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Review of Coronavirus  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sumojo,

Thanks for your cute little limerick. Nicely written and obviously very timely. I am glad you explained the word 'gyrus', as it was one I didn't know. I love learning new words.

Hope you are staying safe and well. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review of The Wall  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Jillian,

Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your journey here. I really like your little poem. It is well-written, and has a nice rhythm and flow. I found no grammatical or typographical errors. There are some place where I might chance the punctuation, but they are not critical.

For example:

break my bones - (I wouldn't put a hyphen at the end of this line)

Punctuation is something we as writers always have to deal with. Like I said though, not critical.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of new love.  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Nik

Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your journey here. This is an interesting little poem. I think you are trying too hard to be 'poetic', and you have left the reader feeling confused.

that is easy, simple, effortless. - I think it should be 'that IT is easy...'

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of I always cared  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Alayah,

Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your journey here at writing.com.

This is an interesting little free-form poem. It does have a good rhythm and flow. There are a number of grammatical errors that should be cleaned up.

For example:

She never cared of me.
I cared of you.
I cared of her. - should be FOR me, FOR you, FOR her

Good luck with all or your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of Story of Alistair  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi, Krieg,

Welcome to writing.com. This is the beginning of a good little story. There are many grammatical errors which need to be cleaned up.

Some examples:


his eyes met the bar area - his eyes SAW the bar area

so only him and the bartender could hear - so only HE and the bartender

Alistair looked slightly - should read 'Alistair turned slightly and looked'

Also I would quibble with you on the contents of the man's belt. Crossbows are too big to be carried on a belt.

Good luck with all of your writing.
Cynaemon
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Review of Unknown  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Tenesa,

Welcome to writing.com. I like your name. It is different.

I am not sure if this is meant to be a very short story, or just the beginning of one. At least you have done a good job with what you have written. I hope you will add to this as time goes on. It is a good start.

Good luck with all of your writing.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi, hghosingh,

I enjoyed reading your little poem. Okay, I can see how you are calling it 10 lines, but that is kind of stretching it. That is cool though. It has an interesting sentiment. I am glad it ended so positively.

Good luck with all your writing.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review of Doing homework  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi, Being,

I really enjoyed your little piece. It has a positive and interesting sentiment. And that is a good thing. Sadly, there are so many grammatical errors, it makes it very hard to read, or to even concentrate on the actual message of the piece. I think you can do a better job than this. Good luck with all of your writing.

Cynaemon

PS - If you clean this up, I will be happy to come back and re-rate it. It does have possibilities.
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Tennessee Man,

I enjoyed reading your thoughts on writing. I especially agree that writing comes from the heart. There are a number of grammatical errors in this short piece. I think it could use a little work.

For example:
One of the unknowns that those of who love to write quickly understand that what we write may be meaningful today to someone or years down the road.

This sentence is long and unwieldy. It should read 'quickly understand IS that what we write' I would put a period after 'someone' then begin a new sentence.

'touch anymore' - did you man 'touch anyone?'

Best Wishes in your writing journey.

Cynaemon
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Review of Vocabulary  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Elisa,

Congratulations on being featured in the Feb 2019 Poetry Newsletter.

I loved your little poem about words. I so agree with you. I love learning new words. Honestly, I READ the dictionary. I have always been fascinated by words, and have never met a blank piece of paper. For the last few years I have had a 'word of the year.' Such fun. This year I have two: seraphine and impavid.

I guess this is one reason we still write - because there are so many cool words out there, and so little time. Keep up the good work.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Brillo,

I liked reading your little poem about the Knight. I felt it was a big of a rant, but that is a good thing. Often writing about our feelings is a good way to explore them.

