I love your use of description especially the visual and sensory imagery. ‘Just as he turned away, she darted through the patch of light. The golden aura from the gas lamps turned her wings from silver to gold […] .She was certain that he could hear the beating of her wings and the staccato hammering of her heart. With a suppressed cry, she fluttered toward the pocket of his robe and dove into the heavy velveteen fabric’. The lexis throughout is very eloquent, please write more.
This piece is leaves the reader wanting more, I do not know whether this is intentional, due to work count or the genre that you have deliberately kept the warlock as a mysterious figure. The ending is simple but effective, nice cliffhanger.
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