Oh my giddy aunt!! That was hilarious! I completely didn't expect the ending. Thank you for welcoming me to WDC! This truly is funny - I needed the laugh after a long day at the office. Cheers! :)
That's some inspired love right there! That poem tickled me. I loved the laconic laid-back ending. The image of the leopard spots being so stretched that they were almost stripes...the leopard becomes a tiger! Great fun. really enjoyed this very much.
That was powerful. Each time I read it through, I read something new in it. The first time, I thought it was about domestic abuse; the second time I changed my mind, and the third, again my mind changed. The last four lines are beautiful and so descriptive of being changed after going through something so profound.
I think almost everyone can relate to those "butterflies" you describe so well. You do it well with your words. However, the flow of piece was a little jarring; not because of the words, but because of the spelling and punctuation. I feel that it would flow so much better, and you would be a lot happier with this piece if you ran it through a spell check or grammar program. You have a space before AND after commas, when you don't need to have a space before them. You have missed some capitalization, some apostrophes and have spelled some words incorrectly. If you can get that cleaned up, it would read a lot more smoothly without the jarring interruptions from noticing the grammatical and punctuation errors. Other than that, I loved the words you used. I hope this doesn't discourage you at all. (I edit my husband's work and he calls me the "Grammar Nazi"!) I truly don't want to discourage, but to show you that it would be even more beautiful once you corrected the technical errors. I really enjoyed your description of what "butterflies" mean to you! Best wishes - I look forward to reading more.
Gosh, this made me smile. I lived for a while in Australia and read stories of the Dream Time. I loved your imagery in this, an Adam and Eve kind of story. The "placenta of weeds" was a beautiful depiction. I had ancient aboriginal images in my mind as I read this. Great read.
A simple poem, but one that will bring much comfort to those who have lost a loved one. The thought that your loved one is still watching over you and with you is one that carries you through the bad days.
I wasn't sure if you meant the line "My spirit was set free" to NOT have a capital letter like the beginning of all the others, but it seemed to flow from the line before.
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