Your poem feels negative to me, but it is well-written, and has a nice rhythm and flow. I found not errors of any kind. I hope you are still writing. Keep up the good work.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review of On the couch  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Pita,


I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. You have conveyed the sad feeling of breaking up very well. Your poem has a nice rhythm and flow. I found no errors of any kind. Keep up the good work. I especially liked the short middle verse, and the way you have written it with no punctuation. This is very effective, and shows the reader the flow of the writer's thoughts.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, countrymom,

Thanks for being here, and thanks for giving us all of these fun contests. That is a lot of years of contests, and some great ideas. I am going to use the ideas as prompts for drabbles this year. I love all the inspiration one can find here at writing.com.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Ben L,

I couldn't resist reading your cute clerihew about @realDonaldTrump. It definitely made me laugh. And great job with the clerihew form. I am glad that you gave the excellent explanation of the form. I am going to try my hand at writing a few of these.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, SapphireDragonScales,

I enjoyed reading your poems. The first one took a little bit of thought. I had to read it through a couple of times. The second one is very nice. I liked the sentiment in it a lot. Sometimes the only love we can find is in our writing. The third poem has an interesting thought.

I too go through phases of writing nothing but poetry. It is an enjoyable occupation. Keep up the good work.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, Cheri Annemos,

Interesting list of verbs. I enjoyed this little piece of your story. I hope your NaNo year went well.
Just a couple of minor errors, which I am sure you have corrected in your final piece.


with the long blonde curls. - don't need THE

ice-encrusted landscaped - LANDSCAPE

Kristin slamming - SLAMMED

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Him Jaiam,

This came up in the Read and Review section. I enjoyed reading your poem, and liked the sentiment behind it. Your poem is well-written and has a good rhythm and flow.


What loves is - I think this should be LOVE is - just a little typo.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Cheri Annemos,

I really enjoyed reading your brainstorming session for NaNo. I hope you had a successful NaNo the year you wrote this.

I have done NaNo six years in a row, and I don't necessarily focus only on my main character. In fact, I have re-written the story numerous times from the point of view of the different characters. I also went to spend some time just writing a short synopsis of all of my 'other' characters. Anyway, good luck with all of your writing, especially NaNo.

Cynaemon
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Review of Lust's Pain  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, BMarcelle,

Congratulations on being featured in the Romance Newsletter.

This is an interesting little 'haiku.' I guess you could say it is about nature, well, human nature. It does follow the traditional 5-7-5 format of a haiku. I think one does not usually capitalize words in a haiku. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Loonuh,

Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your stay here.

I liked your little poem. It has a really nice sentiment. It is a good free-form poem and flows along nicely. I found no obvious grammatical or spelling errors.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of Leaves  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Kerri,

Congratulations on being featured in this month's Spiritual Newsletter.

I enjoyed reading your poem about leaves. It has a nice rhythm and flow, and I found no obvious grammatical or spelling errors.

Did you do NaNo in 2016? I hope you enjoyed it. I have done it for six years now.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of Breath Away  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Candy,

Congratulations on being featured in the Spiritual Newsletter this month.

This is a nice little poem about breathing and God. It has a really nice sentiment. It is a good free-form poem with a nice rhythm.

I found no obvious grammatical or spelling errors.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of "HEART"  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Netty,

Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your stay here.

I enjoyed reading your poem. It has a lovely sentiment, but some of the lines are kind of confusing.

appear a tender kiss, hug it is healed - a tender kiss and a hug and it is healed - makes more sense

What comes out the heart it reveal that ones contain - what comes out of the heart reveals what it contains

The last verse really needs some work too. After reading your poem, I surmise that English is not your first language. You have done a good job here.

Good luck with all of your writing. Cynaemon
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Review of Earth Day  Open in new Window.
Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jaya,

I really enjoyed your poem about Earth Day. It has a lovely sentiment, and I agree that every day is truly earth day. You have done a wonderful job of describing the beauties of this earth. Your poem has a good rhythm and flow, and I found no grammatical or spelling errors.

Good luck with all your writing. Cynaemon
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Review by Cynaemon Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Prosperous Snow,

I really enjoyed reading your poem about your grandfather and his 'cowboy coffee.' It reminded me of my own grandfather and the things which remind me of him. Your poem has wonderful visuals, and I can just see the old steel percolator on the stove. Thanks so much for sharing your memory.

Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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