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Overall Impression:
A poem about a terrible accident(is drunk driving ever an accident?). The writers writes about the price one or more people might pay if you take a drink or two and drive.
Creativity/Impact:
This was a very powerful poem about the dangers of drunk driving. You take us from the party, to the street of trick or treaters, then to the morning after.
What I personally liked the Most:
The poem was done as if it was a personal, real experience. The reader is able to see/feel the horror of this fateful night by reading the driver's 'thoughts' and words. I hope that anyone who reads this takes something away when them about how stupid it is to drink and drive. I hope this saves one life.
Some of the most powerful lines were:
It wasn't meant to be this way, as I look back at that night.
It was party-time and drinks flowed free, it was sheer delight. great start to this poem. The words grabbed my attention and held me fast in their grips.
I felt the bump and heard the thud, then my blood ran cold.
The car swerved around the devil himself (he wasn't very old). *gave me shivers*
I JUST noticed the rhyming scheme. I did not notice it at first and that to me means that you did an excellent job! The rhyme scheme was AA,BB,- very difficult to stick to through a long poem like this one. great job!
Suggestions:
The verse:
My head ached and I felt really sick, I needed to get home,
knowing it was Halloween night and kids were sure to roam.
I slowed down to thirty-five, which seemed to be a safer speed
and lit myself a cigarette just because I felt the smoking need. I think the first sentence should end with a period. I do not think your knowing it is Halloween night has anything to do with you being sick. i do, however, think the third line goes with the second and not the last. I would Take the 'and' out of the last line and put a period on the end of sentence three. It may be just me, and do as you feel is right, but I think those lines go together (2 and 3) and the others stand alone.
I rolled the car window down to breathe in the fresh night air,
seeing children up ahead who were walking without a care you switch from a past tense with this to a present tense...with the word used previously and then the word 'seeing'
I sped away into the night in hopes that I wouldn't be caught,
no one would know and I would get away, likely as naught. I find the second line a little awkward. I think you could reword it to make a stronger statement. (again just my opinion).
Summary:
I am very glad I had the chance to read this. I think it is very suited for the season and hope people take heed to your wise words of warning.
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
An awesome article on how to create a static item. My daughter joined (she lives in another state) and did not know how to navigate this site or create a static item. It was very hard to explain to her on the phone. I would rather 'show' then tell, but you did an awesome job at explaining the 'how to's'. I have bookmarked this so she can read it.
Suggestions:
I hope this is put somewhere where newbies can find it easily. I am not sure why some people have a problem navigating the simple starting points of this site, maybe it is because this is their first forum like site they have belonged to...but this would definitely help them.
What I personally liked the Most:
okay, this is just funny! First, let us explore what a static item is not. A static item is not the sock stuck to your pajamas because you forgot to throw in a dryer sheet; and a static item is not the subject matter of your mother-in-law’s latest ploy to cause trouble in your marriage!
I love the use of the acronym "S.L.I.C.K." Simple Steps to Create a Static Item
You did make it seem very simple, although you went to great lengths to address any issues a beginner may have creating their first posting.
Summary:
I loved this! I hope it gets awarded soon. If it is not soon, I will do it myself-later after I have the points to do so! This piece of helpful info you created deserves recognition
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Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
Wow! This piece was like a pep-talk written to yourself but also served as a how to guide for me. It is very inspirational. I wonder if you kept the ball rolling with trying to keep all the promises you made to yourself in regards to your writing. There was much you wanted to do this year. I hope you do not find your self a failure if you did not do every little thing listed.
Suggestions:
I think this would be a great activity for others. I am not sure if you head any groups or put on events, but this one would be a great one for all to try on New years
What I personally liked the Most:
M is for Motivate My Muse
I is to Inspire for Inspiration
N is for Novel Write Now
E is to End 2009 Empowered! For lack of a better word, this is 'cool!'
You write down goals, the most important one seeming to be: finishing your novel. Are you close?
I love how you redefine failure. I also do not believe failure as something that is in my life. I only fail if I do not get up and try again.
