Brilliant how you've twisted this around to say the exact opposite of what you truly mean. Subtle yet profound (does that make any sense at all? Hope you know what I mean by that.) . No suggestions for improvement. I'm no expert or editor. Great work. Carry on.
Once again, Brian, excellent work. You needn't feel so unsure of yourself. You know how popular the Transformers were. :::smiles::: Kids love the idea of inatimate objects coming to life and you've phrased the incantation quite well. Good luck with it.
I LOVE this style of poetry ; of storytelling. It reminds me so much of the sort of thing I read and dreamt of as a child and of what I wish to write now. Never lose your fancy ; always dare to dream.
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