and really sell the puzzle. I believe there's a "gify" link the WDC ML and that might be a good starting point. Overall, the challenge level was moderate, hard, or easy. Love the imagination it took to create this!

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Review of Another Nessie?

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Rated: E

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THE STORY

After Mayor Writon has sent the mini subs out to investigate Bard's Town lake, he has the answer to Nessie, but the town folk might not like it.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Nothing like a good rain shower.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I especially liked: "the blob that used to be a cow just started absorbing water and bloated up until it looked like a dang sea monster." That's a heck of a visual! I can smell it from here!

SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: Bard's Town lake

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Mayor Writon and the people of Bard's Town.

Mayor Writon is a take charge kind of guy.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and makes them curious about what Writon is going to say. Sentence count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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Review of Mr Pumpkinface

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Rated: ASR

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THE POEM

A light spirited poem about a pumpkin who becomes a spooky face.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the story unfolded. The tone and mood is conversational and fun.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem with lines and the 2nd and 5th lines rythme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Gouged out his seedy innards," I loved the word choice "gouged" here. It's perfect for this time of the year.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening has a nice voice that keeps the reader reading wanting to find out what will happen to the pumpkin. The title is a nice fit for the poem. A perfect poem for the autumn season, harvest, and halloween!

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Review of Untitled on Purpose

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THE POEM

A poem about the scraps of life.

WHAT I LIKED

There are a lot of scraps in life. Why did we throw them away? Or what did we find when we found them?

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Grocery list, lost in the abyss, toss it away, make room for more," It's something we do often, make a grocery list and toss it when we're done. And yet the way this is worded, it's careless, like the list itself. How careless are we with our lists ? And life? The verbiage dares to find a deeper meaning.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening is very conversational and invites the reader to keep reading. The title is a bold fit for the poem. Easy to read, yet thought provoking. Well done.

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Review of Tingling Hooves

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THE POEM

A lighthearted poem about hOOves visit to Ireland.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the adventure hOOves went one from the the Dingle to Galway.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem that follows a limerick structure.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the font bigger and colorize it.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I meandered over and over through the Emerald isle, carrying little else than a smile," I loved this visual. I can easily picture a cow taking their time and drinking in what the sights have to offer. There's a lighthearted vibe and I can't wait to see that hOOves finds.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading. The title is a good fit for the poem. I was down for the adventure with hOOves! A fun little ditty.

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Review of Jenny's cNote Shop

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Rated: E

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THE CNOTES

This a vibrant collection of Cnotes for birthdays, anniversary, promotions and special occasions.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the beach themed cNotes. I thought they were very inspiring and uplifting. I could feel the good vibes!

ENGAGING

There's something going on with each Cnote. The graphics are colorful and appealing.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices for different occasions and I thought the Cnotes were very affordable!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The opening was very appealing and liked the the film strip in the introduction. It complimented the cnotes and set a tone for what to expect. It's a great collection that weaves in fun and positivity. Well Done! I highly recommend this collection if you're looking for a Cnote.

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Review of Dear Me

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THE ESSAY

This is a motivational essay that sets the tone for author's goals in 2022.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. HOOves was picking herself up by the cow hooves and plowing into 2022.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is written in the first person. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

GOAL SETTING

There's an assessment of 2021, which seemed like a tough year. I think it was for all of us. The goal for 2022 was wise up and be "me". It sounds easy, but I also know it's easy to get side tracked. I got the impression that 2022 was a recovery year from 2021.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader using a conversational voice. The ending leaves the reader on an upbeat tone and reminds us all of something important. "Ya gotta be you."

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Review of Hoovsie at the Helm

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

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THE POEM

A poem about a cow and her friend in charge of the USS Enterprise as it ventures out into space.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the creativity and fun nature of the poem. It made me smile.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. The 1st/2nd and 3rd/4th lines rythme, establishing a nice rhythm.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Follow a bull to the heavens, I ask of my crew, Without William Shatner, who knows what they'll do?" This is an easy going poem with several light hearted moments. What I liked about this description is the silliness of it, can you imagine a cow in charge with all their friends? William Shatner seems like a better fit.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader by asking them to tap into their imagination and suspend what we know, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Imaginative and whimsical. A light heart read that makes the reader grin.

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Review of The Sun Waits

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THE POEM

A poem about enjoying the sun.

WHAT I LIKED

Lots of intriguing word choices here. The one that I connected with the most was "radiant," as yes, the sun is radiant, but it's so much more. It gives us radiance. The sun's influence also effects the Earth's schumann frequency with lighting strikes and CMEs.

STRUCTURE

This is a Fibonacci style poem. The style became popular around 2006. Typically, a Fibonacci styled poem is a six-line poem with a syllable count of 1/1/2/3/5/8. Since then, variations have emerged, including poems with more lines, ascending and descending syllable counts, and even experimental forms that expand the Fibonacci sequence.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "sun kissed spirit never feared time's waiting glance" Succinct word choices are used here to paint a vivid a picture. I love the words "sun kissed spirit" - there's a lot of personal meaning here, especially for the individual reader. For me, the sun is a blessing, shining on my spirit, reminding me of all that is good in the world.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening intrigues the reader, and draws them in. The title is a good fit for the poem. The ending line offers juxtaposition, as the sun brings warmth, yet, reflected on water, or too much sun, and offer a burn, so it's best to mindful.