Summary:
This piece empowered me. I thank you for writing it. for you, for me to read. LOL! Does that make sense? I hope so.
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Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
Review 3/5
The form used:A 5 day-5week Poetry Entry based on the prompt: "cyberbullies"
Form: Terzanelle is a great way to drive a theme home. The refrains allow you to repeat those really powerful lines. There is no meter or syllable count dedicated to this form, but each line should be of similar length or metrical count. The rhyme pattern for this form is: A1B1A2, B2C1B1, C2D1C1, D2E1D1, E2F1E1, F2A1F1A2 OMG! I can't even imagine myself trying to make a poem using this form. I have such difficulty with anything other then free verse or simplistic rhyming schemes. I did write one formal poem (thanks Paper Dolls) but I think I need to practice more to ever be able to achieve a coherent piece, especially with this kind of difficult form.
What I personally liked the Most:
This piece really spoke to me. It scares me. I know that my daughter has been abused online and through text messages. I hate that it is now so simple to abuse another through a few rapid motions on a keyboard. It also leaves the 'author' the ability to abuse anonymously, striking without real repercussions or guilt.
I think this has become a serious problem, cyber-bullies...
I appreciated your writing such a moving piece speaking of this malignancy. Words can be a vile poison. You can not always cure the disease...
In desperation, to end the torment,
a choice that denies the tears that will fall
inundating the hearts of the innocent. I am not entirely sure that I am not reading more into this then was intended...it just tugged at my heart reading these words. I can not help but think of Kat (my daughter) when reading these words. It almost tore me apart...
I can not express myself fully and it is frustrating to me. I both love and hate this poem. It is so very personal to me. *sighs* Very well written and despite myself, it is one of my favorite works of yours thus far. You brought the horror into the light to be recognized by those who may not even know the monster exists.
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
review 2/5
Form: The Kyrielle form is very flexible, in that there are only three basic rules: (1) written in rhyming quatrains (4-line stanzas), (2) the last line of each stanza is repeated throughout the entire poem, and (3) each line has only 8 syllables.
This author writes about a child who abused for years, finally takes her revenge...I think.
ken, I am a little confused about this. Did she cut herself or another? I read it as she took the knife to the abuser. Maybe it is just wishful thinking. I do not think this affects the quality of the work as it could be left to the reader to interpret it the way they wish, i only want to know what YOU were thinking.
Suggestions:
My suggestion would only be to make sure the reader knows who is being slashed, if you wish to not leave it open to interpretation.
What I personally liked the Most:
The story was sad, haunting and hurt my heart.
Some of my favorites bits were:
deliverance to her hand springs,
the knife gleams like an angel's wings.
Tears cannot wash her sanguine cheeks the rhyme scheme throughout this is spot on and so flowing, this is just one example of the beautiful way you meshed this poem together.
In solitude, the quiet shrieks
in sounds that only she can hear,
pale echoes of a vanquished fear. I really like the repeated refrain. I know it was part of the form, but it really anchored the verses. I love the words, 'the quiet shrieks'.
Summary:
Very creative way to talk about the subject of child abuse. You put into words what I think every victim feels...
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
This is review 1/5. An ode to Autumn.
You used: (Form: Triquain Chain).
Form: The Triquain, created by Shelley A. Cephas (our own ShelleyA)is a poem with several creative variences
and can be a rhyming or non-rhyming verse. The simpliest form is a poem made up of 7 lines with 3, 6, 9, 12, 9, 6, and 3 syllables in this order. Triquain Chain: a string of 2 to 4 Triquains with a space between each triquain. Triquains are always centered.
It is totally cool that a member of WDC created this form. LOL...even the simplest form seems very difficult. I really need to challenge myself with these formal forms. I admire you for writing this poem in a rather difficult form.
Suggestions:
nada...
What I personally liked the Most:
The flow was effortless. A rhyming scheme was not noticeable, I do not think you used one . It did not need one either.
