What made me drawn to review this piece: Always want to know what others think about life. You did a great job. I loved the fact it was spaced apart. It made it easy to comprehend.
How it made me feel: Very good because it was too very true to life. Good job.
Did it connect to the human experience? I'm sure it connects to everyone's life. Keep writing.
What made me drawn to review this piece: The word Prompt because sometimes they are very hard. Making up something in the spare of the moment takes guts and you did better than I do most of the time and I've been here a long time. Some of the grammar needs correcting like the capitals.
How it made me feel: Kind of sad. I wanted to know more even if you had to put it in a short length. I wanted to know why she had left the paperclip. What really did she think and why did she just leave? There's more that we need in the story: who, what, where, why.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, high school wise we've all experienced that wish of love from the most popular people.
What made me drawn to review this piece: I submitted a letter to a solider and decided I would see who thought of such a wonderful contest. So I opened your port and when I saw this letter I had to read it because I lost my Mom in 2010 and it doesn't seem to get easier with time. She was my everything because I guess being an only child I always thought she was so strong but once Ovarian cancer comes you don't last long. I wish I would have had a wonderful Dad as you did, you are blessed.
How it made me feel: Sad but happy your Dad is not in pain and there is hope in knowing we will see our loved ones one day.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, very much so--Great letter.
What made me drawn to review this piece: To see what others are writing for the soldiers. I really liked that you did this for the ones who give their life for us.
How it made me feel: Wonderful that someone on writing.com stepped up to the plate to do a great and wonderful thing.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes because some of us think of what we should do but you have took it a step ahead and started a wonderful contest to help our soldiers. The cute poem was a great touch.
What made me drawn to review this piece: This is a wonder thing to do this time of year when everyone is so busy with spending money and forgetting what the season is all about. I think it was a wonderful idea and I was drawn to it because I think letters are important in this time of texting, Facebook, and twitter!
How it made me feel: Wonderful to know my letter would go to the White House and maybe to a soldier.
Did it connect to the human experience? Of course it does.
What made me drawn to review this piece: Who could not want to read a seed of thanks. It brings so much to mind. The bold THANKS, ALL, UNSELFISHLY, FAMILY, ME...is so relative to the piece and I give thanks that you did that because it drew me in.
How it made me feel: So happy because I've been on both ends during these times. I'm grateful to those who've helped me and I am greatful that I've been able to give to others. You can feel that need.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, it was wonderful.
What made me drawn to review this piece: As someone who has been married 33 years and wonder what keeps me here I see something like this and it gets my heart pumping fast just like the horse on the race course.
How it made me feel: For some reason it makes me feel like there is no rhythm or rhyme to what goes on between two hearts which should be beating as one.
Did it connect to the human experience? As in love, so is divorced. My first time nearly 4 years my second 33. I think you have to keep love alive or it dies.
A great contest for all to do with different muses everyday! To me even if you don't win you are getting something off of your chest making you feel better about your life situation. Also, the most important part is you get experience in writing something you may never have thought about writing before. Keep on going with these. I do miss the quote contests so bad.
What made me drawn to review this piece: I wondered what someone would think of their Mother's house. Sometimes I wonder what my family thinks of me because I am so sick I can't take care of myself; therefore wondering about my own life. This really drew me in such vivid pictures of her Mother's house, a creative place but like one that couldn't possibly create anything. Scary because it did make me think of myself in some way.
How it made me feel: I feel like I heard your voice in this poem. That is something writer's strive for all their life and you seem to have captured it in this piece of writing.
Did it connect to the human experience?
Yes, no matter what keep on writing.
What made me drawn to review this piece: The caption after the title. I couldn't imagine a little girl's life being so much happier in a life. It made me feel so bad for the little girl. Such a cold, cold poem but it lacked the reasons why this little girl's whole family was gone or going. It didn't make me understand why this girl's life is gone nor why it had to happen. It does have potential though.
How it made me feel: Very sad. So depressed for the little girl.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, it could happen but I wonder why it would.
Why did you choose this piece to review? The title brought me into the need to read the piece. It was hard to follow and left me feeling unfinished at the idea; that's what was good about it the idea of the story but nothing fell into place. If this one was rewritten I would be glad to take a second look at it but it just left me wondering what was going on.
On a scale of 1-10 how did this touch your heart? I felt sorry for the sister but I just couldn't put everything together. It left too much out.
Why did you choose this piece to review? The word Redux called my attention to this poem. It was a bit confusing I would like to see a little more so I could make a better judgement. Makes me wonder where her body is, is she dead, stuff like that...
On a scale of 1-10 how did this touch your heart?
8
Content: Needs a little more development but a good start. Write on!
What made me drawn to review this piece: Whenever someone reviews something of mine I usually repay the favor. I am really glad I did because this was quite enjoyable and I usually don't like fantasy. This was really well written. All the sentences were correct and I could see this as a book. Have you considered doing the nanano writing thing for the month of November. I'm doing it but of course I am behind as usual. I always go back to writing something else or reading. There's only so many hours in a day. The description of the tree was so perfect. I'm ready to read the rest of the story. You wrote very smoothly and the transition of going to the other character was very good. Sometimes that becomes awkward in a story for me but you eased though it.
