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Review of My Sir  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
OOOO, this is a very haunting poem. The last line real gives the poem a good bite and leaves it hanging in your mind.

I noticed one typo:
"I’ve heard the crash of swords too many times"

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Review of Promise Kept  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This piece is really good, loved it. I was suprised that with the R rating that you didn't get more graphic when he was torturing his father.

I found a few typo and grammer errors. When you end a sentance with "you sick son of a b" put a coma before the you. Without the coma, it's a runon sentance. Same when you add a "huh?" to the back of a sentance. Great story!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This piece was sooooo funny. I couldn't stop laughing forever! Great Piece!

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