Some of my favorite lines were:
A time of contemplation against a backdrop
of change as nature presses ruby
lips to the leaves in a
fond farewell. The words you use to describe a scene are so appreciated. I love picturing mother nature kissing the leaves and them turning color.
Riotous colors sway and tumble
until it is time to rest and dream
in shades of red and gold
completion. Again, beautiful imagery. I wish the leaves turned color here. Some trees do, but not all. I miss seeing an array of beautiful colors adorning the treetops.
Summary:
Not to be redundant, but I think you writing is excellent and you have such talent. i am sure you get sick of hearing it, but it must be said
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
For an old male warrior, you heart is as soft as putty. I admire a man who can have strong exterior, yet has a soft core and heart
Creativity/Impact:
I have heard about this exercise. I am glad you reminded me of it. Your story was wonderfully written. It was so touching.
What I personally liked the Most:
I liked how you address that everyone needs to be reminded how special they are. I see you as such a wise and gentle man with a heart of gold. I was a teacher of a school-aged group of at risk youth. I did many exercises to try and bring them together, rather then having them hate each other for their gang affiliations or racial differences. I never thought about using this assignment. I wish I had.
I no longer work there, but this post of yours will stick in my mind for the next time I teach. Actually I think we will try this exercise at home. I have done this before with my two young daughters, but think I will have everyone do it again (maybe at Christmas when most of us are together).
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Overall Impression:
I went through your poetry folder and read all your short haiku.
Creativity/Impact:
I noticed you like this form of poetry and enjoyed reading all of them. I am wondering if since you have seemed to master the form, perhaps you would like to expand on them. Perhaps you could lengthen them with more verses? I think it would add to the quality and beauty of your already wonderful work.
What I personally liked the Most:
I think I like 'Discovery" the most, although I enjoyed all of them. 'Discovery' touched my heart.
Suggestions:
I made my suggestions above. I would love to see these expanded. I would love to read them again if you ever do make changes
Summary:
I hope you enjoyed your lil mod blitz visit from me. I enjoyed reading your works.
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
A short story about the 'morning after'.
Suggestions:
In reading this, I noticed you used the word 'hiding' a couple of times or more in the beginning paragraph. I would suggest finding another word in it's place so as not to repeat or become redundant. A thesaurus is my best friend, at times, when trying to write short stories or poems.
I fooled myself thinking that my room could protect me forever, I am not the greatest at punctuation but feel this is either missing a word or needs different punctuation. I would add the word 'in' or a comma after the word thinking. Again, I am not great at this sort of thing and you should use your best judgment or double check. It is something that stuck out to me.
I moaned and shifted my weight to the side of my body searching for a more comfortable position. What side of your body? I do not think you need to put the words 'to the side of my body' in there at all. The feeling I get (and remember from my own hangovers) is that you were tossing and turning, period. If you leave that part, I think you should add that you turned onto you left or right side. Again, just my personal thoughts.
And this time the damage was well done I am not sure about the rule regarding this, but I do not believe it is proper to start a sentence with the word 'and'. I would use a comma to connect the previous sentence or leave the word 'and' out completely. (geeze, I need to go back to eight grade and learn what those words are called...I believe they are called conjunctions?)
3 brainless blonds I would replace the number with the written word
And somehow it seemed that I, a true imposter in their benighted world was the only one that saw through his facade. It appears you are missing a comma in this sentence. Also impostor seems to come up as misspelled but I have seen spelled that way as well. When I looked it up, it showed both examples.
but this time the sound was projected from the deepest end of my indisposed body Forgive me... I do not get the deepest end of you body is. did you fart? i am trying to not laugh at my own sick mind, but seriously... what is the deepest 'end'?
What I personally liked the Most:
Now, with all that said above (you may return the favor by dissecting any of my short stories- as I am sure you will be busy correcting my attempts at writing ) This was a great story. I was entertained and felt you used so many descriptive adjectives throughout the piece. I could feel what you were feeling. I really enjoyed you going step by step, explaining what a hangover feels like. i believe that even if one has not experienced a 'morning after', they could learn why not to overindulge by reading this piece.
