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Review of Your time is over  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Reviewed by The Angel Army!


Hi, Sumojo Author Icon,

I found this gem of a dialogue in the Read and Review section. I am glad I stumbled upon this lovely story. It really made me smile and made my day.

You might be categorizing it as nonsense, I think it's humor and very witty: the writer arguing with the muse and replacing her with ChatGPT. Funny.

Although I am hoping that it's not a reality, I am very ambivalent towards ChatGPT since it is a curse and a blessing for writers. I don't use it in my creative writing, but I use it as a tool to do research. Google gives answers nowadays with AI. When did that happen?

So, it seems it's a development we cannot stop, I am afraid.

I loved the way you bolded the text so it was apparent who was speaking when. I found this display to be a very appealing format. I am certainly going to copy that in my next entry for this contest. Thanks!

No errors found.

Keep on writing, and thanks for sharing.

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for entry "Arkansas " Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi, Sung'manitu Author Icon,

As part of the travelers in the blogging group myself I decided to officially review you as well.

Wow, this entry about us traveling through your state and you graciously inviting us to your home and heart is a treat to read.

Fast-paced, humorous, and full of interesting facts and fabrications, it's an easy-to-read and very well-constructed blog. I love it.

You, from day 1, transformed into a sort of leader of the pact, and everybody is well taken care of and included in the trip.

And the title of your blog: I've Been Everywhere is no exaggeration. You HAVE been everywhere.

So, I am looking forward to reading the rest of this virtual journey into the 50 states.

Enjoy, and write on.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Dave Ryan Author Icon,

I found your vignette in the Read and Review section. I am so glad I did, because this story deserves a review.

You are a master with words, and this is another example. Wow, what a beautiful story. It reads like a thriller, and the suspense is so present, it almost knocked me over.

You manage to build up this atmosphere with bated breath, a piece every time. Great wording, and very vivid descriptions of the person, fully crossdressed, who walks a dangerous path outside in plain view, aroused by his own audacity.

The end of the story totally blindsided me; I did not see that one coming. The reader was just as surprised as the main character.

I am not sure why you pulled out of the competition in December, but you certainly had the chance to win. Was it the number of words? No, I checked, it was 716 words, so that was okay. Why then did you pull out? It remains a mystery.

Anyway, I loved this story and will reward it with an awardicon.

Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive~Petra's Vacay Author Icon


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Reviewed by The Angel Army!


Hi, Howl Author Icon,

I found this poem in your portfolio and decided to review it.

A self-reflective poem about the poet's struggle to help others when he himself has issues to overcome. Is it correct or valid to do so and forget his own misery?

My answer would be, it's always good to try to help others, but never forget yourself, who you are, and your own needs.

In my opinion, it's almost impossible to solve all your own issues, so that would mean you cannot be there for others. No, it can go both ways. You don't have to be better, more sane, or equipped to help; it might even be to your advantage to help others while requiring help yourself. It can give others confidence that they are not alone in this, that hey...the helper suffers the same. Makes you more human. You don't have to be perfect to help others, but you have to be honest.

I love this poem because it's an honest cry of attention to self. And pay attention to your own burden. However, continue to be there for others if possible.

The structure of the poem is another matter. At first glance, it was a prose poem, which I love. Later, I discovered you try to make it rhyme as well, and sometimes it doesn't rhyme. That made the poem a bit wobbly, as you are balancing two thoughts. Rhyme or not.

Because the message and the rhythm are so powerful, I would opt for turning this into a prose poem without the (forced) rhyme. It doesn't need rhyme.

This made me give you an awardicon because of the content and overall view of the poem, but a 4-star because it can be made better. But this is just one opinion, do with it what you like.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Reviewed by The Angel Army!


Hi, Christopher Roy Denton Author Icon,

I found this poem browsing through your portfolio.

