HAHA, That was pretty good, you gave me a laugh. I was expecting a serious criminal story with a sad ending. That was really creative. At first I was thinking, "Man, this is moving very fast and its jumpy". But then at the end the story was clear.
This was the mind of a childs day dream.
Thank you
Stew
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