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I try to find the WOW-factor in your writing. No in-depth analysis, just my thoughts. #19 PR June 2016. #29 PR July 2016. #10 PR August 2016. Newbies Academy Reviewing Classroom, Winner June 2016. First Place The Newbie Academy Review Contest June 2016. Second Place "The Newbie Academy Review Contest " July and Aug 2016. #9 PR Sept 2016.#20 PR Oct 2016. First place "The Newbie Academy Review Contest" November 2016.#22 PR Nov 2016.#36 PR Feb 2017.#67 PR March 2017.#56 PR July 2017.#41 PR Aug 2017. #77 PR Oct 2017. #53 PR Nov 2017. #53 PR Dec 2017.#96 PR Sept 2018. #38 PR Aug 2020.#26 PR Sept 2020. #56 PR Oct 2020. #80 PR Nov 2020.#76 PR Aug 2021. #47 PR Sept 2021. #69 PR June 2023.#53 PR July 2023. #45 PR Nov 2023. #55 PR Aug 2024.
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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hi, L.A.Saxe ,

I found your short story in the Thriller/suspense genre as part of today's Earn the Badge challenge. And I am glad I did.

This is really a fantastically simple but effective story with a lot of suspense. Very neat to be able to do that in only 300 words. Well done.

You managed to make believable descriptions and a sinister atmosphere with two brothers in the woods. The reader is taken by the hand to walk the path through the woods with them. When the woods began to make noise and move even the reader just wanted to shout: "Run guys, run...I 'll run with you. Let's get out of here." It's that believable.

I felt like the boy-reader in the movie The Neverending Story.

To make a believable and credible suspense story is one of the most difficult things to do, in my experience. You made this happen with the simplest means. But it was a psychologically sound move to set the story at night, near and in the woods, with only their fears to accompany them. It taps into universal feelings of terror and dread.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Hi, foxtale ,

I found your short story at your request. What a lovely tale about a themed birthday cake and what happened after the dog went for it.

I love the A team. In my country, the Netherlands, there are still some broadcasts airing those episodes again.



I even found that particular-themed birthday cake online. It is quite a special feature. I can imagine the kids loving it and the panic when the cake was partly destroyed. Thanks to swift action everything went well and on time for the birthday.

I did not find any grammar errors, this is just a warm and friendly family tale to tell at a birthday party.

Thank you for sharing and keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Welcome to Writing.com, Nathan Zimmerman ,

I found your introduction on the Read & Review Page. It's nice meeting you. I looked at your portfolio and recommend you fill your bio with the necessary facts. People tend to visit, read, and review more if they know with whom they are dealing. And you want them to read what you've created, don't you? For information: check out: Get Started at the top of the page. If you invest some time and effort in reading you will get the hang of the site pretty soon. It can be daunting at first, but you are a grad student so you must be able.

It is great that you have this important project lined up. I hope you will be able to write and finish it. Take your time. Since you are a free member you only have space for ten items in your portfolio, but you can always change that to basic or upgraded. That will cost money or GPs (the currency on WdC), but you can always accumulate points by reviewing or (easy money) visit "Weekly Goals"  [13+] on Monday and Friday and list your goals for the week. It can generate 2000 GPs per week if you hold to it every week. Just a thought!

Apart from filling your profile with writing and "Reviewing On Writing.Com"  you can do so much more in contests and this September 1-7 in the Birthday Week of the site. We have existed for 24 years and are celebrating. Come and join us that week. :)

I hope you will enjoy the site. Keep on writing

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hi, Dan I Am ,

Today is the 29th of August, your Anniversary date at Writing.com. I wanted to help you celebrate until I read your latest poem Will I see her again? And I realized that there is nothing to celebrate. If I read this correctly you lost your wife recently! And I am so sorry. As a cancer survivor who recently was operated on and dodged the bullet, I do so sympathize. I got my second chance in life, but she did not. That cutie of class 1976 is no more. You two have known each other then for around 48 years? It's unimaginable to comprehend. And I understand your plea "Will I ever see her again?". As an agnostic myself I do hope so.

This poem is beautiful in its simplicity and loving strength. A testament to the woman you love.

I wish you all the best in this difficult period. Take care!

