Wow... That was awesome, I'm a massive hermione fan so I loved it when she got to dominate harry, but I honestly enjoyed every part of this story.
I really hope their is more to come :)
You really need to check your spelling more, for example it's Malfoy not Mafloy, robe not rob, comfortable not comtforable, of not oof and many more,
also there are some in your story description.
apart from that it looks like it will be a good story, and I will change my rating if your spelling is corrected.
Just keep trying!
It's nicely written, the only suggestion I have is that the line "But the future's a mystery.", in my opinion sounds better as "But the future is a mystery.".
Apart from that I like it keep up the good work, I hope to read some more stuff from you soon.
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