You really do write like Stephanie Meyer, but I have to agree that you write better - a feat that shouldn't go unnoticed. Definitely keep writing! I want to read more.
I have a few questions regarding the protagonist and antagonist(s). First, is Dred a vampire, or something altogether different? It sounds from the way you write that he was a government experiment. Gone wrong, or just the way it was meant to be? The others, these Puppets, seem almost surreal because they sound so omnipotent. How does he survive when that have the advantages in numbers, skill, and power? There must be some sort of loophole, either supernatural or otherwise, that he uses to escape from seemingly certain death. But then again, can he die?
I like the way you make the "Puppets" sound as if they were once people, but now are not. It makes the whole thing feel more hopeless, though in a way that is desirable in novels.
Some things are still very unclear, though I'm sure that is just because you haven't explained them YET, so again, I look forward to reading more.
On a critical note, I did notice a few small spelling errors, and the way you phrased on or two sentences made it seem as though it was from another character, though it's not really anything huge.They, all three of them, seemed to occur within the first half, so read it over. Not a big deal.
Overall, again, the best start to a novel I've ever read, though not many novel-fractions get published. Now somebody else needs to tell me that...
Yes, that means you can find starts to mine on my profile.
I feel like I'm selling an advertisement off of somebody elses. Sorry if I sound that way...
I like the format of the poetry, and while not exactly as short as mine would've been, they were unique, and for that I commend you. Your rhymes are very eloquent, and you have very nice vocabulary.
The way you intertwined everyday things and Greek mythology intrigues me. I've never seen anything like this before, and I actually had to Wikipedia-search some things on here, but once I understood it all, I thought it was a very unique and exciting way to format a random encounter with someone who intrigued you. All in all, a wonderful poem. I look forward to reading more by writers (namely poets!) like you.
-N. C. Franz
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