Welcome back with this first of two new poems. You're back at WdC, and I am so thrilled. I followed you on Facebook for the last few years, where you were photographing beautiful places in England and beyond. Often castles and churches.

This free verse just fits right in. You, church crawling in ancient territory, fighting stone, old wood, and cobwebs.

I really enjoyed this poem. Its themes of history, contemplation, and religion are so descriptive and emotional, it touched my core.

The tone, atmosphere, pace, and the carefully chosen words all weave a beautiful picture. I just see you, literally see you, at those church sites in the English weather, which adds to the experience.

My favorite part?
Who broke the ancient statues, screens, and cross?
Who stole the lead and let in all that rain?
The world has changed and left this place behind
Except for me … I come to rest my brain.

I love it when questions are asked in poetry.

Anyway, a good reading experience! I thank you for sharing, and I hope to see you around.
Keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Reviewed by The Angel Army!


Hi, L.A.Saxe Author Icon,

I found this blog on writing in the Please Review Section.

You seem to struggle with stuff that all writers struggle with in one form or another: how to stick with the idea and keep on developing it. It's hard, there are many distractions to loose interest and hop onto the next idea without fully developing the first one. Indeed, if you keep doing that, you'll never be able to finish a story or write in the first place. Of course, sometimes it's just a sign that the idea is not interesting or good enough.

It seems to me you can use some tools that keep you focused, because the lack of focus is what's bothering you probably.

Joining the different types and kinds of contests here at WdC might work for you. There is a deadline, sometimes there is a theme or subject to go with, and there is always a commitment. You need that commitment to focus and stay put.

Try joining a contest of your liking. There are plenty. They usually start at the beginning of each month, so try "Contest Clues" Open in new Window. [E] and "Writing Contests @ Writing.Com" Open in new Window. [E] and make one or two choices. Sign up and try to stick to it. Because you committed by putting your name in the forum, you might just do it. Just a thought!

Furthermore, I am a fervent blogger journaling, as are many others on this site. You can use blogging for stream-of-consciousness-type writing, which is actually quite interesting to read, or write about any topic that comes to mind. As you have noticed, you are doing quite well in that department and it keeps you writing. So, why not go with that blog? It will keep the flow going, and it will register your attempts at writing that story if you make that one of the objectives in your blog.

All in all, you CAN write but you need to focus. Good luck with that.

Btw: the subjectline and byline of your item here is not NON-E. It's just E. Look it up. You might want to change that because now people are less likely to read it.

Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Reviewed by The Angel Army!


Hi, Joseph Author Icon,

I found your free verse poem in the Read and Review section.

Gosh, already been 5 years since the pandemic broke loose all around the world and took so many lives and caused so much trouble. It seems only yesterday, and there are still a lot of people suffering from long COVID. And a lot of kids still suffer from depression because of the social isolation in those days. So, it's not over. And then there is the fear of mutations still. I had my last shot a year and a half ago.

I lost a dear friend of my stepmom. They both got the bug at the same time. The friend died, my stepmom lived.

Your poem is very good. It has that sense of urgency we all felt when it was happening. It holds you by the throat and doesn't let go. Very compelling.

It contradicts everything conspiracy theorists believe in. I think it was and still is very harmful to be in that camp. I am glad you took the pandemic seriously.

Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, GreenLion93 Author Icon,

I found your short story (almost prose poem?) in the Read and Review section.

But first of all, since you are still a newbie in your first year at WdC, Welcome!

I really, really liked this story. It has a soft demeanor about it that I loved, and the description of coffee making filled my nostrils with the excellent scent of freshly brewed coffee. I am a true coffee addict. So, you had me hooked from the start.

I read it almost like a prose poem, a quality I loved. Perhaps what drove me to think this was also your lack of paragraphing. At first, I thought this diminished the experience of reading your work, but after carefully reading it a second time, I found it's also its strength.

Words that come to mind are soft-spoken, lovable, dreamy, and very well written. A lovely moment frozen in time. It turned out to be a mirage, but who cares? The experience was there, the feelings were real, I loved it.

