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An incomplete sestina (no last stanza). Inspired by somebody leaving for college. |
Silent Sounds (A sestina, neglecting the last stanza) Inspired by a college student leaving. My first sestina attempt. I'm looking for critiques! Enjoy. You see the silent sounds Of the fountain, water falling, Spray catching your face, making you blink, Your notebook sticky and falling apart. The charcoal strokes melting, hours Of work, blurring until they are gone. The park is empty, trees bare, leaves finally gone. You stay sitting as everybody leaves, knowing it sounds Crazy, to be alone here at night. You can’t bring myself to move after hours And hours, trying to capture what you see, softening the falling you will eventually endure, preparing yourself, keeping yourself apart, Detached, knowing that what you have here is limited, like you blink And you’ve left it all behind, blink And you’re suddenly uprooted, one day gone, Wanting to leave, bags packed, waiting to be far apart Never thinking the familiar sounds Of your life would be falling Away, stretched thin, the hours Ticking away, after years and years, your hours Are precious, clinging to them even as you blink And there! You’re out of time, finished with free falling, Trying, at least, to straighten your life before you’ve gone Somewhere new, the idea of that – somewhere new - sounds Foreign, something uncharted, a part Of that place you’ve never encountered, you know, the one apart From your three story house next to trees you spent hours Observing, the stack of childish drawings capturing the sounds, Those silent sounds you could always see on paper when others blink So quickly they hardly notice them. But you can’t anymore, can you? You’re gone, The trees still standing, the leaves still falling With nobody there to see them. Everything, falling Apart without anybody to see them properly, your ability gone, Disappearing along with the quickly wasted hours. Blink. Go on, I dare you. Blink. Do you see it? Right there. Can you see the silent sounds? |