Loved it.. Loved it... Loved it. I really enjoy reading this style of poem
Just one idea. Since this a story about your past ghosts who make you feel that your soul is damned. <like a true ghost spirit>
maybe you could use the word "damned", instead of " bring me down",
say " is for the damned". The whole line sounds better <at least to my ears>
But your grip on regret is for the damned.
almost like the grip of the grim reaper maybe
just a thought.
Happy Halloween
I would love to read Christmas poem written like this.
A very wise old tale you have spun. Leaving the imagination to none. For as far as my minds eye did see. You now have led me down a powerful scene
THIS was a great story.... This type of writing is very hard to do. The ending was smart and sassy.
Why do people always have fears about tears?
you have learned a lot in your young years
but remember to always try to rhyme
and go with flow of the words sometime
otherwise, I think you are doing just fine.
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