So, no errors, nothing that makes this wonderful reading experience go away. The atmosphere, the pace, and the descriptions linger on.

Thank you for sharing, and keep on writing.

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Review of Getting Away  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, WriterRick Author Icon,

I found your coming-of-age short story while browsing through the Read and Review section.

A great, well-written story about two youngsters escaping from their mundane town and searching for adventure. It seems to me that this is the start of many teenagers who want to travel and see the world, experiencing things.

Although the theme and development of the story are exciting, there are a lot of cliches in the story as well. But, as cliches go, they are often true. I didn't mind a bit.

For example, the description of the two main characters and their dialogue when trying to consider leaving.

But you managed to write a strong, fast-paced, and clear story, with a good flow and atmosphere, taking the reader by the hand in this process of escape and travel.

Although no real surprises, it was a good reading experience.

Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing and expanding your oeuvre.

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Review of Unsent  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, WriteWithJanney Author Icon,

I stumbled upon your poem while browsing through the Read and Review Section.

First of all, Welcome to Writing.com. This is the best writing community ever, where you can learn, write, and hone your craft. Reviewing is a very important factor of this site, so I would encourage you to start doing that. You have expertise to bring into the mix. That means that for job opportunities, you have to search elsewhere; there are none here, everything is a labor of love.

As a poet, look also at "The Poet's Place " Open in new Window. [E] and "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" Open in new Window. [E]to study the different styles of poetry if you are interested. There is a library for members, you can mingle, discuss, and do assignments. Furthermore, as an upgraded member, you can start blogging. "Blog Tab" Open in new Window..

Your free verse poem is a lovely love poem, with a great emphasis on holding on to your identity. It is indeed soft in tone but strong in its message. I loved that. To have such a vision on relationships means the poet is a strong character, capable of holding her own without getting cynical.

There is a good flow, pace, and rhythm.

The best line for me is: "Nothing deep- just that the sky looked like the
one we used to lie under." It created a strong image of the days you were together.

I found no errors or points to reconsider; it's a modern, coming-of-age poem with a fine atmosphere.

Thanks for sharing. Keep on writing,

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review by WakeUpAndLive


Dear Kåre เลียม Enga Author Icon,

This is one of the most beautiful poems in your selection, ever. I already knew this poem and commented on it as I recall, but I wanted to do so again on your Anniversary!

These lines, these words, these images took my breath away. It whispers, it flows, it is devastatingly brutal.

The tsunami of December 26, 2004. I was in Denver, Colorado, when it happened. I flew back home the day after and was glued to my television set for days.

My late mum was born in Sumatra, Medan, and the devastation and deaths, and the missing in Atjeh were mindblowing. I wanted to help out so I left for Atjeh in May to see if I could be of service putting up a shelter for kids. I was of no use, so the plan didn't work out.

But I had my catharsis moment reliving the tsunami in the ocean near my hotel. Very strong tidal waves.

Your words brought back these horrible moments of 2004/5.

In the most beautiful, but gruesome way. Thanks! *Heart*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Hi, JCosmos Author Icon, I found your poem in the Newsfeed, and since I just took an aspirin for my aching wisdom tooth I couldn't resist to review.

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Your pain is my pain at the moment. My teeth are probably not as bad as yours but I feel your pain.

I have bad gums and have 4 appointments this month. One is with the dentist for an annual check-up; the other 3 are with my mouth hygienist for deep cleaning with sedation of the whole mouth.

Ouch, I am dreading them all.

On top of that, I have an aching wisdom molar that had to be taken out a year ago according to my dentist but I postponed the procedure every time. Till now, now I am in pain.

I am feeling it, especially with hot and cold drinks. Aspirin helps, so I have made another appointment for the end of January.

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I liked your poem a lot. The repetition does the trick, it coincides with the repetition of the annual appointments you have.