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: E | (4.5)


Hi, Chico Mahalo ,

I found this lovely tale on the Read & Review Page and got hooked by your writing style. I loved your compact, straightforward no-nonsense writing a lot. It is very appealing.

The writer took the reader by the hand in a period in his life as a commuter, therapy seeker, patient, and runner. Oh, and he visited a bar also. *Bigsmile*

The way it is described never became boring. I just wanted to read on, which is exceptional because it is a description of a normal life, the life of a city man in his fifties. Not spectacular or anything.

There were no grammar errors I could find, except for "purpous' in the sub-line. A typo? Did you mean purpose?

I am trying to read more of your work in your portfolio. Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of The Jewel Thief  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Dave Ryan ,

I found this remarkable gem of a poem on the Read & Review Page. WOW, WOW, WOW! What a wonderful funny poem. I am not surprised it won several contests. It's hilarious.

7 stanzas with funny remarks to divide them. What a treat.

I read the poem a few times and read it also out loud, it never became dull, it stayed fresh, funny, and extremely amusing!

The best lines? I'd just de-loused the camel, as some snow was on its way. And...Well off I went to wash the cat, with furrowed brow and shin. To name a few, but in a way every line of this verse hit it.

I didn't find any grammar errors, everything was as it should be. Pace, Rhythm, and Rhyme were wonderful! And the content was unexpected.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of (Untitled)  
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hi Andrew W ,

I could read your subtext in your request, although I am not sure why you would want to know that since the subtext revealed nothing much.

As did the text itself. An example of a very boring relationship!

I can see that you can write. :)

But the text itself is of no significance. Perhaps as part of a larger piece about how boring a marriage can get? No real beginning, no middle, no end whatsoever? I am not sure what I read.

For me, hopefully without being too rude, it seems as if you wanted to write something, but didn't know about what. Without a proper subject, a writer is just a handicapped reader.

Without a title, a proper subtext, or a theme that makes sense I would suggest looking at it again and adding something significant to it. Spice it up, make it happen. A boring relationship doesn't have to be boringly written.

Furthermore, the genre of Adult, as you put it, means usually sex or porn. That is not the case here. Perhaps you can change that genre as well? It also adds to the confusion.

All in all, keep on writing. And remember, this is just the opinion of one.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Korosu ,

We are both in a somewhat melancholic state of mind I would say. You wrote this beautiful poem, I started prepping my memoir in "Shivering Saudade"  [E]. Both themes are "longing", as far as I can read it.

One thing I would change: two times "wishes". Perhaps the second time change it into "seeks" instead of "wishes for" in line 4? Just a thought.

The two lines most significant for me? Does the water truly admire the lost / Does the wind seek a mast

An integral center of your poem. I truly don't know what your poem wants to tell the reader but the atmosphere is beautiful, intimate, and tranquil. And your title suggests hope.

The poet is floating on the wide ocean, contemplating the situation. But there is a shore, there is hope and a vision, although it is fading.

Keep finding words for the feelings, emotions, and thoughts you have. Thanks for sharing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Hi Korosu

An interesting and philosophical poem about identity? The words: I know not the form of a formless emotion hit me. I found the following text online:

"The idea that "formless awareness awakens to its formless nature through form" refers to a core concept in some spiritual and philosophical traditions. It suggests that the fundamental, ineffable nature of consciousness or awareness can come to recognize or realize itself through engaging with and apprehending the world of manifest form and phenomena.

The premise is that underlying all of our experience and perceptions is a primordial, non-dual awareness that is inherently formless, boundless, and devoid of any particular attributes or qualities. This awareness is said to be the most fundamental aspect of our being, the ground of consciousness from which all subjective experience arises.

However, this formless awareness often remains opaque or obscured to itself when it is solely focused on or immersed in the world of forms, shapes, and objects. It is through the very act of engaging with and making sense of these manifest forms that this underlying awareness can awaken to its own essential nature as formless, boundless, and free from all conceptual elaborations.

In other words, it is paradoxically through our encounter with the finite and phenomenal world that the infinite and unconditioned nature of consciousness can be directly realized and known. The formless can come to know itself through the forms, just as the empty can come to know its emptiness through form. This points to the non-dual, interdependent relationship between the absolute and the relative, the unconditioned and the conditioned.

