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Review of Halloween Fun

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE WORD SEARCH

A fun word search perfect for the halloween season.

WHAT I LIKED

There was a nice selection of words that put the puzzle taker in the mood for the season.

ENGAGING

The word search is compact proving very engaging. After finding a word, I wanted to find the next. I'd say the difficulty was about medium.

VARIETY

There were a lot of good choices that embodied the spooky season. Good job with word selection.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a graphic or giphy in the introduction to set the tone for the word search and dress it up a little. Overall the word search was a lot of fun and its one that that Webwitch would definately enjoy.

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#4841383

Review of Jack's Samhain Journey

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: ASR

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THE POEM

The poem was inspired by the legend of Jack O' Lantern.

WHAT I LIKED

A very concise poem that intrigues the reader and piques their curiosity to learn more about Jack O Lantern.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 2 couplets and an AABB rythme scheme. There's a nice beat to the poem that resonates with the reader.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "That poor old soul, that stupid Jack," This a very descriptive line that tells us a little more about Jack. He's been doing whatever he's been doing for a while now, and unfortunately, it's not something that he's excited to do. The line implies he's "forced" into doing it.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening gives and overview to the reader and lets them know what to expect. The title, again, speaks to what to expect. If anything, I might suggest a dropnote or a link to a website that talks a little bit more about the legend. I'm vaguely familiar with it. Overall, a good poem that fits into this time of year.

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#4840796

Review of Holiday Horrors

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This word search is based on the spooky things you'll find during Halloween.

WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the selection of words used. Perfect for this haunting season.

ENGAGING

The puzzle was a lot of fun and very engaging. I'd put the difficulty about a medium. Just when I think I couldn't find a word, it popped up.

VARIETY

There were a lot of good words that embraced the theme of the puzzle.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction kept it simple - for Webbie and her whistles, unique to community. If anything, I might glamorize the intro a bit more to accentuate the theme and mood. Overall, a fun puzzle that's a great fit for the Halloween season~

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#4840681

Review of Halloween Word Search

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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THE WORD SEARCH

A spooky word search that's perfect for Halloween.

WHAT I LIKED

I really enjoyed the word selection. They captured the vibe of the season.

ENGAGING

The word search had me hunting for the next word. It was fun and I couldn't wait to find the next word.

VARIETY

There were a lot of great choices that captured the essence of the season.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

A perfect word search for Webwitch! It's fun, engaging, and will keep you busy! I highly recommend this puzzle

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#4840532

Review of Shopping

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE STORY

Ted and Frank have been up to no good and go to a fix-it place in hopes of fixing their problem.

WHAT I LIKED

The story built suspense well. I was dying to know what they broke!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnisicent. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the story. Dialogue tags are used to add little highlights.

OPENING

The opening intrigues the reader - what strange place are Ted and Frank in? (side note: I just thought Bill might be a better sidekick for Ted, recalling the Bill & Ted movies) Once you find out the place, then the element of suspense comes out.

CHARACTERS

Ted and Frank have a good heart, but you can tell they've been up to some mischief.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the middle set on a solution and end wasn't for Ted and Frank. Well done.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes to read.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. For a Flash, nice character development using dialogue. Kept me guessing right up until the end! A suspense short that will leave the reader smiling.

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#4839846

Review of Elements of Fiction

Review by SpookyBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

A word about elements that are found in writing.

WHAT I LIKED

I thought this is a good way to introduce writing elements to newer writers.

ENGAGING

The word search was a lot of fun. I'd put the difficulty around around medium. Just when I'd get a tad frustrating, I'd find a another word and things would click.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices of writing elements. It was a good mix and if one didn't know an element, they could look one up.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction was simple and set the tone for the puzzle. A good tool to learn more about writing.

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#4839610

Review of The Beatles

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This is a word search with Beatles songs and albums.

WHAT I LIKED

I love the Beatles, so finding this word search was a bunch of fun. Brought back some jamming good memories.

ENGAGING

The puzzle was very engaging. The theme was music and and could hear the songs playing in my head as I worked on the word search.

VARIETY

There were a lot of good Beatles tunes and albums listed. The Beatles had a good library of music to choose from.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction is simple and while the Beatles don't need much in the way of an introduction, I think a giphy or a video of one of their songs would help cement the mood and tone.

I also liked the fact that if you'd never heard of the Beatles, this was a nice introduction to them and would pique your curiousity.

Two

for a rockin' good puzzle.

