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Review of Winter's Grime  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello! I am reviewing your story today because you posted before I did in "I Write in 2025" Open in new Window.. I am associated with other review groups as well.

I always like to have pictures added to my static items because they add to the reader's appeal and help draw the potential reader's attention. I did not notice any spelling, grammatical or punctuation errors. The story is quick and to the point, yet easy to relate to.

I enjoyed reading your story. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work.

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Review of The Liver Pump  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" Open in new Window. and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" Open in new Window.

I am not seeing any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors that are jumping out at me. You could add a picture to help draw potential readers in. Maybe a picture of a drawn machine plan or of medical staff performing an implantation of the device. Even the medical symbol on ambulances would work. The title and description are good.

This device sounds like quite the medical and scientific breakthrough. It is written in a way that this fictional story is very realistic and believable. Great job on that! That isn't an easy task for some of us writers.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.

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Review of Monday  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" Open in new Window. and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" Open in new Window.

I did not notice any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. I always think adding a picture to an item helps draw the attention of a potential reader, and your title and description are good for this as well. Maybe, you could add a picture of a calendar with a Monday circled on it or something to that effect. I think a lot of readers can identify with this poem as a lot of them feel exactly this way about Mondays. Sometimes it's very hard to get out of bed when you are anticipating a chaotic day such as Monday and all the things that come with it. The item has some negativity but also points out some positive ideas as well.

Overall, I think this poem is put together well and expressed well. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review of White Balloons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" Open in new Window. and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" Open in new Window..

I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. This item has a pleasing rhythm to the ears when read out loud. It is a sad occasion. The title, description, and picture is great for drawing the attention of a potential reader. You get what you expect. They say that releasing ballons into the air is bad for the environment though. I can feel the emotions of this item as I read it.

It is a solid piece of writing. Great Job! I look forward to reading more in the future. Thanks for sharing it.

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Review of Forgotten World  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group, but am here today because of a prompt for "Space Blog" Open in new Window. and there is a review raid happening with "SuperPower Reviewers Choice Raid" Open in new Window..

I did not notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. I think the title, description and picture is just right to draw attention to your writing from a potential reader. The rhythm and rhyme are pleasing to the ears when read out loud. The message is conveyed clearly and accurately. Although, Elon Musk is trying to get us to live on Maes from what I've heard, but I'd much rather stay here and take care of the planet we are on.

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Review of Dear Journal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello! I am here as an answer to a prompt from "Space Blog" Open in new Window. and am associated with more than one review group.

The only suggestions I have would be to add a comma after "Dear journal" and to maybe add a picture to help draw in potential readers to your item. Everything else seems good to me.

Personally, I am not sure what to believe about other life forms on other planets. I don't doubt there might be some interesting critters out there in the universe, but only God knows where they are truly from and the entire truth about extraterrestrial beings.

Overall, I find this to be a thought provoking read. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review of Ruff Rider  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
And you didn't even find the missing dogs? LOL

Hi! I am associated with several different review groups. However, I am here to review your item today as a prompt for "Space Blog" Open in new Window..

I am not noticing any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I love the sense of humor portrayed in your writing. It is something considered mundane yet presented in a fun way.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item today because it was used as a prompt in "Space Blog" Open in new Window..

I did notice a couple of things that may use some improvement.

1 He woke with a start he looked around frantically.
I feel like this could be two separate sentences. (He woke with a start! He looked around frantically.)

2 He tried to remember his name but it was not there.
This sentence could use a comma. (He tried to remember his name, but it was not there.)

3 We are safe for now. but I can not maintain
Can not should be one word. (cannot)

4 "the Trik'ods are also known as
The T in the should be capitalized as it is the beginning of a quote. ("The Trik'ods are also known as)

5 The Draem Eaters.
Dream is misspelled and the end quotes are missing. (The Dream Eaters.")

I hope this is a help to you as I am also just another writer on WDC. Overall, it has the potential to become an even larger fascinating story. It is an interesting read. Thanks for sharing. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review of The Wall  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, I am affiliated with more than one review group. However, I am here to answer the prompt in "Space Blog" Open in new Window..

I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. There is a lot of emotion and meaning packed into this 55-word story. It's a sad story with a sad ending. It is short, bittersweet and to the point. I have no suggestions for improvement. The picture and the title give all the information needed to bring in a potential reader. It would make an interesting beginning of a novel.

Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future,

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Review of Errands  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. I am here because of the prompt in Space Blog.

I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I wonder if perhaps adding a picture of a to do/check list would help draw a potential reader's attention to your poem. Although the title is something we can all relate to. We all have errands to complete. I think laundry and dishes are the tasks that never end, but that's beside the point. It is quite annoying when people add to your to-do list especially when it's already overwhelming you or it is almost done. The frustration is well expressed in this poem.

Overall, a poem that expresses the frustration shared by many other people as well. Great job! I will look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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Review by Marvelous Friend Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am affiliated with more than one review group. However, I am brought here today as a prompt from "Space Blog" Open in new Window..

As I read through this fake news article, I couldn't help but laugh to myself. It is quite creative. I have to admit, this is the first time I've ever heard of assisted technicide. Poor fax machine, so under-appreciated. What a fun read even with the sad ending!

I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. The story is written in such a way that someone could easily mistake it for truth if it wasn't described as fictitious.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your news article. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am affiliated with more than one review group, and it was the Space Blog prompt that brought me here today.

I didn't notice any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. I also double checked with Grammarly. When reading the poem out loud, the rhyme and rhythm are pleasing to the ears.

First the poem points out how God is everywhere and in everything. Then it points out that he is in other people too. These other people sometimes need you to show them the God in you.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading the poem. Great Job! I look forward to reading more of your work.

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for entry "My Dear Ken" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item now because you posted before me in "I Write in 2025" Open in new Window..

I didn't notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors jumping out at me and bopping me on the nose. So, that's a good thing. :)

I read the poem out loud. Mostly, it flows really well and is pleasing to the ears. I have to admit that the ending caught me a bit off guard. It's not what I would have expected. It is a quirky and funny little poem. You might consider entering it in "The Humorous Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. also. Of course, that's completely up to you.

Overall, I enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more of your work iin the future. Thanks for sharing it. Great writing!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello! I am affiliated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item today because you posted before me in "I Write in 2025" Open in new Window.. Of course, I am just sharing my honest opinion which you can choose to take or leave. I use Grammarly to assist me with punctuation issues. I will give you some suggestions and I hope they assist you in reaching your fullest potential.

The suggested correction will be in red.

1 Damn you, Michael Jackson!

I would add a comma after you in this sentence.

2 down the mall's corridors,

Malls needs an apostrophe to show possesion.

3 twenty-some-odd

Grammarly suggests adding hyphens here.

4 Blaze cocked his brow,

Grammarly suggests adding a comma after brow.

5 I tried to meet his gaze,

A comma is needed here before the conjunction, "but.

6 "Oh my gosh, oh my gosh, omygosh (oh my gosh)!"

Your 3rd oh my gosh kind of ran together there. :)

These are pretty much minor errors. Overall, the story definitely keeps the reader's attention. I realize it is part of the character's speech, but there is a lot of "kindda, gotta, wanna, etc... type of expressions. You may want to consider changing that to more proper speech, but that is up to you and how you want to represent your character. Other than that, I don't have any suggestions for improvement. I didn't see any other errors that stood out to me.

Thanks for sharing your story. Great job writing. I will look forward to reading and reviewing more of your work in the future.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I am affiliated with a few different review groups. I am here because of a prompt in Space Blog.

Your title "A Little Sapling" is perfect for this poem. It not only catches the attention but is pleasing to the ears and gives a pleasant vibe. However, the title and description does not give away the entire story. There is just enough information to draw in the curiosity and get your potential reader's attention. Perhaps a picture of a similar sapling would help bring attention to this item also.

When read out loud, this poem is music to the ears. The rhyme and rhythm are just right. I did not notice any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. The ending caught me by surprise because the sapling was dead due to unintentional childhood foolishness. Could it be that a lesson was learned from this? Is there a moral to the poem's story? I would have liked to have heard more about it. Maybe you could add a verse or 2 to the poem to answer these questions.

Overall. I enjoyed reading your item. Thanks for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
You forgot Nowhere in Oklahoma. LOL

I am affiliated with more than one review group. What brought me to review your poem today was the prompt in Space Blog.

This was a fun poem to read. I didn't notice any spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. The title and description are great. I am not sure what kind of a photo you could add to this, maybe a map of the US or something like that. There are so many fun city and town names. It would be hard to cover them all, but I like the way these are presented here. I couldn't help but chuckle to myself.

Thanks for sharing such a fun poem and bringing a smile to my face. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work.

