An amazing transition you have described it to be and I'll just bet you've already got the recipe that makes a wonderful grandmother.
You've described the unfamiliarity, the awakened subconscious fear of the unknown and all those things you expect will occur but you made this story into a thought provoking, very charming journey. The only thing I would suggest you watch is your uncertainty with some words. eg; your use of 'conger' in the first paragraph I assume is meant to be conjure (to arouse or evoke in the mind). Use double spacing too when you're drafting your work, it makes for easier reading. I thought this was a beautiful representation of Grandmotherhood. Thoroughly enjoyed it.
As a child, 'tossing shreds of natural confetti into the air' delighted me no end after the lawn was mowed. This particular image captured memories too long forgotten and as I read through your verse I could share it again. For that I thank you. This piece is descriptive and fragrant if I can use that term. I became momentarily saddened as you described the languishing blades of grass but how uplifting to know that you (and I) will mow our grass again and experience the smell of a fresh mown lawn. This was a powerfully descriptive, informative and image inducing write. Much enjoyed.
I enjoyed reading your work and read it twice; As I read, I felt your poem spoke of being ill prepared for what being over 25 can offer, together with the unprecidented thoughts and journey into pending divorce not only of marriage but life as it had been known. It was intriguing. It was descriptive and at times threw in the odd oblique which was thought provoking and made me imagine. However, I found myself 'unfinished' at the end which seemed abrupt. I felt disappointed that it was all over. Perhaps you could round off your ending, giving the reader a place to go or perhaps a direction into the next sphere. Overall I loved it. Very Inspiring.
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