Way too wordy: May Entry

Time dragged both slowly and painfully while the sun slowly rose into the sky, shining down on a small boy who was walking along a path kicking at rocks, and tossing sticks aimlessly through the air in an attempt to hit the small birds which were roosting in the blossom covered cherry trees that had dropped pink petals all over the ground as far as the eye could see.

My version...

Blossom covered cherry trees had dropped petals all over the ground as far as the eye could see. A small boy walked along kicking rocks, and tossing sticks through the air, attempting to hit small birds roosting in the trees. Time seemed to drag painfully as the sun rose, shining down on the boy.