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#4839397

Review of Harry Potter, The First Book

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

A word search based on "Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone."

WHAT I LIKED

I loved finding all of my favorites. Brought back good memories. It's a great "spooky" word search for this time of year!

ENGAGING

The word search had a lot of word associated with the movie and it brought back how much fun I had watching the movies.

VARIETY

There were a lot of good choices to include characters, places and things associated with the movie.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I might suggest using a giphy in the introduction to set the tone for the puzzle. I would highly recommend this word search for this time of year. Fun and entertaining!

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#4838981

Review of The Best Halloween Costume

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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THE STORY

The adults are going Trick-or-Treating but one adult doesn't have the greatest idea for a costume.

WHAT I LIKED

There were nice comedic elements in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue is the narration. The reader gets the jist of what's happening.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening interests the reader to keep reading. I know adults get into Halloween too, so if anything, I might have had them talking about going to an adult party.

CHARACTERS

Are two adults talking about about going adult trick-or-treating. They're interesting and keep the story amusing.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the drama, the middle builds on the drama and end wasn't picture perfect

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. My suggestion would be to try and paint the adult's costume with the butt a bit better. I couldn't really visualize it as a reader, that may be a challenge with just dialogue only.

BUTT this is a comedy that will make you chuckle.

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#4838969

Review of Disney's Frozen

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This is a word search about the movie Frozen.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the movie Frozen. I think the character of Elsa really connected with people because there's a little bit of Elsa in all of us.

ENGAGING

The word search was a lot of fun and all the words were reflective of the movie. I wanted to finish the puzzle. There were some challenging words like "Sven" and "Elsa" but I'd put the difficulty level about medium.

VARIETY

There were a lot of words use that were reflective of the movie, the characters, and the theme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction did a nice job of setting expectations and introducing us to the word search. A fun word search for Frozen fans!

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#4838851

Review of A Witching We Will Go

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Rated: 18+

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THE STORY

Hetty goes witching on Halloween but forgets one of the most important things. You can't go witching without it!

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the character names from Hetty the witch, Sootytail, Booce, and Grizella! Very creative and they made me chuckle.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnisicent. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets up the drama - it's time to go witching, but when Booce poops out, Hetty and Sootytail have a big problem on their hands. I loved the opening and wanted to keep reading.

CHARACTERS

The characters are riot and perfect for the story.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the middle set on finding a solution and end solved the drama.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title let the reader what to expect from the story. Great comedic elements. A lighthearted chuckle that's perfect for witching.

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#4838849

Review of The Hitchcock Hour

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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THE WORD SEARCH

This word search features the films of Alfred Hitchcock.

WHAT I LIKED

I can't say I saw a whole of lot of the movies, but I knew most of the titles. If you don't know anything about Hitchcock, it's a good introduction to pique your interest.

ENGAGING

The word search had a lot of his movies. I'd find one and go to the next and say "I heard that one!" I was invested in finishing the puzzle.

VARIETY

With Hitchcock's amount of production, there were plenty of movies to choose from.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction did a great job introducing Hitchcock and setting expectations. Well done. The difficulty level for me as a medium. If you like Hitchcock, you'll enjoy this search!

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Review of Famous Canadians

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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THE QUIZ

This is a quiz that tests your knowledge about famous Canadians.

WHAT I LIKED

I've always been intrigued by my neighbors to the north and believe it or not - more things are made in Canada (like my car!!) than you think! Canada is that sneaky little nation that could. This quiz reminds you of that fact.

ENGAGING

I thought the quiz was very engaging. There's a lot of pop culture in the quiz that might surprise you.

VARIETY

The choices for the answers weren't overwhelming, which I appreciated.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The introduction set the tone for the quiz and I knew what to expect from it. Some of the answers you might have to search for, but most will surprise. A fun, educational quiz about famous Canadians.

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#4838613

Review of Coffee Conclusions

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: 13+

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THE STORY

Rebecca is trying to solve a case and gets a little help from her friend.

WHAT I LIKED

I thought that was one heck of a conclusion to come to in that setting, but it worked! You can solve anything over coffee.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the story. Good job with keeping it conversational and easy to understand.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening piques the readers interest. Who doesn't want to find out the rest of the story?

CHARACTERS

Rebecca is our busy sleuth, hanging out with her friend and baby. She's likeable but a bit of a busy body.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the ending comes crashing in like a wave.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story. The conclusion comes just as quickly as a shot of espresso. An entertaining quickie.

