I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the way you described things. I pictured everything beautifully in my mind. The story itself left 'warn fuzzys' in my heart. It was a very sweet tale. The only thing I could truely reccomend that you do to fix, would be to seperate the remembrance Love has from the rest of the story. Perhaps add an extra space before that scene so that noone gets confused. Other than that you did a wonderful job.
This was interesting enough, but I felt like there was something missing. It seemed to start in the middle of a story and it ended a little abruptly. I would like to have seen it be a little longer. Overall it did hold my attention and I found it interesting.
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