I was married to a man for fifteen years. I hung on because we had six children together. It was not meant to be. I let go. I found a man that.t truly loved me. It lasted thirty years..Death was the only thing that spa rated us. .I learned one thing. It takes two to love . The first man I meet was .not able of it. Whose fault was it ? I really don't care any more. It hurt like hell.. But true love helped me get over it. My kids are still hurt because Daddy could not like Momma. But they are helped By knowing love is still possible. I wanted love and it did not work out. I would rather to try that not than reject it before it could happened . Great Work. .
I love the poem. Never be quick to disbelieve another's conceptions. If they believe it, it is true to them. You can not make them believe otherwise. It may not be your right. As long as they are not jumping off buildings or trees, you know they are taking the flights in their minds. This may be a good thing. Listen to their stories of adventure and enjoy them. It may teach you a lesson on how to use your imagination to make life easier. Great work.
I love the article. Dowries are not just part of the Muslim religion. They have been a part of every civilization since the beginning of time. Most societies have realized that the dowries hurt men as well as women.. Family generations do not continue unless a man ifs married. Most men have gotten to the point where they can not support a family with out a woman's help. If it only comes down to child care, most men would go broke. women help men's world if they are just a stay home Mom. Cooking, cleaning . childcare and other things they do allow a man to enhance their lives. If anything, men should be paying the brides wife a dowry. Great work.
first the bad news:typos,
As IT begins to below (bellow).
I love the poem. I think most children suffer from nightmares. I had a fear of falling. My grandfather told me some good advice. He said to think of a good way to end the nightmares before I went to sleep. I told myself that I could fly. It worked after three nightmares. Instead of falling, I began to fly. Nightmares occur when children realize how ;little control they have over their lives. Giving them control over their dreams helps them to gain confidence to gain control over other things in their lives.
Bad News ::First: Typos,
13 Year old legs could Cary (carry) her
2 (two) other best friends
Girl friend named penny (Penny)
I love the theme of the story. All teens would like it, especially girls. Most of the experts would down. your work for the typos or the other errors. It is easier to read when you space the talking. Anything with ("s) should have a space. You have a thirteen year old lives down pretty good. Teen agers love to read about how others are dealing with their problems. Great work.
I love the poem. Spring is like a renewal.. She renews us like love does. A new bringing, It makes you feel happier, more full of energy, your brain feel clearer. Spring out in the desert is different. You don't have the green grass or the colorful flowers to make you feel better. Some things do flower, like the cactus. The weather is a little warmer. but you know the heat is coming. Many men think of women in the same way. .A woman can be warm, hot or cold.. Sometimes a man can see only a woman's beauty. Other times he sees only her faults. Great work.
I love the poem. My family has lost family member in every war since the civil war. Many bodies did not make it home. We erected headstones in the family graveyard for them all. Many did not get to be husbands, and fathers. Anyone who has lost someone in a war can relate. It does not matter the country. War is something that needs to be outdated. Now that America is losing it's wives and husbands in a war the citizens are thinking twice. Great work.
Your poem is great. It sounds like what a soul would feel if it did not leave the body after body died. In the old days many people were buried before they died. That is what this poem made me think of. That is why they insisted on embalming. Embalming will kill you for sure. The poem sent chills down my spine. Great work
I love the poem. I have had aging animals. Your heart aches as you see them age. I had a cocker spaniel for 20 years. He spent most of his time visiting the elderly in their home. We started the program when I was a police officer./. We were finding too many elderly that had died days and sometimes weeks before some one noticed. The dog's name was George. The elderly would look out their window, waiting for him to come..
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