I found it quite humorous at times as well. At times, it seemed to warn us of the dangers of alcohol.
Alcohol was a deceiving friend. He was faithful and reliable in the good times, but after the damage was done he would always bail out and leave you to face the brutal consequences all alone. So true! well written!
and while my old buddy “Alcohol” was pushing and persuading me to keep the party alive, I only managed to drink myself to a pitiful and shameful state. You explain this so well. It is really an evil little thing, that alcohol. It really makes us feel invincible, but it is a farce and you always pay a price for that 'friendship'.
Summary:
I really enjoyed this story of a 'hangover'. I thought the story ended well. The story had a definitely feeling of completion. It seemed to tell a complete story. i appreciated it very much.
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
I do not, usually, review folders, but yours is so well put together.
What I personally liked the Most:
From the image, to the easy to follow links, this is a well thought out and put together folder. I really like how each link has a description, making the poetry subject highlighted. This makes it easy to pick a piece, knowing before hand what the poem is about.
I loved the intro poem headlining this folder:
Writing by candlelight,
hidden in shadows,
my inkwell runs dry
as my quill
relents to my muse.
-Stephanie Grace (08/17/09) beautiful! it really makes me want to run crazy through your poems if this is just a taste of your talent
Summary:
This inspires me to make my own folders better. I really think this looks professional. It is easy to navigate and attractive to boot
This poem made me feel very sad. It spoke of such loneliness. I like the use of a repeated 'refrain' throughout the poem.
I would go back and capitalize all your I's. I have a bad habit with this as well, but it almost looks as if you just didn't take the time to do it, rather then accidentally forgetting to push the shift button. It takes away from the poem IMO. Also there are some extra spaces between words and letters.
If you edit this a bit and would like me to read and rate it again, please mail me. I would be more then happy to!
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This is more like it The story is nice. I like reading your own words put into a short story form. I enjoyed your excursion through the park. You were very descriptive with your words.
I am not sure about all your punctuation. I would go over it again if I were you. I am terrible at it myself, so I will not even attempt to correct it for you. ha! I would have liked the story to be a wee bit longer, only because I found the park, and what you described, to be so interesting! Good job, write on!
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Forgive me, but is this a piece of fiction or did you pretty much copy your conversation from an email or messenger program?
It is cute, the conversation, but I am not sure what you are wanting us, as the reader, to get out of it. I am also confused by the present and past tense used in the conversation between the two.
I am going to have to go peek at your other posts. LOL. I hope to find something you wrote all by yourself
Again, cute conversation though....
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Oh! This almost brought tears to my eyes. Such a tribute to the old chair that your dad held dear...actually the real tribute to your father.
The rhyme scheme was perfect. The words you used in describing this worn chair were excellent. I could fill the love pour through each and every word.
All the lines are in caps except for the line that starts with the word 'coffee'. I am not sure that was intentional.
I really was moved by this piece. i am so glad you have that chair. I am sure that it gives you great comfort to sit in it.
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This is a very cute poem. I especially was shocked at the end and had to laugh out loud. Oh my! LOL
I did find that the first line, while I am sure you want to keep the rhyme scheme, does not make sense. It needs the word 'is' at the end or maybe just reword it a little to read clearer.
Other favorite lines I CAN paste are:
If, invited by a girl in bed to frolic
You'd better say that you've got colic. Haha! very cute!
I really enjoyed this poem. I would just go back and tweak some parts and make sure it says what you want it too in a way that everyone can understand Good job!
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Hi! My name is Omniblueeyes and I will be judging "The First People" for ~First Peoples' Represent~ CONTEST
Content
I appreciate that you chose to write this in poetry. I love poems!
Impression/Feeling
Wow! your words touched me and made me feel squishy inside. You can really feel what this groups means and represents to you. I must say my own feelings match your own in many ways.
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
We show respect to human kind and to all who live here in I am not sure why you put the word 'in' there. It is not needed and it is misunderstood, by me at least.