What made me drawn to review this piece: I couldn't imagine what this was going to be about when I read the title "Just for Men." The vision in my head was completely different from what I read. I'm telling you I was glad someone besides a woman fell for that crap. You can't imagine how much money we spend on that "stuff" to make us pretty for y'all! My daughter didn't ask when she went in the last beauty shop the last time what the price would be!!! $275! Yours was so good I nearly peed in my pants. I could picture you buck naked trying to get stuff to work!
How it made me feel: Wonderful!!! I haven't laughed at a story in a long time.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, of course. We've all been there and done that only you wrote it better.
What made me drawn to review this piece: Love draws me in because it is something we all know, or most of us, universally. I remember writing about an ex-lover and a poor man responded that I was lucky to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. Very true words but my first love consumed me much like this writing. You did a wonderful job.
How it made me feel:It made me feel like I did with my 1st love it was so strong if we would have stayed together it would have burnt everything in its' sight.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes, especially the fact that I think you were describing a first love. They are so hard to get over.
What made me drawn to review this piece: Because I have an elderly dog, Jewell. I would give anything to give her some of my years just to keep her a little longer. Your poem showed me the love we have for each other because we talk eye to eye everyday. You have brought this out in such a good piece, short but so very sweet.
How it made me feel: Sad with lots of tears.
Did it connect to the human experience? Yes! I don't go on and on about if there are mistakes especially with such wonderful words of pets which we hold so dear. Thanks to you and your dog who inspired you.
What made me drawn to review this piece: Leaving yourself exposed to someone else in this day and time leaves you feeling exactly the way you are feeling and it came through perfectly in your poem. I find that in my day during the sixties and seventies people were more open to people and how they felt. The email, texts, and stuff have just made an a void of people's feelings. Although it feel rejection comes through just the same.
How it made me feel: It made me so sad to know someone gave to someone so much and they don't care enough to even answer why?
Did it connect to the human experience? Very much so because this is why I read. I want to connect no matter what the age.
Why did I pick this piece to review? Because my belief is as yours please don't what a reminder.. I worked at a summer camp. A gun was out running the law as they say ina small town. Of course the small minded person I worked with couldn''t wait until he told everyone how they were scopping this guys brains out. What did I see when I saw that cross: you tell me...small towns can be the worst.
Did the title fit-yes.
Content-Just like life in a small town. There's even a cross by our Ruby Tuesday to commenrate the day an idiot was driving his motercycle so fast that he ran it up the pole. Hey, just ut on the pole--this is where the young idiot ran his motor cycle up the pole.
Why did I pick this piece to review? I wondered what it was about because me being a beauty of the past only haunted me all my life. I picked the wrong men and stayed in relationships for God knows what reason. The problem was I should have went with the men who had some heart instead of the good-looking ones who were always looking in the mirror or at some other woman.. I know wished I would've have kept the man who I broke their heart. One who stands in the graveyard wondering what went wrong.
Did the title fit-yes because we let it just drift away from us. Why, we don't ask ourselves when we were young only when we are older and live has escaped us.
Content-wonderful. I've been married 33 years of wasted time.. Even the diease, fibromyagia is because of him. I wish he would go live with my outlaws and I'd be forever happy. You did a great job. I'd like to converse with you online and you read the last poem I wrote..
I would love to join this group. I enjoy reading as much as I do writing because I think when you read and review you learn from your own writing. This looks like somethig I would really be interested in and I also want to know how to donate points in order for the writing support group to match the GP's I donate.
Thanks,
Diane
Why did I pick this piece to review? I thought about joining this contest and wanted to know if it was regular blogging. One time I joined and it wasn't exactly what you are doing it was one that had some kind of subject each time. I was really wacked out and it wasn't something I needed to be
Did the title fit-yes, it was a BLOG which I've had before, treating my M other with respect but yet while being acaregiver sometimes you just need some sort of peace in your life.
Content-Wonderful-you did a great job and I am like you always trying to do like you and earn GP'sin order to keep an even better upgrade. It's a hard life.... My review has beenn GPs submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
Why did I pick this piece to review? Because it was in Charles poetry contest and I was wondering what people would write with the words given.
Did the title fit: I would include the extra part under detective in order not to confused the reader.
Content: The content is good in the words that are yours really touch the heart but stil I feel a little confused on what has happen and really wonder what the last two sentences mean.....keept writing and rewriting....it goes with the trade.
Why did I pick this piece to review? I saw it in the contest using the promts and wanted to see what the three words bought out in writing.
Did the title fit? Very well because it lead to the way the poem was leaning..good job!
Content: Wonderful because you brought the pain of love into a very unique view. I think sometimes, especially the male species, don't understand how a woman feels about love. You brought it forward because we love so deep we can't just move on right away--I had to go through several emotions before I got to the one where my heart wouldn't skip a beat when I saw him. BEWARE THE MALE SPECIES MAY DISAGREE!
Why did I pick this piece to review?
Of course, because I have a little girl.
Did the title fit? Yes of course.
Content:
Oh, my, I cried. Why did I cry because I would give anything if the asshole I looked up when I was 15 ( my ex-husband found him) would have loved me like you did in your poem. How can you not love someone who looks like you, walks like you, and talks like you? He didn't, left Mother for having a child and married a woman who already had one whose dad got killed in the coalmines, and she took my Daddy's name and everything that went with it).
I am so glad this poem relects your dear lasting love for her. Like my husband you are there right away! Do you know what this means to a Mother? It means all to me. I remember my daughter brought home a guy my hubby didn't care for and took him outside to show him his gun he shoots squirels with (although believe it or not I've never seen him kill a squirel). Good job.
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