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Review of The Hermit's Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am associated with more than one review group. I am reviewing your item primarily because it is part of the Space Blog prompt for today.

Sometimes as a leader/mentor, it is hard to find time alone. I think we all need solitude every now and then to give ourselves time to reflect, regroup, recharge, and heal. I am impressed the story's character was able to wait twelve years before moving to another location. I can certainly understand his frustration. It was easy for me to relate to him.

I did not notice any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. I know some people would prefer you spell out the numbers for the age. For a short story, it expresses quite a bit of information.

Overall, it was a simple and enjoyable read. I do always encourage adding a photo to help draw attention to the item. The description is what originally caught my attention and drew me in. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your writing.

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Review of Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am associated with more than one review group. Besides it being the month of your account anniversary, your item is also a blog prompt for Space blog which I am trying to help make active again. Happy account anniversary!

There is a lot to take in considering this is a very short story. It seems there is a lot going on. I did not notice any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors by the way. There is quite a good and picturesque description of the sun rising. I picture a very warm, spring day. I picture a light breeze and the scent of freshly budding plants. Then the attention is turned indoors. A baby is being born. The theme of the story seems to be new beginnings with a pleasant and happy vibe. I often do wonder what goes through the new born's mind as it takes it all in.

Thanks for sharing this lovely story with us. I enjoyed reading it. Great job. I look forward to reading more.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am affiliated with Anniversary review group, WDC SuperPower review group, and Positive hearts review group. I came across this item through Space Blog. Happy Account Anniversary by the way.

I did not notice any grammatical or punctuation error. The poem has a nice rhyme and Rythm. It is short sweet and to the point. It is a great description of a mother. Often, Actions do speak louder than words. When read out loud, it is pleasing to the ears. It brings feelings of warmth and fond memories of my own mother.

Thanks for your thoughts in this poem. Great job! Keep writing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, I am reviewing you item today for the Space Blog prompt. I chose happiness today too. Who wants to be depressed? Not me. I could very easily relate to the message of your story. It brought out some very good points. Sometimes, it is easier to be depressed because life can be hard with it's circumstances. We can't control what happens to us all the time, but we can choose how to respond. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or punctuation errors. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. I find it an inspiring read. Great job!

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Review of And I Did It.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I didn't notice any grammatical errors or spelling errors. I think this little story describes an encounter with a mosquito very well. They are some pesky little bugs. I definitely try to squish them when they are flying around me too.

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Review of The Vote  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I just happened upon this item while looking for things to read and review. I did not notice any spelling or grammar errors. I would hate to be a part of this group. Sounds like their discussion was all over the place. I personally like to keep things simple. Sounds like that is what Jane likes too. Happy writing.

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Review of Magenta and Green  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I happened to notice you are having an account anniversary this month. So, happy account anniversary!

I looked at this poem in your portfolio because the title and the description grabbed my attention. It would be really cool for you to add a cover photo too. That may also help draw a potential reader's attention.

This poem expresses some concerns for our current economy and also speaks of what brings you peace in a time like this. I thought the rhythm and rhyme were pleasing to the ears when read out loud.

Overall, I enjoyed your poem and can relate to it very well. Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, I see it's your account anniversary once again. Happy Account Anniversary!

I love acrostic poetry and decided to take a look at your item here. May I suggest putting the first letter of every line in Bold and/or another color to make it stand out to see the acrostic word(s) for the poem? I would also suggest capitalizing the A in adventure in the title. Adding a cover photo would also help to draw attention to your work.

This is a nice poem, and it brings out some deep thoughts and feelings about seeing God work in your life. I can see your desiring the prize at the end and your yearning for God's will and purpose to be carried out. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Last Snow Day  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the structure of the poem. When read aloud, it is pleasing to the ears. This poem provokes thought. Is a new ice age coming? It also defines a current event with the anticipation of more to come.

I don't know if this was intentional, but all of the first letters in your lines are capitalized except for the one line in this verse:

Turning the world
Into a deep freeze zone.
The last snowfall
of the year
Ended finally.

Then your instructions for the contest appear twice at the bottom of the poem. I didn't notice any other things that could be improved on in the writing.

However, in the description there are no capital letters. I would think at least the I in Ice should be capitalized, although it is a catchy description that will indeed help draw readers in.

It is a pretty cover picture and a good title.

Overall, it was an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing it. Wonderful work!


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