I liked the poem, but there were some typos that distracted from the sheer pleasure of it. I made some corrections and suggestions. Also, I added some color to recommend and encourage you to use color.
Flowers are known as beautiful things, a gesture of love on Valentine's Day.
They symbolize everything positive, nothing negative whatsoever.
Flowers = love.
Love is known as a beautiful thing as well, smiles, intimate contact, marriage, all supposed to be happy.
But anyone who has been through love knows it's not all happy, there are tears, hatred, yelling, fighting, etc.
Love has its bad side.
Everything has its bad side.
Just like flowers.
Some of them have thorns.
Just like you.
You are beautiful, you smile and laugh at school or at work, and you never seem down, until you get home to your empty apartment.
In dead silence, you walk through the door and look around the room, and you feel alone.
You are beautiful just like a flower, but you also have thorns.
That's okay.
I do too. |