And you captured that sense of urgency in your words.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)



Hi foxtale Author Icon, I found your writing at your request. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Funny title that grabbed my attention.

General impressions
I got two stories for the price of one! Both stories were short and sweet.

This story is also about the new puppy your daughter asked about after the old one passed away. As I know as a dog owner myself, this is always a sad period in time. But you got the new puppy after a while. I have to congratulate you on teaching the puppy those basic commands. Mine were shelter dogs and I was never quite able to teach them. Too much baggage from their previous lives, I guess. And I am not consequent in my teaching I am afraid.

But the pun lay in the last paragraph where you brought your wife her morning coffee. Funny!

Favorite Parts
The bit about the puppy and your last two lines.

Suggestions
No errors I could find. I loved reading your short story.

Final thoughts
The other story was also fun to read. So, that left me with a smile on my face. Excellent job!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive




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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi SeanFhear Author Icon, I found your writing in the Read and Review Section. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Good title, but it's not totally covering the content. A very lyrical, great love poem.


General impressions
Wow, this is a very loving poem, with a great atmosphere, good wording, pace, and rhythm.

Favorite Parts
Every touch is a tale,
a story in every string of hair,
O I can't have my enough.

Especially "Every Touch Is A Tale". I'm impressed by that line. Do you mind if I borrow and use your words in a prose poem someday? I absolutely adored this line!

Suggestions
No real suggestions, other than you perhaps take another look at the title and come up with something even better. Just a thought.


Final thoughts

A romantic poem that had to be written. Thanks for sharing!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

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Review of Irony  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Sophy Author Icon, I found your writing in the Read and Review section. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
A good title, but with current world affairs in mind it even could be a stronger word.

General impressions

Wow, I loved this free verse. It hit the nail right on the head. Nothing has changed with people and religion, it became even worse IMHO. Parties hate each other and there is hardly common ground.

Favorite Parts

Isn't it ironic
that the one thing
that could bring us all together
is that thing
which tears us apart?

This stanza is great and I loved the repetition. Great rhythm, sad poem but deep thoughts underneath.

Suggestions

No errors, except the title, too mild nowadays. Adding 'devastatingly ironic' would be appropriate with current affairs.


Final thoughts

I could cry over this poem and what it means for the world and people. But I am an agnostic, so there you go.

Thanks for sharing!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Spiritual dawning, first light Author Icon,I found your writing at random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject
Simple and eloquent title. The job of a poet is to ponder in the night and create. It's 5.47 here in The Netherlands and we are separated by one hour, so you are a night owl as well. Greetz.

General impressions
I love this little poem. It has great rhyme and rhythm and there is an excellent flow and atmosphere.

Favorite Parts
The sunlight fades into the distance
Soon the stars will greet,
the moon arises in an instant
The world is at my feet.

This first stanza is wonderful. Full of awe and wonder and really optimistic about Life and your place in it: "The world is at my feet".

Kinda like I am feeling now, so I can relate!

Suggestions
There is one thing, a typo or deliberate? 'Gods', did you mean it to be plural, or is it God's?

Final thoughts
A verse that covers every night and every day. Neat. Thank you for sharing and Good Morning!

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)



Hi, Rick Fix Author Icon, I found your vignette at your request.

In literature, a vignette is a short piece of writing that does not have a beginning, middle, or end but rather focuses on a specific moment in time and the details within it.

Vignettes do not tell complete stories on their own.

You seem to have a preference for this particular form of prose or short story. And you are good at it.

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This time a personal essay, a memory from your childhood in second grade at an elementary school where Mr. Rosen and Ms. Monique held the scepter. The green house where children learned, ran around and colored their paper candles. You can feel the buzz and the atmosphere of this teaching environment through your lovely and sometimes humorous descriptions of the classes and their teachers.

Your younger self fantasizes about the love relationship there has to be between the two adults, realistic or imagined.

