Wow! This piece is different then what I had expected for the new February prompt from the Dialogue 500. I like how there was a twist at the end of the piece, creating a real "oh wow" moment. Just to let you know before judging begins, you do have one or two grammar/punctuation errors that you may want to review. One that I caught was towards the end: "No! She was just here. I WANT TO LEAVE?..." I think you meant "I WANT TO LEAVE!" But of course punctuation is just a minor detail. I believe that this dialogue only story was great, and could possibly be extended into a larger story if you wished. Keep up the good work!
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