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Rated: E | (4.0)
This might come down to personal preference, but I don't know if the word "way" in line five fits with the feeling of tedium you seem to be trying to create. It might help to repeat "too," instead. Then you could have "to get ," "to change," and "too, too long" one right after the other. I honestly think that the "too" could stand on it's own, as well. I like that you make readers go through hearing about how many stories there are before repeating that you have to walk up four, though. It simulates the feeling of climbing stairs, and works well with the piece's formatting. Good poem.
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