It's been a pleasure to review your story "Decaying Beauty" from read and review page.
This is beautiful poem about decaying beauty. It's beautifully started with the line "Creation dawns from Death’s designing reign". It's full of wonderful thoughts. I liked the way you write this poem. I like the images you have painted here. It's so enchanted. I could feel the sounds, smells, touch, and feelings of this poem. The last stanza is my absolutely favorite
"Creation dawns from Death’s designing reign.
Grieve not the changing of the ebbing day,
for in decay is born a new domain."
I appreciate the way you wrote this poem using 15 lines Villonnet Form.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a beautiful lyrics. I especially like the words.
THE POEM: This lyrics has wonderful thoughts inside every line. It crafted with lovely romantic thought. I find this poem is simple, positive. The tone of this poem is filled with hope.
FAVORITE LINES: I’m not fool to trust but I forgive you
Our memories now just residue
Ignore me when we meet
Though it’s hard but I pretend
SUGGESTION: I didn't any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: I appreciate the way you write it. I enjoyed.
Irish stars in the moonlight. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. This is beautiful poem. I like the repeated verse "Irish stars in the moonlight
Guinness from the pub
A kiss for your sweet one
Your darling, your love" you used. It's full of wonderful thoughts.
This poem is unique and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem more interesting.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. Thank you for sharing!!
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This is a good piece of write. The title caught my eyes.
Yes, love should be like that! Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. It reminds me one of friend. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
Favorite lines: “What's happened to me?
I haven't got a clue
It makes me all excited,
Just hearing your name”
I enjoyed it reading. Thank you for sharing! Keep Writing!
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I like this poem because of the words. I feel this poem is simple and positive. Your words are very true that Trust before Lust,Consistency before Efficiency, Dignity before Negativity. I love that combination. This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like this thoughtful poem. The voice of the poem is the strength for me. It is so pure.
I like the thought woven in this piece. Keep writing.
This is beautiful poem about accepting the things in life. When someone breaks our heart and we have to accept and move on. It is hard but possible. But we try to accept. I like the way you put your feelings into words.
The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The last stanza is my favorite
"You who have put me in this pit of misery
Should be punished for all of eternity."
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Hi, I enjoyed reading your poem very much. I appreciate the simplicity, and the meaning it has. Yes, Darkness is not the absence of light,but the cover for it. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. You have used punctuation and grammar where they are needed. My favorite lines
"Because of you
I am a broken
And empty shell
Of a person."
First I want to welcome you in WDC. I found this poem and thought to give you a review.
I love this poem because of the main thought of the poem is about travel. It’s written so beautifully that makes me read your poem to the end. It describes the beautiful places in the world. You painted them so beautifully.
I like the words and the little rhyming of this poem. My absolute favorite lines are
"They're all gone now, but in our dreams and memories,
we can stop and reminisce while filling up at the Speedway pump."
Keep writing!
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This is good piece of work about positive and negative side of video game. I liked the concept. I like the descriptions and presentations. The way you wrote this piece keeps me reading it to the end. Your points are very true and to the point. Yes, video games is an addiction. It causes health problem.
I remember when I was high school I spent all of my free time playing video games. It was really fun. But too much of anything is bad.
I learned that some video game like Blue Whale can kill people. Your article helps the reader’s.
In conclusion, I think you wrote a good article with a good message. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story I like the concept. You wrote it from the view of our mother nature. I like this thoughtful piece.
THE STORY: Your visuals gave life to our mother nature.
Earth is a place to live. There is no other planet like our mother earth. The earth gives us food, shelter, everything we need to survive. She provides us everything need for free, like mothers do for children. Earth is indeed a mother to all but we don't pay the respect that she deserves.
You described beautifully what problems our mother earth faces today.
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Initial Impression: I like this thoughtful poem about the principal of life. The concept is unique.