WHAT I LIKED
FAVORITE PART
We seek to share our hopes and dreams and protect our family,
to spread good deeds to all mankind through love and unity. I think that sums it up beautifully.
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
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Overall Impression:
The Villanelle is a great form for those who line to tie repetition in with rhyme. The lower case letters rhyme with ALL instances of that letter (capital or not), and the capital/number lines are refrains and should be repeated exactly as they appear in the first stanza. The stanzas are laid out like this:
A1 b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1 A2
Note that the ending stanza is a quatrain whereas the rest of them are tercets. (Hint: try picking common rhymes that a lot of words will rhyme with so you don't get stuck somewhere in the middle!)
As always, I appreciate you sharing, in detail, the form you used in writing your poem.
The author writes about man's and God's work.
Creativity/Impact:
I enjoyed this. I really liked the repeat refrains (the two alternating ones) at the end of each verse. I loved how you used both of them in the end.
The message was clear when I read the poem, at least the meaning seemed clear. I saw it as being men work and toil all day, everyday, except for Sunday. That is the day they rest and worship, yet easily forget Sunday when Mondays rolls around.
Suggestions:
On a couple of your works, you had an image but it is only showing up as 'not an image' now. I would suggest erasing that.
Summary:
I always learn something when reading your work! Thank you!
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
The author states this is a poem about a boy. I see heartache and heartbreak throughout her words.
Suggestions:
In your description: it abuot a boy bare with me about
In the poem:
I would really first go through and check your spelling. there are too many errors for me to adress them all here. I would also leave out punctuation completely or make sure it is correct.
If this is about a boy, he would be your hero, not heroine.
What I personally liked the Most:
The poem could be quite great if you go back and tweak it a little, making sure all the words make sense and are spelled correctly. The poem is very emotional and tugs at the reader's heart.
Summary:
Please feel free to mail me after you make corrections. I would be more then happy to go back and read and rate it again.
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
A beautiful poem about remembrance.
Suggestions:
You words are in bold and my suggestions are in red. Please get what you can out of my suggestions and no worries if you disagree with them
a cool breeze past me. a cool breeze pass me (no period here)
shedding off a tree. This seems a little awkward to me. I am not sure if adding a word or two will help but perhaps shedding is the word that sticks out the most. Consider revising?
The entire second stanza needs work consider revising... perhaps changing some words around. It does not make much sense as it stands right now. I kind of get what you mean, but I would rather be sure of what you are saying. I think working on it will make it a fantastic verse.
My eyes fleeted around
For you but never came consider: My eyes searched
but you never came or something like that. You need to at least add the word 'you' after but.
I stopped looked down
At autumn’s confetti either put a comma after the word look or put the word and after stopped.
What I personally liked the Most:
I understood what you were writing about and it was touching.
I love the words 'autumn confetti,' very pretty and descriptive.
Summary:
I think this poem has tons of potential if you work on it just a bit. If you revise it, please mail me and I will read it again and would be willing to rate it higher if corrections are made
Hello, my name is omniblueeyes I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
The author writes about a past relationship. I think this piece is more of prose than poetry, but the two are very similar.
Suggestions:
To think that you have a divine right to control me-me I am confused by the added 'me'. I, personally, think the added word is not needed
But I let me say this to you I do not think you meant to put the 'I' in there. It would make more sense without it.
What I personally liked the Most:
This shows your strength in leaving a man who was not good for you or to you. It shows your justified anger. You express yourself well in this piece.
But what you failed to see is that with every tear lost
Strength was gained… Loved this!
Like a weak little girl I allowed you to treat me like your pet
To sit, stay, listen… very descriptive...sad
Summary:
I think this was written in such a way that the reader can feel your pain and ultimate healing. Thank you for sharing.
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Overall Impression:
I am so very happy that you got your upgraded account back!
I choose a poem about falling stars. The title sounded so romantic and sweet.
Creativity/Impact:
This poem was romantic and sweet. You did not disappoint.