Ultimately, this perspective indicates that the split between subject and object, between the self and the world, is a conceptual overlay upon a more primordial unity of being. By engaging deeply with forms and phenomena, the formless awareness at the core of our being can awaken to its own true nature, which is intrinsically free, whole, and at peace."

I immediately related this with a non-binary identity. But I could be wrong. In any case: your poem is intriguing and food for thought.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing,

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness



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Review of I Don't Know  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi, Korosu ,

Thank you for asking my opinion of this freestyle poem, but LOL, I don't know either. Although I know from the Newsfeed that you perhaps suffer from manic depression, it's impossible to conclude something based on one poem/piece of writing.

I start with stating that I like your writing style. It is bold, fresh and you ask questions, what's there not to like. One point of advice: never ever appologize for what or who you are, flaws included. Don't diminish your writing, they are always more than ramblings.

This prose poem leaves questions unanswered: what are those intrusive thoughts, can you give an exemple in your poem? Can you eleborate on the trauma you mentioned? Without those answers you hint but you don't reveal.

But I like what you are trying to do: make sense with words what is happening in your personal world with you.

And I liked what I thought was humor: that unicorn shooting lasers.

I wish you all the best, keep writing and playing with words and thoughts. They are worthy of existence. I hope you will find your own style.

Keep on writing, thanks for sharing

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness



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Review of Mirrored  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, D.K.D. ,

Brrr, what a scary and really good short flash fiction you wrote. I got goosebumps all over reading it.

No grammar errors, no distractions, it's just right as it is.

The only thing is that you better change the genres into thriller/suspense, horror/scary, and mystery for example. That way more people will bump into your story and read and review it.

Totally worth it.
Keep on writing, thanks for sharing

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of My Mind's Recess  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I yet again found this poem by your own request. A poem about memories throughout life. Why do we remember them? They profoundly impact the boy and the man later in life.

Deep within the recess of my mind.

You keep repeating this beautiful and strong line over and over, like a mantra. It creates a very nice atmosphere that ties up the poem as a whole. I loved this poem and think that you are a true poet indeed.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing poetry.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of The Wind  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Review by WakeUpAndLive


Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I found this little gem of a poem by your own request and I am glad I did. A lovely romantic love poem, small, sweet and quiet. That's how I read it anyway.

The tale can be interpreted as a little bit sad, two lovers unaware of each other, apart from each other, reminiscing and feeling blue. But also you can read it as hopeful, they love each other and there is really no need for tears. Or perhaps happy ones, that would be good also.

There is a calmness in your writing that I really enjoy. The pace and rhythm are good, and there is some end rhyme.

One thing I noticed for your consideration: I would leave the word "for" in the end sentence of the first stanza. That way the candance won't be interrupted. But that's personal.

A very sweet nicely written poem. I loved it. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of Brown Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review by WakeUpAndLive


Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I found this beautiful poem at your own request and I am glad I did.

What a sweet, simple but eloquent verse, I really loved it. Reading, or speaking out loud reveals the uniqueness of this poem. It has a warm flow, a good pace and an intimate nature.

An ode at the brown eyes of your love, what is there not to like!

4 stanzas and each one of them tells a strong tail. I personally find the second stanza very powerful: There are beautiful/ Beautiful blue eyes/ But those that are brown/ Make my heart rate rise

There are a few things I want you to look at:

* There are beautiful; consider They are beautiful (second stanza)
* My heart; consider my heart (fourth stanza)
* So long as I live; consider As long as I live (fourth stanza)

Really, a very sympathetic love poem, thank you for sharing.

Keep on writing,

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Enby_Liz ,

I found your first chapter because you asked me to review it.

This is just the thought of one person, bear that in mind. I hope you are not offended but I couldn't make head or tails of this first chapter.

You jump into a new world without any explanation, it's very hard for me as a reader to understand where I am in the story, who this main character is, and what the story is all about. In order to understand any of this perhaps you should create a prologue before this first chapter begins. That way you can explain the world-building of this fantasy. I understand this is only the first chapter, but chapters must have the capability to stand on their own.

