Beautiful. I love your style of writing, and I love how mysterious this story is. It might be better if it was clear what the whispered name was and who was whispering it. I love the way you describe Azra'il as being love, and how you describe the narrator as being scared with a chilll in her bones, but how she grew to trust Azra'il as she heard Azra'il's story. One other thing-is the narrator a boy or a girl? I've been referring to the narrator as a girl, I'm sorry if I haven't picked up on the gender of the narrator in this story. Thanks for such a touching read.
So sad... did any thing like this ever happen to you???
I love your writing - it is always so sad, and never fails to touch my heart.
I love the way that this seems so personal (even if it might not be) and how it is so easy to connect your own life with the main characters life. Thankyou for such a great poem. :)
I love it!!
the emotion combined with the rhyming in this is phenomanal. I love how this poem makes you think, and how it makes you remember a loved one that you have lost.
Great work - I hope to read a lot more poetry like this one.
This chapter isn't as great as the others, though it still intrigues me.
I suggest working on describing the place a bit more-in the moment you can't tell where the characters are much, though leaving a bit of inferring might be okay. I like how you switched perspective, but still managed to keep the new character tied in to the other characters and the story line. Great work.
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you continue to amaze me!!!!!!!!!!
sorry, i cannot really help you with the fight scene, as i am not that great at fight scenes myself. I tend to write killing scenes instead.
Well, I guess all I have for you is compliments...
Ohhhhh... so sad!!! The characters in this felt so life-like, so realistic I almost cried!
This is a story I will definitely remember for a very long time.
Sad stories usually don't make me feel sad, but this story... wow.
I love how you described both Robert and Lisas sadness.
Well done
wow...so touching! i love the style in how you wrote this, it is so personal but yet intriguing.
just a question, is 'LOVE LIFE FOREVER' meant to be written like that, or should it be written 'LOVE, LIFE(,) FOREVER' hmmm... i might be wrong-you decide
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