The poem:I like the narrators thought process. You painted beautifully about life. I like the way you painted it. Your words are very pure, honest but very true. I especially like the lines
as i got older i got better.
trimming was easy.
just don't dig too deep.
Yes, with age comes experience and skills. We become more empathetic and we can carving our own path easily.
Suggestions: Capitalize the first letters at the beginning of each line and all the i. For example when i was young i wanted to carve you. I found some spelling mistake “triiming” “instict.” “acedemic.” otherwise it is wonderful poem.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
It is a beautiful poem shows the confusion fear with love.
Your poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. Yes, Love is confusing. I like the way you put your feelings into words. Our mind is a wondrous place , so many things happening here. I like and appreciate this poem because it shows how we feel when we in love.
Suggestion:I found that that some of your lines are too long for example “Though you do not know the depth of how I truly feel, it still warms my heart & soul to know you’re there.”
It would be an wonderful poem if you make some lines shorter.
I like the words of your poem.
My favorite lines are “I look at you & see an amazing glow,
but then I realize who you are.
Constantly clouding & sojourning in my mindless dreams.”
I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION:This is interesting story about animal, beautifully written with the prompt. I especially like the ending. You wrote it from personal experience and its look great.
THE STORY: This is a story of a kid and his Stage show in Shakespearean Play. Your story tells that how difficult it was for you to make your dog an actor.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. You crafted them so beautifully.
SUGGESTION:Though I am not expert in grammar but I found some mistakes
-“I went on for awhile,” you need a space between “a” and “while”
- both well known and obscure you need a hyphen between word “well” and “known”
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
This is beautiful poem. The poem Long-Traveled Rain tells the story of rain who traveled the world and share its experience with the poet. I like the enchanting picture the poet have painted here. It reminds me the monsoon rain in my country. Today it is raining here, I could hear the booming sound of clouds from my home. And this is perfect poem for this day. I like the rainy day because rainy day images gives me inspiration, it renewed our hopes.
I found this poem is condensed structure. “velvet ground “worms “frogs” “logs” “bugs” all the natural things blended together creates a beautiful rainy day picture. The tone of the poem is filled with hope, I especially like the last stanza
“Breathing in I now smell the coming rain,
and inhale earth's life into my core,
the weary rain that rests upon my face,
long-traveled, now visits me once more.”
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM: I saw your name on the list. And I thought I would give your story a read.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Kevin, you wrote a good story. It reminds me college days, my teachers and friends. I have so many memories with them.
The way you told this story keeps me reading. Your story made me laugh. The tones I find in this story is cheerful, and humorous. I like the descriptions and presentation of your story and the ending.
SETTING:In modern time.
CHARACTERS:Well developed. I like the character Vaughn
STORY: Vaughn tried hard not to not to fall asleep in his language class, but he did fall asleep during lectures .
When asked to comment , he didn’t afraid but answered confidently which makes his teacher amazed. I really like the fact.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: Clever story . You told beautifully how you found your way into English Literature 101 studying A Clockwork Orange. I enjoyed it reading.
It's been a pleasure to review your story "Education." on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" April review challenge.
I like this piece and the concept as well. You wrote differently what education truly mean. I like your point of views and opinions about education. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
We need education to gain our knowledge no matter we take it from life or from schools. Education helps us build opinions about the things in life. To build a society. To build a nation.
Education helps us to move forward. You truly said that our wholes lives we are educated to work and work to educate. We did mistakes every day, we learn how to deal with it. We help others to learn what we have learned.
I like how you ended this piece with a question What is education to you?
I think it helps the readers to think what education really means to them.
Beautifully told and written. I enjoyed it reading. I can’t wait to read another piece from you.
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I read your poem when I came across read and review page.
It is a clever poem beautifully written with the Prompt where it starts every line with the letters of the alphabet backwards from letter P to letter A (P,O,N,M,L,K,J,I,H,G,F,E,D,C,B,A)
I appreciate your every words choice. It flowed well with your crafted words. I like the images you have painted here.