*First of all: The thoughts of the main character must be in Italics to distinguish them.
*"...my muscles , pack it in...
*Please choose one tense throughout the story, now you jump from past to present and back.
*The sentence..."I just thought it would look nice, that's all"...what is that all about?

All in all, I didn't understand what I was reading. With a few adjustments you can change that, perhaps. I hope you will because you put a lot of effort in this chapter as you told so it's worth the try to make it more understandable so people can relate.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a super cute feature is this, The StoryMaster . I hope I can get this review out in good order. Because I really want that trinket. I want to thank you again for an awesome feature. You are a wizard. This Automatic Review Response is really fun, I hope.

Thank you, WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness
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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, The Puppet Master ,

I found your story at your own request.

An interesting supernatural story with a twist. I liked it a lot and think it has great potential to be an even better story. Because there were a few things that bothered me while reading this tale about Violet with a crush on Stan, her supervisor. She is killed in a car crash and keeps haunting Stan. With the help of a Pastor the story has a happy ending.

First of all something to do with writing techniques, namely your choice of Point of View. The POVs in this story keep shifting from Violet to Stan, back to Violet, to Stan, to Pastor Quinn and back to Violet. It is kind of muddy and distracting from the content of the story. If you don't choose an omniscent POV but want to shift your point of view during the course of the story perhaps you can make changes in the layout of the story? Either by making different paragraphs, adding blank lines in between or start the new sentence with 4 capital words so the reader is aware there is something shifting. Just a thought!

The other thing that kept distracting me from the content was the psychology of two of the characters, namely Violet's and Pastor Quinn's.

Violet has a crush on Stan, that's what you want me to believe. But the crush has to be bigger and deeper than I can read now in your story. Her passion is so great that she haunts him after death. That's huge. It would be more believable if you added some of that passion before she died so it would be more believable she would haunt him after death.

The other character Pastor Quinn has to be believable so he would do a sort of reversed exorcism, instead of taking the spirit out of a body, putting the spirit into a body (of an animal). Perhaps you can add something more to his thought process that will explain why he believes in ghosts and reversed exorcism?

Anyway, those were the distracting thoughts that kept me from diving into the story. And this story deserves to be told because it is an interesting one.

Although it's only one opinion of one reader I hope you will consider these remarks.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing,

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Peremos ,

I found this gem of a prose vignette at your own request. And I am so glad I got the chance to read and review this beautiful piece. It's a profound write about hope in difficult times, fighting the difficult battles there are.

In this day and age, I immediately had to think about the brave battle for democracy that Ukraine is fighting against Russia. I am from the Netherlands, Europe, so the borders of Ukraine are only a few hundred kilometers from my home. They are in a devastating battle against evil and can use all the hope and resilience mentioned in your write.

I found no faults or grammar errors, the flow was excellent and I loved your beautiful strong use of words. A very good read!

Thank you for sharing,

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of On The Write Path  
for entry "Ides of August " 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kåre Enga in Montana ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

The sight, smell, taste, and sound of a day in Thailand. A beautiful vignette. I am thrilled you wrote it, just because! And well in time, I am so glad!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of Adjacent to Fame  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Elisa: Middle Aged Stik ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A vignette about a train trip from Chicago to Savannah with a friend. Bunking with roommates, eating dinner. Talking. The rhythm of the train through the landscape.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of Five Women  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJean gettinPomsready ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A journey of five Native American women with beautiful names in their quest for a new land and new horizon. The casual meet with a man. A nice vignette.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Sumojo ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A drive into the country, the meeting with cows and the encounter with them. A nice vignette. I love cows! They are the most peaceful animals. But you don't want them chasing you!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of The Photograph  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A walk in the woods, the noticing of a tree, the taking of a photograph. A beautiful vignette. Your description placed me in that time frame.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Slight ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A beautiful vignette about the mesmerizing words of an alchemist about an apple. I could see it, almost taste it. The power of words.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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Review of The Long Walk  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Ryan ,

Thanks for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A vignette about a young man entering the corsetry section of a warehouse, dreading to ask for help buying women's underwear but plunging into the deep to ask help anyway. Walking the long walk toward salvation.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness


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