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Review of Aunt Catherine's Blanket

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THE POEM

A fond remembrance of the poet's aunt.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the story the poem told. I felt like I got to know Aunt Catherine a little bit, too.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Using her magic blanket as a shield, so the cats never saw her fear" There's a lot of implied emotion here. A person is hiding behind a blanket, masking a fear (of cats) It's like the blanket gives strength and courage and that's what make it magical.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in leaving them wondering why she's looking in a button box, but not for a button. The title fits the poem well. There's a lot of heartfelt emotion and warmth in the poem. Well done.

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Review of The Long & Winding Moo

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Rated: 13+

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THE MEMOIR

A young tHiNg finds Writing.com early in the 2000's and makes friends while building community.

WHAT I LIKED

Great character voice. It's very conversational and draws you right in.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by tHiNg. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of life on WDC and how fun it can be. ♥noVember tHiNg♥

has been a busy bee here on WDC from writing, reading, product reviews, and creating merit badges.

EMOTIONAL BEATS
I could tell how much tHiNg enjoyed being a member of the community. ((((hugs))) for sharing that mott

had passed away. tHiNg may be a hand, but she's very sweet and human. Thoughts and prayers are with you.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Great use of WDC ML to highlight your WDC memoir.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader right in. when tHiNg isn't tHiNg, hOOves is running lose on the website, sharing her cowisdoms with the community. The writing here is candid, honest, and sincere. tHiNg is such a wonderful member here on WDC. I'm glad to know her and highly recommend people check out her port!

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Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

It's a hot day out and the narrator has a decision to make when he finds dogs in a car.

WHAT I LIKED

The ending! Luckily, the vet performed a miracle!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets the stage for the story's vinyette.

CHARACTERS

The narrator is well intentioned but doesn't know the "rest" of the story.

FLOW & PACING

The flash fiction has a beginning, middle and end.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. For me, I think this is an exercise in life lessons. The word count and "beat the heat" was highlighted in accordance with the contest rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph

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#4774781

Review of An Opus Tie-Dye

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem was an comedic tribute to WDC's birthday.

WHAT I LIKED

I want to hear more about these 3 muses and what kind of trouble they cause.

STRUCTURE

This is a limerick. Limericks are five line poems of a single stanza with an AABBA rhyme scheme. The first, second, and fifth lines tend to have 7-10 syllables, while the third and fourth lines tend to have 5-7 syllables.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it easier on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Like elections, all that back-biting," Okay, it fits the rythme scheme, but it's a great description. It sums up the discord one gets from verbal tongue lashings, evoking emotions of frustrations and then just throwing it out to wind and moving on.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in and keeps them reading with the rythmic flow of a limerick and the comedic touch of the muses. The title is a excellent fit for the poem. I enjoyed the fun and rush of participating in the birthday fun.

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#4774576

Review of The Adonis

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

One way to beat the heat is to relax at an exclusive resort, drink in hand and admiring Adonis.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. Adonis does have a man after all!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 1st person by an unnamed narrator. Presnt tense is used in the story. The tense is consistent.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue comes in at the ending.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment at the pool with a strawberry daiquiri in hand. Well done.

CHARACTERS

What I liked about the narrator is that they embraced the fantasy and enjoyed it. And wouldn't like to lounge around a luxury resort sipping a drinking and admiring the view?

FLOW & PACING

It's spot on for a flash fiction this size with a beginning, middle and end.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier on the eyes to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. The word count was listed and "beat the heat" was highlighted in accordance with the Bard's Hall Contest rules. Good luck in the contest.

Glowing Steph

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#4774372

Review of Beating the Heat

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

Kevin discovers a way to beat the heat wave, but, it just might be poisonous...

WHAT I LIKED

I had a good laugh when I read the ingredients to beat the heat: sodium aluminum perchlorate and airplane fuel sound like a pretty anti-beat the heat forumula.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

Dialogue drives the story. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to Kevin at the bunson burner. Well done!

CHARACTERS

Kevin and Benny.
Benny is the real genius here, but Kevin is also pretty entertaining. There's a lot packed into the characterization considering this is a flash fiction.

FLOW & PACING

It's spot on. Good transitions. I had no problem keeping up.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font for the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. Nice comedic beat with the ingredients used to beat the heat. This is a story that doesn't take itself too seriously. The word count and "beat the heat" were highlighted in accordance with the rules. Good luck the Bard's Hall Contest!

Glowing Steph

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#4774367

Review of Rainbow's Delight

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem an exploration of the rainbow.

WHAT I LIKED

The poet used a good variety of words to describe the rainbow, tapping into emotion nicely.

STRUCTURE

This is a diamante poem. A Diamante poem is a 7 line poem set up in a diamond shape.

Line 1: a noun/subject
Line 2: 2 adjectives describing line 1
Line 3: 3 "ing" words related to line 1
Line 4: use 2 words to describe the noun then 2 words to describe the antonym or synoym in line 7 (if there is an antonym used in line 7, the shift occurs here)
Line 5: 3 "ing" words related to line 7
Line 6: use 2 adjectives descibing line 7
Line 7: the 1st word's antonym or synonym.

While it looks easy, it may take some time to flesh out.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might use WDC ML for centering to create the diamond shape of the poem.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Promising, Fulfilling, Captivating," This the part of the poem where you use action verbs, and what's nice here is that they hint at the emotions and feelings generated when you see a rainbow. The visual presentation of the rainbow is indeed captivating and you want to stare at it and really soak in the experience. The rainbow offers a promise of hope and one can find that fulfilling in the moment.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening teases the reader to keep them reading. The title is a nice fit for the poem. A nice, uplifting and inspirational poem.

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