I loved it! It's almost as if your able to feel what she felt, and be in that point of time with her. Just as if the love of your life broke up with the reader. I myself felt as if that were the case.
The sense of the characters you have created is good to say the least, but you need to pay more attention to detail. Try to make the reader feel and smell, hear, taste, see, exc. Detail is the most essential aspect on a good book. Otherwise you have story flow and that's what catches most writers from moving on with a fantastic Novel.
P.S. Keep up the good work my friend.
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