The pace and rhythm of this writing are well-chosen, and the wording is powerful.

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I want to suggest you refer earlier in the story to the material of the candles. I was under the impression that they were wax candles and that was difficult to envision, except when the school would have been named Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, or an ultra-catholic dwelling where kids walked about with candles in the hallway. It didn't make much sense to me but later on, I found out they were paper candles, colorful drawings, and part of the lessons.

And try adding two more genres to the story. Personal, Children, and Biography for instance. Genres are ways for readers to filter out the story when they search for something to read and review. You are missing a chance when you have 'Other' framed there. Just a thought.

I loved this little tale. So, thanks for sharing, and keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)



Hi, Rick Fix Author Icon,

I found your mystery at your request. I am mesmerized by it, read it twice with great care and then read it aloud just now, in the middle of the night, in the dark, behind my PC. The computer provides the necessary light to see at all. It is quiet, in my house, in the city where I live. The only sound now is that of the clicking of letter tabs on my keyboard.

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What a great, intriguing story this is. A chance encounter with a man, revealing the early days of the computer, when the time was slow, bitts were friendly and computer nerds were exploring the seemingly endless possibilities of a new and exciting world.

I am old enough to know that period in time with the first computer at work, the university of my Alma Mater, and a chunky personal computer at home. I had a father who was working in the early days of the computer and he taught me things, so I was one of the early ones in the world of the clicking sound of the phone connection. A rattling sound, with its own song.

I remembered indeed we had to wait long, longer, the longest for information that was emerging on the screen.

Your story reads like a prose poem, it has beautiful sentence constructions and a poetic vignette-like feel about it. No real beginning, middle, or end. A mystery indeed.

It reminds me of the first movie of the Matrix trilogy, a movie that I loved. It also reminds me of a movie about radio waves, I can't recall the name, but it resembled the hum in your story.

The end was unexpected, he had pickpocketed your MC's mobile phone. So, in the end, what was he, your mystery man...a great thinker, or a common thief. Or both. Probably both.

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It is a wonderfully crafted piece of writing. An intriguing story. I found one error: a typo?

The first paragraph:'But now we download forecasters, (THAT) are nothing but relics...'.

This is a really good read, and I am gracing it with an awardicon. That's how enjoyable this writing was. You are a great teller of tales.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Rick Fix Author Icon,I found your writing at your request and I am glad I did. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirits. *Delight*


On Title/Subject

Great and catchy title. It drew me in immediately.

General impressions

Wow, what a great poem. Very interesting wording, good atmosphere, and well written. I loved it.

Favorite Parts
It seems to have two parts, one about the vegetable avocado, or is it a fruit? I am never sure. The other is an encounter in the city.

I love a good ripe but not that ripe avocado. It is delicious and a very well-formed veggie. Never read a poem about it though, you are the first.

A wonderful poem that breathes city life. You are very good with words.

Suggestions
No errors I could find. No suggestions therefore, it is the best poem I read in a long time.

Because I am an ESL writer I had to look up a few words, loved that...I like to learn. You provided food for thought.

Final thoughts
Your choice of words, rhythm, and atmosphere makes me want to read more of your poems.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing! Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hi, L.A.Saxe Author Icon,

I found your short story in the Thriller/suspense genre as part of today's Earn the Badge challenge. And I am glad I did.

This is really a fantastically simple but effective story with a lot of suspense. Very neat to be able to do that in only 300 words. Well done.

You managed to make believable descriptions and a sinister atmosphere with two brothers in the woods. The reader is taken by the hand to walk the path through the woods with them. When the woods began to make noise and move even the reader just wanted to shout: "Run guys, run...I 'll run with you. Let's get out of here." It's that believable.

I felt like the boy-reader in the movie The Neverending Story.