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#4838536

Review of Sorting Halloween

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Rated: E

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THE STORY

Little 9 year old Frankie is trying to be scary for Halloween and gets some tips from Dan, his brother.

WHAT I LIKED

That was a suspenseful, scary kinda ending. Dan kinda had it coming to him.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omnisicent. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the narration. It's not easy for a 9 year old to come up with a costume worthy of Halloween.

OPENING

The opening sets the stage for what to expect. Can Frankie scare Dan? It might take a lot to get there...

CHARACTERS

Frankie is a sweet kid who tries hard to capture the spirt of Halloween. I'm glad his parents were able to help.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem and end wasn't for everyone. Well done.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story and will keep the reader on the edge of their seat with anticipation.

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#4838532

Review of The Jetson's meet Indiana Jones

Review by SpookyBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: 18+

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THE STORY

Indiana Jones was having a bad day and discovers a mirror...

WHAT I LIKED

I think there's a lot of potential here to flesh out a full story. The premise certainly piqued my curiosity.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets the reader up regarding the 'state' that Indy finds himself in.

CHARACTERS

Indiana Jones finds himself down and out on his luck.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set does a good introducing the character. If anything, I thought this was a good pitch for the beginning of an interesting story.

MECHANICS

I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation and capitalization.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title hints at more than the pitch offers. I would flesh it out a little more. There's a lot of potential here.

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#4838328

Review of Founders Day Fiasco

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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THE STORY

O'Leary and his gang of cops chase a ski boat with the possible treasure taken from the Founder's Day Pirate's ship. It's one distraction after another until O'Leary figures it out.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the very exciting ski boat chase and the people on the pirate ship did, too!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense was used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets up the dilemma with Brimley lurking around the ship in suspicious manner and Bingo squawking where's the treasure. It piques the reader's interest and keeps them reading.

CHARACTERS

There's a unique blend of characters from hard charging O'Leary, Bingo the parrot, the obvious suspect, Brimley, to the spectators on the pirate ship. They're lively, engaging, and keep the reader interested.

FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the problem, the middle was full of action and the ending was unexpected.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to vary the font color and size.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title was appropriate to the story. The author does a great job fitting mishaps and mayhem with a touch of comedy in 25 lines and followed the writing the prompt. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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#4838161

Review of Bound in Hell

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Rated: ASR

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THE POEM

A soul is sent to the depths of the ugly netherworld.

WHAT I LIKED

The intro line was "Found myself speaking in the Cryptkeeper's voice while writing this piece." -- After reading the poem, I have to agree. The poem was creepy and eerie, and unsettling, everything the Cryptkeeper's voice is.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem that alternates a 4 line stanza with a 3 line stanza. In the 4 line stanzas the 2nd and 4th lines rythme. In the 3 line stanzas the 1st and 3rd lines rythme. Good job with the rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: He felt a gritty, angry fog, heave looming in the air, Tough to breathe and hard to see. Crows cawed a frightening scare.," This is the opening and it paints gritty, uneasy visuals. It settles the reader in and let's them know what to expect, evoking goosebumps on the arms and unease in the heart.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title lets you know what to expect with the poem. Perfect creepiness for this time of year as Halloween approaches. I have no suggestions for improvement. Nice word play leaves the reader feeling creeped out.

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#4837828

Review of Spooky Music

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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THE WORD SEARCH

A word search with a paranormal/Halloween type theme.

WHAT I LIKED

The word search had some great words and while they were scary, the poem wasn't all that intimidating! I had a fun time solving it.

ENGAGING

The puzzle was very engaging. The words fit the theme and guitar playing skeleton put me in the mood to solve it!

VARIETY

There were a lot of good choices associated with the spooky time of year. Good word selection.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the introduction did a good job setting the tone and mood of the word search and it helped make the puzzle fun.

If you're looking for a spooky good time in October, this puzzle will give it to you!

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#4837827

Review of Just a Pinch

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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"Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com!

I popped into your port for an anniversary review and found some lobster.

This interesting poem has eight couplets that rythme. Being a lobstah girl myself, I thought I'd see what the menu offered.

Our narrator was concerned that the cod(fish) was going to eat all the tasty lobster and so cast a spell for that to stop. I was very surprised to learn, after doing some research, that cod are a natural predator to lobster. Ultimately, our story has a happy ending with our narrator savoring a tasty claw.

This was a highly entertaining poem, especially with its whimsical rythmes and storytelling.

My only suggestion would be to consistently punctuate the poem, as it would help establish a beat when read out loud.

