Lesson four static

Elusive Imaginings
...like feathers on the wind...

A fragile figment flutters softly down,
landing with grace but not a single sound.
Feather soft, it sits on the barren page,
awaiting my pen which will craft its stage.

Pen, hand as one begin to form and shape,
fashioning the scene, designing the drape.
Fair figment hovers on the gentle breeze
created by pen strokes flowing with ease.

Then a darkened cloud suddenly takes form,
strong blowing wind, it's threatening to storm.
I grasp at the figment, but it takes flight.,
Before I can grasp, it is gone from sight.

I wait in the darkness holding my pen,
hoping the notion will arrive again:
but it is gone – this I must consent,
my figment has flown, folded up its tent.

Elusive imaginings float on the wind,
when one flutters by, I’ll begin again.

A Quatrain- unedidted
After the echoes of music whispered,
The newlyweds leaned in, shared a caress.
New bands of union on fingers shimmered,
Each other’s hands linked in sweet tenderness.

Their lives before them a silken ribbon.
No care for the roadblocks that might arise,
Rose scented petals pave the path driven
O’er their carriage ride, aloft to the skies.

Sadly, this is a far as this little poem is willing to go….

Edited Quatrain

After the echoes of music whispered,
The newlyweds leaned in, shared a caress.
New bands of union on fingers shimmered,
Each other’s hands linked in sweet tenderness.

Their lives before them: a silken ribbon.
No care for the roadblocks that might arise,
Rose scented petals paved the path driven,
o’er their carriage ride, aloft to the skies.

1. Is the poem interesting? Mildly, as I approach the wedding of my eldest son, however, it is quite mushy.
2. Does the poem sound melodic? Yes. Regular rhythm, even line syllable count, and rhyme scheme abab..
3. Does the poem say something? Does it have depth? Not really, just rose-colored glasses of romance.
4. Is the poem too abstract? Can you understand the message? Not abstract, not much of a message: Newlywed love, unrealistic romantics.
5. Does the poem have power or beauty or both? ??
6. Does the poem contain common clichés? No
7. Do the words in the poem seemed forced to conform to the form or line syllable count? Somewhat, yes.
8. Is the poem's punctuation used effectively? I think so.
9. Are there any interesting words in the poem? Echoes, shimmered, aloft. I find these words interesting.


1. Check for spelling errors. No spelling errors
2. Be sure you have used consistent tense and person.
3. Check the punctuation – be consistent in its use.
4. Review the form instructions to be sure you have followed the rules, including but not limited to:
a. How many lines in the poem or stanza Quatrain: 4 lines per stanza
b. How many syllables in each line: 10
c. Rhyme scheme: abab
5. When you create a static item in your port on WDC, be sure to view it afterwards.
a. Be sure the line spacing is how you want it.
b. Change the font if you believe it will enhance the presentation of your poem.
c. Use colors with caution. Too many colors can detract from the content of your poem.