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Review by Xean Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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PROS: Evocative.
CONS: Flair.

A poem on the splendors of evening.

Hello Nancy,

I have chosen this work because it is somewhat similar to The Dancing King, but in contrast to mine, it represents the reverse poetic style. To the observant, there are two types of poetry, both equally good when crafted well: one which rhymes phonetically and one which doesn't. Though your poem does rhyme phonetically in 3rd, 4th and 5th stanzas, it was obviously designed to be subtle in that regard, resonant but not visibly so. It is a style which fits well to it.

I am not one, but I know there are many who have hard-set preferences between the two types of styles. Bear in mind however, each has it's advantages and appeal to the individual composer and though each may perceive the other as unaccomplished works from their focal point, it is mostly a matter of perception; which is why I have no need to discuss your poetic style in review. Dancing King started a soon to be published poetry series after gaining the attention of and winning a poetry contest from affiliate publishers of the Harry Potter books. Hopefully yours achieves similar success, for though stylistically different, it is nonetheless a work of considered achievement.


From reading it, I can see that:
-> Your poem has a mysterious quality to it, being it fixes no exact focus and the directional words used are vague, e.g.: this canvas, that north place.
-> Though the last three paragraphs are phonetically rhyming, the first two do not and the feeling on un-rhymed nature transcends into the second half, effectively creating the illusion of an un-rhymed poem.
-> The rhythm is neither abrupt nor entirely free flowing, depending on which vantage point it is viewed. It is however an adequately metered verse.


Appealing things about your work:
-> The evocative nature of your poem invokes a transcendental quality which combines well with a light atmosphere of mystery, heightened by the nighttime setting.
-> Your work is well composed, free from grammar errors.


Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Your choice of words can be better improved augmenting another essential quality of your piece: verbal rhythm. This can be accomplished by adding flair phrases, words that invoke wit. Such as:

'And colors in flight', instead of 'And colors and light'.
'Spread over meadow fields', instead of 'And spread over fields.

-> You can also add phonetic rhyme to the first two stanzas so they better flow with the later 3.


XPRESScore: 4.0

Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I Am :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Evocative
CONS: Could have been effectively composed poetically, to greater effect.

A prose work of self-definition within the unity of love.

Hello Dreamin1,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well refined work, with no grammar errors.
-> Your sentences flow smoothly with a touch of rhythm.
-> There is also hintings of rhyme in certain centences.

Appealing things about your work:
-> The inspirational nature of the prose which evokes comfort and meaning.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None.


XPRESScore: 4.5


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I AM :)XPRESSIONS):

A poem of confidence, where the assertion is being creative and witty.

PROS: Creative
CONS: No Flow

Hello Shonnie,
Thank you for your review. It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a creative poem, best perceived by the author.
-> There is a playful quality to it which adds benefit, but it's hampered by lack of good flow throughout due to its loose nature.
-> A personal work, perhaps of best appeal to those immediately connected to it.
-> It's free of grammar errors.

Appealing things about your work:
-> The playful almost childish nature of the poem.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Though this is obviously an inspired poem, I don't believe it will bear much appeal beyond your creative circle because the style of composition hampers poetic flow. It is however written well for self inspiration.


XPRESScore: 4.0


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
My Forever Valentine :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Evocative
CONS: Lack of feeling

Hello Jaiam,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well written poem, inspired and neatly composed.
-> It flows well overall, though it's not specially eloquent.
-> Is free of grammar errors.


Appealing things about your work:
-> The evocative nature of the piece is the strongest point, especially in the second stanza, though it is hampered by manner of description later on.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Add more feeling. When the line says "To me, this parting is nothing", it implys carelessness, not particularly matching with a romantic theme.


XPRESScore: 4.5


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Trick or Tweet :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Meaningful, clear.
CONS: None

Hello Tom,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> You've written a very meaningful and powerful story, expertly thought of and executed.
-> Your story touches many aspects, from technology to romance and is told with humanity.
-> Your work is free of grammar errors.

Appealing things about your work:
-> Everything. The style, clarity, and emotion coupled with your human approach to the story combine to form a powerful and riveting tale.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None


XPRESScore: 5.0


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Aversion :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Idea
CONS: Poetry

Hello Nay,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> Though you have an appealing idea, it only functions as poetry for the first 4 stanzas.
-> Beginning from the fourth paragraph and evidenced further in the fifth, the narrative begins to take on less poetic quality and more story form.

Appealing things about your work:
-> The idea is catchy and the first three paragraphs function well as poetry.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Even if you use the beginning part as a poetry beginning, You ought tranform the latter part into a full story if you can, rather than leave it in suspense.


XPRESScore: 3.5


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: E | (4.5)


Silent Rain :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Effect
CONS: None

Hello Kevin,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> It is a well crafted poem, where reasoning is more important than rhyme.
-> Shows to be free of grammar inconsistency.

Appealing things about your work:
-> The special effect of blending the visceral scene of Heart Attack with that of Heartbreak. The added terrifying atmosphere after the first few sentences pulls the reader in.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> None, though I have to say, the visceral nature may actually deter some readers unaccustomed to it.


XPRESScore: 4.5


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Story of the Uneven Eyebrows :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Comedy
CONS: Grammar

Hello Elle,
It's my pleasure to have your story for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> Yours is a dual nature story, offering sad conclusion to a funny story.
-> It is fluently written for the most part.
-> It contains numerous spelling errors that can be easily corrected.

Appealing things about your work:
-> Comedic nature is the greatest strength in your story.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Vary storytelling style, correct context. Immediate repetitons are not appealing, eg "He held his laugh. He bursted out of the room." The latter sentence which is in improper context.
-> Correct numerous spelling errors, eg Prostitute, Curiosity, Intense
-> Review for appropriate word spacing eg "If you find it hard following my instructions,(space)you may visit..."


XPRESScore: 4.0


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Am I :)XPRESSIONS):

PROS: Romance
CONS: Fluency

Hello dnadream,
It is a pleasure to have your work for review today.

From reading it, I can see that:
-> You strived well and achieved a good romantic piece.
-> You could have perhaps improved upon it a bit more earlier, but any changes made now I don't believe would make any difference for optimum.

Appealing things about your work:
-> The descriptive nature is your poem's forte, building upon the querying foundation.

Things I believe you can do to make this piece better:
-> Add congruent sentence capitals.
-> It is not suggestible at this stage, but were it earlier during formation, you could have made certain sentences flow better with the overall, but I won't describe further because changing at this stage may worsen the quality, rather than improve it.


XPRESScore: 4.5


Keep up the good work and good luck! :D


Xean




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