If you enjoy a tasty buttered lobster this one's for you!

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#4837825

Review of Early Morning

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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"Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com!

I spied some nature poetry in your port and decided to pop in and check it out for an anniversary review.

This is a two stanza poem with four lines each. The first stanza paints the dawn, the second stanza paints the sunset.

I really enjoyed the visuals in the first stanza as the autumn leaves start to pop as the sun gazes down upon them. It evokes a warming emotion.

The second stanza evokes the stars at night as a guiding light until the dawn comes again.

The 2nd and 4th lines of the stanzas rythme.

I especially liked:
Muted autumn treetops
Sprouting colors from Your Hand.

Nice word play to evoke a stunning visual laced with layers of warmth and hope.

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

My only suggestion, and this is tough because I like the poem as is, is maybe define the beat a bit more so it doesn't sound so stilted when read out loud.

A nice play on the meaning of dawn and twilight in our lives.

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#4837743

Review of Dear Me

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

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"Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com!

I popped into your port for an Anniversary review and was attracted to your Dear Me entry for 2013.

Your entry was all about nature - trying to compose a Dear Me entry surrounded by the trees and leaves and the rain. Swift the dog was a nice companion and after the raindrops had fallen, there was another attempt to put together a Dear Me entry surrounded by nature's beauty.

I really enjoyed the imagery of the post and how being in nature is inspirational to writing.

My suggestion would be to establish clear writing goals for the year next time you attempt a Dear Me, as I believe the contest encourages more concrete goals that you check in with throughout the year to monitor your progress. Your entry paints more of a picture of the writing process as opposed to things you want to accomplish.

Overall, a fun, whimsical musing on the adventures of composing a Dear Me entry.

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Review of Revenge of Squirrels

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

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I popped into your port for an Anniversary review and the title sucked me in. I was curious what a Squirrel revenge would look like.

Sounds the squirrel had an account on social media and went to town telling their tall squirrel tales. who would believe them? Sounds like their tall tails won the day.

This is a poem with 5 stanzas and 5 lines each. The rythme scheme alternates in the stanzas, with one line unrhythmed.

There's a lot of fickle word play in the poem which strikes a fleeting, zig-zag image - kind of like how a squirrel maneuvers.

I especially liked:
Chittering, frittering days away
squirrels gossip on smart phones
making quite the play

Good use of "ing" verbs here to put the squirrels in play. The image is a whimsical one, yet the squirrels take on a human quality - don't we all do this one way or another?

In a serious light the poem gives the reader pause to think about the behavior and it is something they really want to do themselves? In a more lighthearted light, the poem makes the reader chuckle at the imagery.

My only suggestion, and this minor because I like the poem as it is, is to maybe add a period after the last line in the stanza as if to give the "vinyette" a finality to it and move on to the next chapter?

A fun poem that doesn't take itself to seriously, yet makes the reader maybe it does.

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Review of Dad

Review by SpookyBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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I popped into your port for an anniversary review and was intrigued by the description of the poem - a palindrome.

This poem is about the relationship between a father and son throughout life. The palindrome involves the second stanza and how it mirrors the first.

I thought this was poem was amazing in how it captured a young son/boy/teenager's thoughts about his parents and how his father think they are losing them, and then to flip that, as the son is now older and it's the parent who becomes lost with Alzheimers.

I especially liked:
"Slipping away slipping
day by day"

The wording is simple with refrain like qualities that demonstrate how slowly a parent loses a son during the teenage years and how slowly an adult man loses his older father with Alzheimers.

My only suggestion, and this is minor, to maybe include some punctuation to solidify the beat of the poem.

A Poignant and heartfelt poem. Well done.

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Review of Heaven

Review by SpookyBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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I wanted to do an Anniversary Review and the title of the poem, Heaven, lured me in. We all have different outlooks on Heaven and I wanted to explore yours.

This is a poem with 4 four lined stanzas and an _A_A rythme scheme. Each stanza opens with a repetitive "I long," which builds cohesion within the poem.

The poem expresses a longing to be in the presence of God, which is something a lot of people can relate to, myself included.

I especially liked:
I long to sit among you
on the ground at His feet,
singing the unknown praises

It's an easy visual and brings to mind when Mary was sitting at Jesus' feet and listening to his word while Martha worked on being a good hostess. It's an uplifting passage.

My only suggestion would be to make the 1st and 3rd lines rythme, as that would "cement" the beat of the poem when read out loud.

A very inspirational poem.

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