This is beautiful, such a wonderful sentiment. I wish you both all the happiness in the world, i am glad you can see past star signs and superstition.
The poem itself is well written, the simplicity allows the emotions to be conveyed effectively and thus achieve it's purpose. Well done and keep on writing.
This is beautiful and the sentiment is divine. The words are so truthful and loving that its hard not to feel the love that you radiate towards your daughter. I find it very hard to be critical of such a gorgeous poem, but i am sure you would want it to be critiqued properly, so i would say that in my opinion i believe that the rhyming pattern takes away from the poem a little but other than that this is the most beautiful thing i have read in a very long time. Keep writing :)
The use of a capital letter at the start of every line does not occur on every line, if this was an intentional action i do not understand why and would advise that you are consistent in this.
This poem is very truthful and rings true, which is what a good poem should do as it links people together through the shared emotions.
The imagery of love being a crime is the first of its kind that i have come across, making it unique to you and thus very efficient in it's purpose.
The lack of end stop lines is effective as it shows a journey that is love.
Overall your poem is very well written and very enjoyable. Keep writing.
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