My favorite is the last stanza
"Lightning flashes, thunder rolls
Keeping time at specific intervals
Just as Mother Nature's roar of anger
Intensifies with fat drops of her tears."
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A very good message with an unique concept. You have written a very good piece of poem. I liked the way you compared snowflakes and angels. The descriptions and presentation are clear. In first stanza, you used the word "heaven’s angels" to convey the feeling. I like the tone of this poem. I like the phrases play "moonlight’s platinum glow," "so pristine and white,"cacophonic melody enchants".
I like the lines
"Face uplifted
to snowflakes descent,
souls uplifted
when angels are present."
I like how each line breaks. Rhyming makes this poem more interesting.
Wonderful poem. It packed with messages. Thank for sharing!
So enchanted poem! I like the beauty of autumn you have painted here. I could feel the sound and color of this poem.
A poem is soul breathing. Its flows beautifully with your crafted words. I like the phrases play “a sprinkle of deciduous hardwoods” “pencil-like sentries of evergreen” “radiate their sun-lit majesty.” All the natural things blended together create a vibrant nature scene.
I like how each line breaks. Rhyming makes this poem more interesting and makes the rhythm faster, happier. I like the images.
It seems you felt as you are a part of nature when you wrote this. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
First Impression: This is a sweet tribute for a heartfelt friendship. I like how you penned it down.
The poem: You wrote beautifully what friendship truly mean.
Friends makes us laugh, and we can share our thoughts with them. Life becomes dusty bleak desert without friends. I found those words reflected in your poem. The way you wrote can easily read. I like the images you have painted here.
Favorite parts :
“All the days I spent with you,
these things I can't explain,
the only thing I want:
For us to stay the same."
Ovarall: Friendship is a good subject for poetry. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Initial Impression:Beautiful poem. Cleverly done each line with a long "A" sound
Theme and Creativity: This poem is beautiful and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme a,a,a,a makes this poem more interesting.
Favorite lines:
"And I walk not in the light of day
But in the shadows of death and decay
While you sit on high to say
My sentence has lead you astray"
Suggestions:I didn’t find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: I appreciate the way you wrote this.
First Impression: A very good thoughtful piece . I especially like the rhyming scheme of this poem. It felt so melodious and rhythmic in my head.
The poem: I like the images you have painted here. I like how each line breaks. It flowed beautifully flowed with your crafted words.
I really liked some of the phrases play, discontent and scratches, " earthly goal " greedy gain of goodies " the fork in the road ".
Favorite lines:
“for I had pondered the narrow
but chose to carry my own load
and left behind, forever
the fork in the road”
Final thought: In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message Thanks for sharing.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Good start. A very good thoughtful piece and so true. I like the fonts color.
THE STORY: Every person born with unique personality into this world. We born to represent something new.
And if we do or follow another person, dressed like another we never know who we really are. So, we should destroy our false world and accept our true selves.
Favorite lines:You truly said “once you decide to dress yourself as another person who isn't you, you just killed yourself, not literally but emotionally. “
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT:In conclusion, I think you wrote a good article with a good message Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for sharing it with us. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: Good start. I like this gratitude poem and the concept as well. You draw a picture of someone who play a significant role in our life. I am now reviewing it and I do hope you find something that is interesting and helpful to you.
THE POEM: A mother's love for her child is like nothing else in the world . She loves us unconditionally and never expect anything in return. You start beautifully “I was planted in you like a seed “ yes it is very true. Our tiny life grew in her umbilical cord. Her love is incomparable. You truly said in your line “You bought all the finest cloth, accessories” I Like the images you have painted.
SUGGESTIONS: I saw a few mistakes however. In the third stanza you used the line " You bought all the finest cloth,accessories " I think you need a space after comma. I think you need to capitalize "I" because it is a pronoun.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Ryan”. You crafted him so beautifully.
FINAL THOUGHT: Nicely put your feelings into words.
Mina
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