What I personally liked the Most:
I loved the dance between two lovers.
The stars twinkle and shine
falling softly and quitely
creating a blanket of white one of my favorite parts.
Suggestions:
You may want to go back and check spelling again. In the above verse, quietly is misspelled.
Summary:
Again, very sweet and romantic. It makes me think of dancing under the snowy sky; where snowflakes are stars and you hold onto another for warmth.
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Overall Impression:
I wonder what group wanted you to answer this question Prompt asks the reader to imagine they could be any animal and tell us why they picked it.
Creativity/Impact:
I love that you used poetry for this prompt. I also loved your description of the wolf and your shared attributes.
What I personally liked the Most:
The first verse definitely sets the tone. I love it. The entire poem is very educational but does not sound 'schoolish'.
Suggestions:
The last verse seems to have changed rhyming scheme. Was that on purpose?
Summary:
I do not know why I did not read this before, but glad I saw it now Very sweet, Mother wolf
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Awkward Secrets (E) Before we evolved into who we are today, we were insecure and uncertain. #1494113 by Kristi
Awkward Secrets
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Overall Impression:
Is this considered a survey or poll? I am guessing they are pretty much the same thing. The author asks us (for good reason) to share our insecurities and fears.
Creativity/Impact:
I think I know what group you are using this for and love the questions. I think the fact that you left it up to the responder to tell their secrets in anonymity or not was a great move. It gives everyone the freedom to speak from their heart.
What I personally liked the Most:
Again, I am assuming this is for your group, 'Scribbling for Self-discovery.' This group and your efforts to help our youth is so commendable. I admire you so much!
Suggestions:
I think you should let people know (on this page) how their answers will be used. I did not see any links back to the group or mention of where these answers would be used. I know it is probably in your folder for this group, but what about those that stumble upon this. i think many would be willing to answer (at least it would be easier to do so) if they knew why they were doing it; to help others.
Summary:
You know I think you are awesome I am glad you know you are too Seriously...you should feel great about who your are NOW
Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Overall Impression:
If this was not already awarded, I would have put a ribbon on it myself. Sometimes we must look back to realize how far we have come and Baby! you have came a long way
Creativity/Impact:
Beautifully express poem using a definite rhyming scheme. The rhymes do not seem forced but effortless.
What I personally liked the Most:
I loved see the joy at your rediscovering life's joys while you still acknowledged past hurts. It was like yin/yang.
Releasing
fears to which I succumbed;
Regaining
feeling in places numbed *smiles like a cheesy dork*
Suggestions:
none, except thinking this way!
Summary:
I know you think I have lots to still read in your port but I still see more I have reviewed (probably just read and told you I did so..but it is rated). I am happy when I find something and happy when I find gems. this was a gem, kristi
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Beneficence (13+) "Bertie" McAllister had lost her son ... could she get him back? ... and at what price? #1599529 by 🌖 HuntersMoon
Beneficence
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Okay Ken, I just erased my template. This has been read by some of the best reviewers (editors) and I know I will not have anything to add as far as punctuation, grammar, ect.
Thank Goodness, I am taking my daughter to the doctor after this review. I need some time to digest what I just read.
NOTE! This is a must read for all those that watch the public reviews page!
You took me through one heck of a ride with this story. My emotions changed from pitying your main character and her loss to sitting here, literally, with my mouth agape in horror and shock.
This seemed like such a sad little, innocent story. ha! This reeks of the like of Stephen King or some other great horror writer. I am still sitting here shaking my head, at a loss of words to describe what this story did to me. It was pity, horror, heartache, all rolled into one wonderful-yet disturbing-read.
I am going to cut this review short, as I am too dumbfounded to even say how affected I am by this piece of (thank God) fiction.
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) This was a great story. I was entertained and felt you used so many descriptive adjectives throughout the piece. I could feel what you were feeling. I really enjoyed you going step by step, explaining what a hangover feels like. i believe that even if one has not experienced a 'morning after', they could learn why not to overindulge by reading this piece. 
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