The last two-thirds flow really well and I had no trouble staying interested in the story. The descriptions of locations and characters are really good, although some of the names are a bit dodgy. e.g. lucifront. The first bit i felt went a bit too fast or something, i dunno. Also "farming implements" sounds a bit too formal for the whole "oh my village is on fire" situation.
yeah but great! Awesome imagination and i'm hooked!
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