To make a believable and credible suspense story is one of the most difficult things to do, in my experience. You made this happen with the simplest means. But it was a psychologically sound move to set the story at night, near and in the woods, with only their fears to accompany them. It taps into universal feelings of terror and dread.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)



Hi, foxtale Author Icon,

I found your short story at your request. What a lovely tale about a themed birthday cake and what happened after the dog went for it.

I love the A team. In my country, the Netherlands, there are still some broadcasts airing those episodes again.



I even found that particular-themed birthday cake online. It is quite a special feature. I can imagine the kids loving it and the panic when the cake was partly destroyed. Thanks to swift action everything went well and on time for the birthday.

I did not find any grammar errors, this is just a warm and friendly family tale to tell at a birthday party.

Thank you for sharing and keep on writing.

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Welcome to Writing.com, Nathan Zimmerman Author Icon,

I found your introduction on the Read & Review Page. It's nice meeting you. I looked at your portfolio and recommend you fill your bio with the necessary facts. People tend to visit, read, and review more if they know with whom they are dealing. And you want them to read what you've created, don't you? For information: check out: Get Started at the top of the page. If you invest some time and effort in reading you will get the hang of the site pretty soon. It can be daunting at first, but you are a grad student so you must be able.

It is great that you have this important project lined up. I hope you will be able to write and finish it. Take your time. Since you are a free member you only have space for ten items in your portfolio, but you can always change that to basic or upgraded. That will cost money or GPs (the currency on WdC), but you can always accumulate points by reviewing or (easy money) visit "Weekly Goals" Open in new Window. [13+] on Monday and Friday and list your goals for the week. It can generate 2000 GPs per week if you hold to it every week. Just a thought!

Apart from filling your profile with writing and "Reviewing On Writing.Com" Open in new Window. you can do so much more in contests and this September 1-7 in the Birthday Week of the site. We have existed for 24 years and are celebrating. Come and join us that week. :)

I hope you will enjoy the site. Keep on writing

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Hi, Dan I Am Author Icon,

Today is the 29th of August, your Anniversary date at Writing.com. I wanted to help you celebrate until I read your latest poem Will I see her again? And I realized that there is nothing to celebrate. If I read this correctly you lost your wife recently! And I am so sorry. As a cancer survivor who recently was operated on and dodged the bullet, I do so sympathize. I got my second chance in life, but she did not. That cutie of class 1976 is no more. You two have known each other then for around 48 years? It's unimaginable to comprehend. And I understand your plea "Will I ever see her again?". As an agnostic myself I do hope so.

This poem is beautiful in its simplicity and loving strength. A testament to the woman you love.

I wish you all the best in this difficult period. Take care!

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Hi, Chico Mahalo Author Icon,

I found this lovely tale on the Read & Review Page and got hooked by your writing style. I loved your compact, straightforward no-nonsense writing a lot. It is very appealing.

The writer took the reader by the hand in a period in his life as a commuter, therapy seeker, patient, and runner. Oh, and he visited a bar also. *Bigsmile*

The way it is described never became boring. I just wanted to read on, which is exceptional because it is a description of a normal life, the life of a city man in his fifties. Not spectacular or anything.

There were no grammar errors I could find, except for "purpous' in the sub-line. A typo? Did you mean purpose?

I am trying to read more of your work in your portfolio. Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

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Hi, Dave Ryan Author Icon,

I found this remarkable gem of a poem on the Read & Review Page. WOW, WOW, WOW! What a wonderful funny poem. I am not surprised it won several contests. It's hilarious.

7 stanzas with funny remarks to divide them. What a treat.

I read the poem a few times and read it also out loud, it never became dull, it stayed fresh, funny, and extremely amusing!

The best lines? I'd just de-loused the camel, as some snow was on its way. And...Well off I went to wash the cat, with furrowed brow and shin. To name a few, but in a way every line of this verse hit it.

I didn't find any grammar errors, everything was as it should be. Pace, Rhythm, and Rhyme were wonderful! And the content was unexpected.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing.

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